The Kiss
composed after a visit to the Rodin Museum in Paris67 total reviews
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
=> Always a pleasure to read one of your sonnets That offers much to the imagination and brings into light the mystical concepts from the context of your poem.
=> It is fun to unleash unlock the mysteries of your assignment and to dine on the conceptual themes well written and produced inception.
=>I always find new rhyming that is very hard, colloquially, to have words pronounced in the right way to make a perfect rhyme. In many different nations have different dialects and exposed the different sounds from different words that are pronounced.
=> I think you you have threaded on the border when it comes to two of the four the words in your writing which are The words "alarm" and "form". If one were to make it actually to work then form would actually be a farm. But I understand the pronunciations could make it such it would be also confusing for the listener.
=>As with such words as "adore" and "awe". In this particular circumstance, I find no "R" in the word that rhymes within it.
=>Yeah I'm just a nitpicker when it comments to rhyming but I do understand the colloquial pronunciations can differ from areas of the world.
=>I can see with that picture so developing ideas that can formulate a beautiful poem such as yours.
=>It must've been beautiful being there, Tony, I mean being at the Rodin Museum in Paris. Wow!
=> Thank you so much for having posting this, Tony, take care and have a good on my poem and stay warm down there. Chuckle!
Alx
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Cheers, Tony;
=> Always a pleasure to read one of your sonnets That offers much to the imagination and brings into light the mystical concepts from the context of your poem.
=> It is fun to unleash unlock the mysteries of your assignment and to dine on the conceptual themes well written and produced inception.
=>I always find new rhyming that is very hard, colloquially, to have words pronounced in the right way to make a perfect rhyme. In many different nations have different dialects and exposed the different sounds from different words that are pronounced.
=> I think you you have threaded on the border when it comes to two of the four the words in your writing which are The words "alarm" and "form". If one were to make it actually to work then form would actually be a farm. But I understand the pronunciations could make it such it would be also confusing for the listener.
=>As with such words as "adore" and "awe". In this particular circumstance, I find no "R" in the word that rhymes within it.
=>Yeah I'm just a nitpicker when it comments to rhyming but I do understand the colloquial pronunciations can differ from areas of the world.
=>I can see with that picture so developing ideas that can formulate a beautiful poem such as yours.
=>It must've been beautiful being there, Tony, I mean being at the Rodin Museum in Paris. Wow!
=> Thank you so much for having posting this, Tony, take care and have a good on my poem and stay warm down there. Chuckle!
Alx
=>
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thanks very much for your review, Alex, and comments about the slant rhymes. Always good to hear from you. I appreciate your support and kind words. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Bucketlist
You are a very cultured, well read poet in my opinion,. Your poetry has a special quality that's hard to beat. Rodin would be proud of your "Kiss" penning.thanks for sharing and I wish you success in the contest.
Hugs, Trisha
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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You are a very cultured, well read poet in my opinion,. Your poetry has a special quality that's hard to beat. Rodin would be proud of your "Kiss" penning.thanks for sharing and I wish you success in the contest.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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What a very kind review, Trisha. Thank you for the excellent rating and stars. Most affirming. Best wishes, Tony.
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It?s truth from my heart and you are welcome
Comment from Artasylum
This is a lovely love story TFAWCUS... And what better way than The Kiss as a vehicle. It is beautiful written and a great entry for a Love Poem Poetry contest. Thanks so much yours, diana
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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This is a lovely love story TFAWCUS... And what better way than The Kiss as a vehicle. It is beautiful written and a great entry for a Love Poem Poetry contest. Thanks so much yours, diana
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thanks very much for your review, Artasylum. Always good to hear from you. I appreciate your support and kind words. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hello, Tony.
This is a well penned, lovely poetic portrayal of that most famous of statues, The Kiss, by French artist and sculptor, Auguste Rodin.
I could see why new lovers might blush while catching a glimpse of this, but I've always felt the human body was an intricate work of art in and of itself.
Well rhymed, great meter--well done, sir!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Hello, Tony.
This is a well penned, lovely poetic portrayal of that most famous of statues, The Kiss, by French artist and sculptor, Auguste Rodin.
I could see why new lovers might blush while catching a glimpse of this, but I've always felt the human body was an intricate work of art in and of itself.
Well rhymed, great meter--well done, sir!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thanks very much for your review, Dean. Always good to hear from you. I appreciate your support and kind words. Best wishes, Tony.
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You're welcome, Tony.
Comment from Phillip C Kuhn
Excellent and spellbinding is this piece, it's worded in such a way that it makes the reader go into a romantic trance, it was just as elegant as the statue in the image, great piece
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Excellent and spellbinding is this piece, it's worded in such a way that it makes the reader go into a romantic trance, it was just as elegant as the statue in the image, great piece
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thanks very much for your review, Phillip. Always good to hear from you. I appreciate your support and kind words. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from estory
Very nicely done, with great musical lines, I loved all the alliterations, the echoing rhymes, the rhythms of this piece. Nice images. I love Rodin. One of my favorite sculptors; here in Raleigh they have a big collection. I think you captured the moment of two people kissing in public, a little shy, a little oblivious to the world around them, lost in the hormones. estory
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Very nicely done, with great musical lines, I loved all the alliterations, the echoing rhymes, the rhythms of this piece. Nice images. I love Rodin. One of my favorite sculptors; here in Raleigh they have a big collection. I think you captured the moment of two people kissing in public, a little shy, a little oblivious to the world around them, lost in the hormones. estory
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thanks very much for your review, estory. Always good to hear from you. I appreciate your support and kind words. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Gloria ....
A perfect sonnet, and a terrific departure from romantic love that is often the subject of a love poem contest. Beautiful images throughout and the interplay of balance between the two arcing forces brings this to life.
Great job and best wishes to you in the contest, Tony.
Gloria
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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A perfect sonnet, and a terrific departure from romantic love that is often the subject of a love poem contest. Beautiful images throughout and the interplay of balance between the two arcing forces brings this to life.
Great job and best wishes to you in the contest, Tony.
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thanks very much for your review, Gloria. Always good to hear from you. I appreciate your support and kind words. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from mountainwriter49
HI Tony,
Rodin is quite the artist. I was fortunate to see an exhibit of his work in Richmond, VA a couple of years ago. I can truly appreciate how his work would inspire poetry.
Your poem is wonderfully penned with flowing meter, beautiful phrasing, and effective enjambment. The closing couplet is perfectly penned.
I was surprised when you departed from the rhyme pattern established in the first quatrain and did not pick up rhyme again until the end of the poem.
This is an excellent entry in the contest and I wish you well in the judging booth.
-Ray
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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HI Tony,
Rodin is quite the artist. I was fortunate to see an exhibit of his work in Richmond, VA a couple of years ago. I can truly appreciate how his work would inspire poetry.
Your poem is wonderfully penned with flowing meter, beautiful phrasing, and effective enjambment. The closing couplet is perfectly penned.
I was surprised when you departed from the rhyme pattern established in the first quatrain and did not pick up rhyme again until the end of the poem.
This is an excellent entry in the contest and I wish you well in the judging booth.
-Ray
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thanks very much for your review, Ray, and for the affirmation of a sixth star. Always good to hear from you. I appreciate your support and kind words. I?ve had a few comments about the near rhymes! It seems that they are not all that close on the western side of the pond! All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Ginnygray
A lovely poetic testament to describe a famous artwork classic in a museum in Paris! Now, he has a poetic word to accompany such a famous sculpture. Brilliant writing Tony!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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A lovely poetic testament to describe a famous artwork classic in a museum in Paris! Now, he has a poetic word to accompany such a famous sculpture. Brilliant writing Tony!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thanks very much for your review, Ginnygray. Always good to hear from you. I appreciate your support and kind words. Best wishes, Tony.
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You are welcome. Well deserved poem!
Comment from damommy
I've not read anything this beautiful in a while, Tony. Your poem is as much a work of art as the sculpture it's about.
When I read it aloud, it seemed to flow off the tongue. I like the part about carillons being so high in the steeple that they shake the sky. Also, it was sweet about the shy lovers (is anyone shy these days?) Nice touch.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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I've not read anything this beautiful in a while, Tony. Your poem is as much a work of art as the sculpture it's about.
When I read it aloud, it seemed to flow off the tongue. I like the part about carillons being so high in the steeple that they shake the sky. Also, it was sweet about the shy lovers (is anyone shy these days?) Nice touch.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thanks very much for your lovely review, Yvonne. Always good to hear from you. I appreciate your support and kind words. Many thanks, too, for the six stars. Best wishes, Tony.