Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Part Three of Chapter One"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from markk
Well written and enjoyable. Thanks for the update on your own situation as well. My thoughts are with you and I hope you get through it well. good luck and well done on this book so far.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Well written and enjoyable. Thanks for the update on your own situation as well. My thoughts are with you and I hope you get through it well. good luck and well done on this book so far.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A most enjoyable chapter,
Barbara - what some poor
women have to go through..
I've been through worse
in my earlier life,
so can relate to poor Anna.
Margaret
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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A most enjoyable chapter,
Barbara - what some poor
women have to go through..
I've been through worse
in my earlier life,
so can relate to poor Anna.
Margaret
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from RebelRose
Anna is so lucky to have someone come into her life like Troy who understands her situation. I hope she will be ready soon to let him in. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Anna is so lucky to have someone come into her life like Troy who understands her situation. I hope she will be ready soon to let him in. Great chapter.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I think Anna will need time to heal.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
Barbara, i wish you a miraculous recovery. This chapter is very well written as usual. I have tried not to miss any chapter of this book because the plot is superb. kudos
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Barbara, i wish you a miraculous recovery. This chapter is very well written as usual. I have tried not to miss any chapter of this book because the plot is superb. kudos
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Connie P
Thanks for the update on your treatment.
As for this chapter, Bobby is slime. I've known of men treating women this way and personally I would find it hard to accept (I started to say something else but decided to be nice :). I'm glad she's decided to turn to Troy, but she'll pay the price if Bobby finds out she even went to the doctor with their child.
Connie
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the update on your treatment.
As for this chapter, Bobby is slime. I've known of men treating women this way and personally I would find it hard to accept (I started to say something else but decided to be nice :). I'm glad she's decided to turn to Troy, but she'll pay the price if Bobby finds out she even went to the doctor with their child.
Connie
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bookishfabler
This was as hort one, but it is a very interesting read with no nits or spags I can see. Some people say it's blonde with an e for females and blond no e for males. I'm not sure if thats set in stone, but thought I'd pass it on.
you will be in my praers and I wish you luck with the chemo. I hope you are soon rid of that terrible desease.
hugs Book
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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This was as hort one, but it is a very interesting read with no nits or spags I can see. Some people say it's blonde with an e for females and blond no e for males. I'm not sure if thats set in stone, but thought I'd pass it on.
you will be in my praers and I wish you luck with the chemo. I hope you are soon rid of that terrible desease.
hugs Book
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Anna is married to a controlling jerk. She has a job. Only fear is keeping her from leaving. The fear is well-founded. She'd have to squirrel away enough money to leave her job and the area and go successfully into hiding if she decided to do this on her own. We know the law and courts are no practical help, and she'd be actively sought for "kidnapping" her son. Well portrayed, Barabra.
You have my prayers for a good decision on your medical treatment--whatever that constitutes--and for a rapid recovery.
:) Nancy
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Anna is married to a controlling jerk. She has a job. Only fear is keeping her from leaving. The fear is well-founded. She'd have to squirrel away enough money to leave her job and the area and go successfully into hiding if she decided to do this on her own. We know the law and courts are no practical help, and she'd be actively sought for "kidnapping" her son. Well portrayed, Barabra.
You have my prayers for a good decision on your medical treatment--whatever that constitutes--and for a rapid recovery.
:) Nancy
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from moyramouse
How can I get her (to) trust me? You used inverted commas and italics for Troy's thoughts. I think the italics work best but this is purely a personal view. However I think you should choose one way or the other.
You are developing the characters so well. We know now that Troy is genuine,;how truly bleak Anna's marriage is; what a bully Bobby is and that he doesn't care who sees it when he shouts at Anna and what an uncaring father he is, unwilling to let his son have medication because of the expense.
I shall think of you on Thursday, God Bless. xxmouse
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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How can I get her (to) trust me? You used inverted commas and italics for Troy's thoughts. I think the italics work best but this is purely a personal view. However I think you should choose one way or the other.
You are developing the characters so well. We know now that Troy is genuine,;how truly bleak Anna's marriage is; what a bully Bobby is and that he doesn't care who sees it when he shouts at Anna and what an uncaring father he is, unwilling to let his son have medication because of the expense.
I shall think of you on Thursday, God Bless. xxmouse
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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I will recheck that area, it's supposed to be italics. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from nora arjuna
Oh poor woman and child. Life can be hard for some. Check this:
Troy stepped outside. "Who's this?"
Troy took a few steps closer. "That must be her husband."
Has troy been speaking aloud here?
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Oh poor woman and child. Life can be hard for some. Check this:
Troy stepped outside. "Who's this?"
Troy took a few steps closer. "That must be her husband."
Has troy been speaking aloud here?
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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I wondered if I shouldn't switch it to thought, but then I sort of thought of it as under his breath, but said it. I need to make it more clear. Thank you.
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you can use a tag then, maybe something like 'he muttered under his breath'.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Barbara, thanks for the author note update. Hope all goes well.
This was a very sad chapter and the abuse from this brute is scary. I liked the flow of the chapter. It's time Troy steps in. Luv jada
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Hi Barbara, thanks for the author note update. Hope all goes well.
This was a very sad chapter and the abuse from this brute is scary. I liked the flow of the chapter. It's time Troy steps in. Luv jada
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continues support.