Comment from manicblue

Excellent

This was and achingly yet tender tribute to the loss of those who have been together for years but one is at a loss when a life-partner goes first.
The artwork was so telling. My neighbor had been married for 40 long and happy years when he died a few weeks ago.
Again, this read so well even through the pain. Blessings to you.
Lucretia

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you, Lucretia. I certainly appreciate your complimentary review.

Comment from lancellot

Exceptional

There will be no one screaming after reading this sad little tale. It is a sad tale that happens all too often. You spend your life with another and it doesn't seem like life without them. Great work.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Lance. You're right, my father-in-law hasn't been much the same since he lost his wife in August of 2012. They'd been together for almost forty years. On second thought, none of us have been the same after her passing. Such a loving, kind and giving person she was.

Thanks again, my friend!

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

Oh no, this poem won't bring any screams, Dean. It's so true to life in many ways. When you have lived with someone for so many years, life alone is unthinkable. Everyone will enjoy this excellent rhyming and meter and overall a poem with a great tale to tell. I also enjoyed your author notes and learnt something. Giddy

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you, Giddy. I'm just very glad that you enjoyed it, my friend. Pleasant Screams is like my FanStory signature. It's on most anything I write, unless it is a contest entry, of course.

Comment from Tegan1311

Excellent

A very well written poem. Your words flow smoothly, your message clear and easy to understand. Though your poem is sad, it's not overly so and I can see how others might make this darker (although I'm glad yours isn't) One spelling mistake (I think) Paragraph 4 from the bottom, line one: "Straing" should be "Staring"

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thanks very much for the review, Tegan1311, and for catching that typo for me. If I only had a nickle...

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This has beautiful rhyme and meter and pulls the reader along to the end of the story. The author's notes are helpful Art work is fabulous.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you, seaglass. This one took a turn from what was originally supposed to be a horror poem, to a more spiritual aspect. But, that happens sometimes.

Thanks for the excellent review.

Comment from baustian64

Exceptional

I read this over several times and then ran it off. It is so touching and beautiful. Shows what true love really is. Not much of that these days. I love it. I lost my husband 2 years ago. I really can relate to what this person is feeling.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you so much for your heartfelt response, baustin64. I am truly sorry for your loss. Thanks for the excellent rating as well.

Comment from Alan K Pease

Exceptional

A lovely and sensitive poem about a man who sees his time has come and as a last tribute to his wife and her part in his life he carves her image. You have explained the width and breadth of the term "graven image" very well.

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thanks very much, Alan. I'm so glad you liked it, my friend.

Comment from freepass

Excellent

A very good poem
And it rhymed
Well I see nothing wrong with it
So I will give it
5 very big stars*****
I didn't count how many lines but it is tough to rhyme all of those ..
I rhymed 15 once here lol!
I now have 4 up...

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Hah, yeah, it takes a bit of practice, for sure, freepass. But, it was written for the Quatrain Poetry Contest here on FS. I knew it had to be right.

Thanks for the fine review.

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

DON'T GO OUT SIDE AT NIGHT
YOU MIGHT GET A AWFUL FRIGHT
DEAN IS SNEAKING OUT AT NIGHT
HE THINKS HE IS BEING SO BRIGHT
HE IS SPOOKING EVVERYONE TONIGHT
HEIS THE ONE WHO IS GOING TO FIGHT
TO SAVE HIMSELF FROM THE AWFUL SIGHT
DON'T GO OUT SIDE AT NIGHT TONIGHT

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Ha ha, thank for such a poetic reply, country ranch writer. It was very entertaining!---:>D

reply by country ranch writer on 21-Jun-2014

I JUST HAD TO TICKLE YOUR RIBS SINCE I LET MY ZOMBIE HORSES OUT HE HE

reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

8>}

reply by country ranch writer on 21-Jun-2014

SMILES AND SMILES AND HAHAHAHAHAH'S

Comment from BLACKDYKE

Excellent

Dreamy in places, practical in others
Dean. A very pleasant read which keeps
the reader occupied to the very end.
And the very end is where we find our
selves. The authors notes help to explain your thinking, and tell us the
factual side. Eric

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014

Thank you, Eric. I appreciate you taking time out to read and review the poem for me.

reply by BLACKDYKE on 21-Jun-2014

My pleasure.