The Animal Doctor
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Comment from adewpearl
You introduce you main character effectively
coach came near, reminded - I would drop the comma
Good use of natural-sounding dialogue
a most imaginative story :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 15-May-2013
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You introduce you main character effectively
coach came near, reminded - I would drop the comma
Good use of natural-sounding dialogue
a most imaginative story :-) Brooke
Comment Written 15-May-2013
reply by the author on 15-May-2013
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Thanks Brook. I had a heck of a time getting it up and it's still not right. It is a short story, but it's long and I wanted to do it in book form so I could make chapters. But the darn technology of the site won't like me.
Comment from c_lucas
Ranch means animals--"Animal-ranch" is redundant. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Ranch means animals--"Animal-ranch" is redundant. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Please don't review my work. I don't know why it's being shown. I haven't edited it yet. It's not ready. Please don't review yet. "
thank you lucas.
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Down at the bottom of the editing page before you get to Save is a dialogue box "Preview" Clic it before you click save than every time you click save, It will save it in the preview mode. You will be the only one to seen it. When you are ready to post, click "End Preview" and flow the instructions.
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Yeah, I did, but something was off and it didn't work. I've posted many times, but lately I've been having this problem. I wrote Tom, but I got no help. But thanks. Can you see it now? I hope not, it's a mess and not ready for viewing. None of my dashes transfered. But any, thanks.
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If you receive no response from Tom. Contact him again. You may also want to seek help on the forum. Your post is posted paying 10 points and $1,08
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, amahra, you did an excellent job writing this story about the man that started his veterinarian career with a bang and was let down by the small procedures after that. it should be champagne instead of champaign
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reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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this is very well written, amahra, you did an excellent job writing this story about the man that started his veterinarian career with a bang and was let down by the small procedures after that. it should be champagne instead of champaign
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Comment Written 14-May-2013
reply by the author on 14-May-2013
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Thank you but this is not the name of this story. I'm having problems posting.