Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 20 word poem you have penned with very good descriptive words. That art work you chose was beautiful and went so well with your words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. I didn't see any errors. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
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This is a very well written 20 word poem you have penned with very good descriptive words. That art work you chose was beautiful and went so well with your words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. I didn't see any errors. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Teri, thank you for the good wishes!
Comment from Therese Caron
Wonderful 20 syllable poem! Your words are very smooth and flow so nicely. The image you chose is stunning, and really complements your writing. I also like the rhyme scheme you used. Good luck in the contest!
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Wonderful 20 syllable poem! Your words are very smooth and flow so nicely. The image you chose is stunning, and really complements your writing. I also like the rhyme scheme you used. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Therese, thank you for the good wishes!
Comment from Gail Denham
Nice poem - I too love the water (altho I've made the mistake of turning my back on waves, maybe two-three times) - but one of my life rules is "if I'm near water that's safe, I wade"
I like your idea of wading - and the thoughts that come from that.
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Nice poem - I too love the water (altho I've made the mistake of turning my back on waves, maybe two-three times) - but one of my life rules is "if I'm near water that's safe, I wade"
I like your idea of wading - and the thoughts that come from that.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Gail, thank you, this was truly a 2:30 AM dream that needed to written down.
Comment from Malerie
Very visual; your words give a vivid picture and the artwork you selected really bring your words to light. Good 20 Word Poem entry. Good luck in the contest.
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Very visual; your words give a vivid picture and the artwork you selected really bring your words to light. Good 20 Word Poem entry. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Malerie, thank you, this was truly a 2:30 AM dream that needed to written down.
Comment from Boogienights
This is so creative and interesting. Dreams are fascinating aren't they? So much can happen in them, that you wouldn't think of in waking life. It would be great to control them. Best of luck in the contest.
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This is so creative and interesting. Dreams are fascinating aren't they? So much can happen in them, that you wouldn't think of in waking life. It would be great to control them. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Yes they certainly are, this one wakened me at 2:30am. I had to write about it. Smiling back!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I liked this poem working up to the last line as we are caught in another world and have the relief of waking up, I could identify with your words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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I liked this poem working up to the last line as we are caught in another world and have the relief of waking up, I could identify with your words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Dolly, exactly how I felt awakening at 2:30am from this dream and putting into verse.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Very nicely done for the 20 word poem contest. It is full of imagery and the rhyming is done with ease. Reads like a story and is very strong . Loved the whole piece
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Very nicely done for the 20 word poem contest. It is full of imagery and the rhyming is done with ease. Reads like a story and is very strong . Loved the whole piece
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Barb, I appreciate your validation in this work- Thank you!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Yes, that's how it is often. Sleeping, dreaming, waking up, all through the night. You say it well. The nights are full of strange dreams and sometimes when we awaken we cannot fall back asleep for thinking. I'm not sure if this is your message but it is what my mind conjures when I read your words.
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Yes, that's how it is often. Sleeping, dreaming, waking up, all through the night. You say it well. The nights are full of strange dreams and sometimes when we awaken we cannot fall back asleep for thinking. I'm not sure if this is your message but it is what my mind conjures when I read your words.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Raffealina, precisely what transpired at 2:30am. Got up and wrote for two hours, so glad I?m retired to survive these type of nights.
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Wow, now I don't feel so weird getting up at 3 a.m. to write a poem. Good to know.
Comment from Ogden
This is an excellent 20-word depiction of the images remembered from a pleasant dream, upon waking.
Here's hoping you are rewarded in the contest!
Ogden Don)
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This is an excellent 20-word depiction of the images remembered from a pleasant dream, upon waking.
Here's hoping you are rewarded in the contest!
Ogden Don)
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Don, I always appreciate your validation, thanks.
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You're very welcome, J!
Don
Comment from estory
I think you did a great job in creating this sense of the stream of consciousness in the alliterations and rhythm and echoing rhyme effects; we really feel the flow of movement in the language. The vision itself is elusive; much like a dream. It could maybe use some kind of poetic image, to reveal a suggestion maybe, of what that vision is that seems so important. All you need to give is a suggestion. Let the reader fill in the blanks estory
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I think you did a great job in creating this sense of the stream of consciousness in the alliterations and rhythm and echoing rhyme effects; we really feel the flow of movement in the language. The vision itself is elusive; much like a dream. It could maybe use some kind of poetic image, to reveal a suggestion maybe, of what that vision is that seems so important. All you need to give is a suggestion. Let the reader fill in the blanks estory
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the insight.