The Animal Doctor
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Comment from robina1978
The man that is studying to be a vet falls in love with Margaret. He is so happy and they even kissed. The he was called to her father's house under false pretenses. He was never allowed to marry his daughter. Later he says to his daughter she can but she'll be banned from coming home. Nathan does not understand but for the time being has to accept.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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The man that is studying to be a vet falls in love with Margaret. He is so happy and they even kissed. The he was called to her father's house under false pretenses. He was never allowed to marry his daughter. Later he says to his daughter she can but she'll be banned from coming home. Nathan does not understand but for the time being has to accept.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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Thank you robina.
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most welcome, Ine
Comment from alexgeorge
I love the imagery you evoked with the butterflies approaching the children's fingers and then fluttering away. And I thought your use of smell in 'it smelled of rosemary-mint unguents' was very clever. You are right about this entry being long...but I just kept on reading it, drawn to every word. You are a very talented writer, Amahra.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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I love the imagery you evoked with the butterflies approaching the children's fingers and then fluttering away. And I thought your use of smell in 'it smelled of rosemary-mint unguents' was very clever. You are right about this entry being long...but I just kept on reading it, drawn to every word. You are a very talented writer, Amahra.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much alexgeorge for this wonderful review.
Comment from c_lucas
Love is more than just two people enjoying each other company. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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Love is more than just two people enjoying each other company. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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Thank you lucas.
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You're welcome, Amahra. Charlie
Comment from G.B. Smith
OH Amahra
This is such a electrifying chapter. I never did understand people like Margaret's family. I have been in that situation and watched her leave because I was not wealthy enough. 30 years later I saw her and her eight children. She was drawn out and gaunt and he had left her for another woman. I had the means but now my tradition forbade me from going to her. Sometimes it just don't pay to climb outta bed in the morning
Bear
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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OH Amahra
This is such a electrifying chapter. I never did understand people like Margaret's family. I have been in that situation and watched her leave because I was not wealthy enough. 30 years later I saw her and her eight children. She was drawn out and gaunt and he had left her for another woman. I had the means but now my tradition forbade me from going to her. Sometimes it just don't pay to climb outta bed in the morning
Bear
Comment Written 05-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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Well I'm glad you climbed out Bear. Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my story.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very good chapter. He is better off without her, because she's been raised in luxury and ease and couldn't adjust to a harsher life, even for a while. She couldn't give up her mother for him either. It's just the way it is, and she understands that. Nate will find someone more suited to him, I hope.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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Very good chapter. He is better off without her, because she's been raised in luxury and ease and couldn't adjust to a harsher life, even for a while. She couldn't give up her mother for him either. It's just the way it is, and she understands that. Nate will find someone more suited to him, I hope.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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Thank you Phyllis. I'm glad you found it realistic.
Comment from Shirley B
Great job. This is Romeo and Juliet country style. I hope it works out for them. You had my attention from beginning to end. I didn't feel like it was too long. Great storytelling ability you have here. :) I can't wait until the next chapter, Shirley
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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Great job. This is Romeo and Juliet country style. I hope it works out for them. You had my attention from beginning to end. I didn't feel like it was too long. Great storytelling ability you have here. :) I can't wait until the next chapter, Shirley
Comment Written 04-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much Shirley. I'll be writing the next one soon. Thank you for hanging in there with this one. And thank you so much for the stars.
Comment from Sam Mendonca
Looks like Nate will have to become a famous Doctor and then it will be too late for Margaret.
A very well written story-line with great usage of wording.
Looking for to the next chapter to see where you take the story-line from this point. :D
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Looks like Nate will have to become a famous Doctor and then it will be too late for Margaret.
A very well written story-line with great usage of wording.
Looking for to the next chapter to see where you take the story-line from this point. :D
Comment Written 04-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Thank you Sam.
Comment from mohiro
This is a work of prose which requires a great mixture of narrative and dialogue for the readers attention to be sustained. You did that well. Your prose was profuse yet I read through. The piece is challenging. Your simplicity is very obvious. Your characterization is good. Your prose is believable. Keep up the good work.
Best regards,
Mohiro.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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This is a work of prose which requires a great mixture of narrative and dialogue for the readers attention to be sustained. You did that well. Your prose was profuse yet I read through. The piece is challenging. Your simplicity is very obvious. Your characterization is good. Your prose is believable. Keep up the good work.
Best regards,
Mohiro.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much mohiro for this fine review.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer uses good transition between the events and uses a consistent and intense pace. The reader can feel the emotions through the words as the writer does a good job of taking the reader where the reader needs to go.
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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The writer uses good transition between the events and uses a consistent and intense pace. The reader can feel the emotions through the words as the writer does a good job of taking the reader where the reader needs to go.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Thank you Riter for stopping by and reading my dear.