Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Part one, Chapter 8"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Freya Seerwing
Definitely deserves a six star rating. Every time I read your works I wish Fanstory had a seven star rating. As for Anna I can see her coming out of her shell now.
This was even more strongly hinted at when Troy compared to the Indian Maiden mentioned in the legend.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Definitely deserves a six star rating. Every time I read your works I wish Fanstory had a seven star rating. As for Anna I can see her coming out of her shell now.
This was even more strongly hinted at when Troy compared to the Indian Maiden mentioned in the legend.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from me_tudor
This story is really coming along nicely. I'm really glad to see Anna getting out on her own and not jumping into a relationship with Troy. She needs to learn to be strong on her own. Great job!.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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This story is really coming along nicely. I'm really glad to see Anna getting out on her own and not jumping into a relationship with Troy. She needs to learn to be strong on her own. Great job!.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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I appreciate the kind review. Thank you for reading.
Comment from smudge
Looking forward to the next chapter of this novel. The characters are developing well and the reader has empathy with Anna. Have a good vacation and good luck.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Looking forward to the next chapter of this novel. The characters are developing well and the reader has empathy with Anna. Have a good vacation and good luck.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from DionysusDeVille
I really did enjoy this read especially about the Indian folktale which was well put into the story to help convey a point to the protaganist
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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I really did enjoy this read especially about the Indian folktale which was well put into the story to help convey a point to the protaganist
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review review and insight.
Comment from Collie-Bug
Great work again, LOVE the parable of the Indian maiden! Just a couple things...
You missed a word in this sentence:
I don't KNOW how to handle all this help
In the sentence. Smells good....I would elaborate on that smell. Give us some beautiful sensory images here.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Great work again, LOVE the parable of the Indian maiden! Just a couple things...
You missed a word in this sentence:
I don't KNOW how to handle all this help
In the sentence. Smells good....I would elaborate on that smell. Give us some beautiful sensory images here.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I have made the corrections.
Comment from MS Writer
I loved the story about the "Indian Blankets". Great addition to this story. I will wait impatienty for your return to find out what happens to Anna and between her and Troy. Great read. Have a super vacation!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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I loved the story about the "Indian Blankets". Great addition to this story. I will wait impatienty for your return to find out what happens to Anna and between her and Troy. Great read. Have a super vacation!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Troy is such a lovely man...
in fact, the whole family
are... Anna is in safe hands.
I love the artwork.
I don't (know)how to handle all this help."
(")I'd better get
went to Aunt Margaret's(,) did you
Margaret
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Troy is such a lovely man...
in fact, the whole family
are... Anna is in safe hands.
I love the artwork.
I don't (know)how to handle all this help."
(")I'd better get
went to Aunt Margaret's(,) did you
Margaret
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for catching those. I have made the corrctions.
Comment from dmjones
I really liked the story behind the flower. It's true right, the first one? Anyway, a good chapter. I think Anna will get her confidence back.
I found one minor typo
She glanced at the orange outfit in her hand. (")I'd better get this in some cold water."
Have a great vacation with your children and grandchildren.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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I really liked the story behind the flower. It's true right, the first one? Anyway, a good chapter. I think Anna will get her confidence back.
I found one minor typo
She glanced at the orange outfit in her hand. (")I'd better get this in some cold water."
Have a great vacation with your children and grandchildren.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for catching those. I have made the correction. I always have fun spoiling my grandkids and then giving them back to there parents.
Comment from Cynthia Tee
Another great chapter from your book Barbara. If Anna does not have another setback then she should be just fine. Troy is doing a sterling job in helping her regain her self-esteem. Also she is getting a lot of support from his parents. Another lovely chapter very well told. I like the artwork your husband did..lovely. Enjoy your grandchildren. Warm regards, Cynthiaxxx
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Another great chapter from your book Barbara. If Anna does not have another setback then she should be just fine. Troy is doing a sterling job in helping her regain her self-esteem. Also she is getting a lot of support from his parents. Another lovely chapter very well told. I like the artwork your husband did..lovely. Enjoy your grandchildren. Warm regards, Cynthiaxxx
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and well wishes.
Comment from Sarah Parrish
Very nice! Oh, the tension! They're going to get together - I just know it. I wonder what his inner demons are to provide the conflict on his side that he'll have to overcome... Exciting! And I wonder how he thinks of Michael...
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Very nice! Oh, the tension! They're going to get together - I just know it. I wonder what his inner demons are to provide the conflict on his side that he'll have to overcome... Exciting! And I wonder how he thinks of Michael...
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.