Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "the twilight of history and age,"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from livingwords
This is good poetry. I'm not sure what you are talking about, but it's well said. The distress of evolution of man didn't seem to fit the rest. Just my opinion. Best, Dan
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2011
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This is good poetry. I'm not sure what you are talking about, but it's well said. The distress of evolution of man didn't seem to fit the rest. Just my opinion. Best, Dan
Comment Written 12-Feb-2011
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thanks
Comment from kiwigirl2821
This has a bold bodily feel to it ... you write with wisdom but, something else too I think...there is a well of experience and thoughtfulness about this piece. Well done...I think it would be a good thing to hang out and explore things a while with you...nice write. xoxo Kiwi
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This has a bold bodily feel to it ... you write with wisdom but, something else too I think...there is a well of experience and thoughtfulness about this piece. Well done...I think it would be a good thing to hang out and explore things a while with you...nice write. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 11-Feb-2011
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thank you Kiwi
Comment from poetbear
I teach and love History so this touched me.
Incredible use of imagery and metaphor.
It makes senes and is written very well.
I like your use of poetic technique.
This needs to read and thought about carefully.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2011
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I teach and love History so this touched me.
Incredible use of imagery and metaphor.
It makes senes and is written very well.
I like your use of poetic technique.
This needs to read and thought about carefully.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2011
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thank you for the review
Comment from Mastery
This is superior poetry, deepwater. I particularly liked these lines:
"Can we now withdraw leaving you to explore the foreign but new roads of life,
How will we stand, lead us by hand as the days grow dimmer and cold."
Good job...Bob
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2011
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This is superior poetry, deepwater. I particularly liked these lines:
"Can we now withdraw leaving you to explore the foreign but new roads of life,
How will we stand, lead us by hand as the days grow dimmer and cold."
Good job...Bob
Comment Written 11-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2011
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thank you Bob
Comment from shy1250
Totally deserving of the ribbons, and I apologize for lack of a 6. All richly expressed, but the ending is the purest of poetry. 'if our paths should perchance meet, well,/ perhaps we may travel together for a time...' Beautiful and pure truth as well. No suggestions or corrections. later and God bless, shy
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Totally deserving of the ribbons, and I apologize for lack of a 6. All richly expressed, but the ending is the purest of poetry. 'if our paths should perchance meet, well,/ perhaps we may travel together for a time...' Beautiful and pure truth as well. No suggestions or corrections. later and God bless, shy
Comment Written 11-Feb-2011
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thank you shy
Comment from JW
Questions. ... More questions. ... And even more questions. ... Questions that cannot be answered. ... Questions where one ponders if they could be answered. ... Questions one wonders if they should be answered.
Great job.
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Questions. ... More questions. ... And even more questions. ... Questions that cannot be answered. ... Questions where one ponders if they could be answered. ... Questions one wonders if they should be answered.
Great job.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2011
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thank you
Comment from Rose Hearth
You started with a nice flow and rhyming scheme, then you totally changed tracks. I like the message it conveyed, but had to read it a few times to 'get it' due to the lack of continuity.
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You started with a nice flow and rhyming scheme, then you totally changed tracks. I like the message it conveyed, but had to read it a few times to 'get it' due to the lack of continuity.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2011
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no issue
Comment from L.lora
Nice and well thought out
sentiments put is a pleasant
form of a poem. I must say I'm
not fond of the format that you
use to present this but I do like
what you have to say and it flows
well. An enjoyable read. Lora
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2011
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Nice and well thought out
sentiments put is a pleasant
form of a poem. I must say I'm
not fond of the format that you
use to present this but I do like
what you have to say and it flows
well. An enjoyable read. Lora
Comment Written 11-Feb-2011
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thank you Lora
Comment from Writingfundimension
This was most moving and wonderfully creative. Your message is so important, so I am glad that so many people have viewed it. Wonderful concept and particularly touching message. Best wishes.
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This was most moving and wonderfully creative. Your message is so important, so I am glad that so many people have viewed it. Wonderful concept and particularly touching message. Best wishes.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2011
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thank you
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You're welcome.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello deepwater
good read, good philosophy with questions of what life will be like for the future generation.
Gert
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Hello deepwater
good read, good philosophy with questions of what life will be like for the future generation.
Gert
Comment Written 11-Feb-2011
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thanks Gert