Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Quest"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from JB Lynn
"Only to survive to see another moonlit night alone," - Loved this line so much! I think it speaks both to the day to day struggle and also the hope that maybe, eventually, those moonless nights won't be faced alone.
"And to be able to say, I am my best friend," - Are you certain you need the first "to" in this line? It feels redundant to me and the line reads smoother without it. Just something to consider.
Thank you for sharing.
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"Only to survive to see another moonlit night alone," - Loved this line so much! I think it speaks both to the day to day struggle and also the hope that maybe, eventually, those moonless nights won't be faced alone.
"And to be able to say, I am my best friend," - Are you certain you need the first "to" in this line? It feels redundant to me and the line reads smoother without it. Just something to consider.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from L.M.Mullins
Excellent and well crafted free verse that flows easily all the way to the end. Your message is present well by the accompanying picture.
LM
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Excellent and well crafted free verse that flows easily all the way to the end. Your message is present well by the accompanying picture.
LM
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from Terror2s
This was lovely. Few people ever sound as content as the words in this piece. The picture complemented your words nicely too. Terror
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This was lovely. Few people ever sound as content as the words in this piece. The picture complemented your words nicely too. Terror
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from bilzo
This a great summation of a life well spent. Your message flows consistently throughout and represents real emotions that are easy to identify with. Well Done.
Bill
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This a great summation of a life well spent. Your message flows consistently throughout and represents real emotions that are easy to identify with. Well Done.
Bill
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from Tegan1311
A very well written poem. Your words flow well and the message clear and easy to understand. I especially like the late line of living a life that was your own choice. Very true :)
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A very well written poem. Your words flow well and the message clear and easy to understand. I especially like the late line of living a life that was your own choice. Very true :)
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from dennis0530
The author is writing about loving oneself and loving life and being independent. WE are encouraged to go "as a pilgrim" and be ready to meet difficulties.
In spite of our need for company and friends, we have to occasionally be alone with our thoughts. This is our own time for meditation and introspection.
If we are self-reliant, then even in old age we can be content knowing that we went through life without impositions.
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The author is writing about loving oneself and loving life and being independent. WE are encouraged to go "as a pilgrim" and be ready to meet difficulties.
In spite of our need for company and friends, we have to occasionally be alone with our thoughts. This is our own time for meditation and introspection.
If we are self-reliant, then even in old age we can be content knowing that we went through life without impositions.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from boxergirl
We all seek to find ourselves in different avenues. It takes a lot of courage to let loose and search in unknown avenues not sure of what is around the corner, but at the end of the day, it feels good to know you did it your way.
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We all seek to find ourselves in different avenues. It takes a lot of courage to let loose and search in unknown avenues not sure of what is around the corner, but at the end of the day, it feels good to know you did it your way.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from livelylinda
deepwater: your words are always a soothing salve to my soul. They lift me up above the daily disturbances even as they seek deeper meaning and understanding. Keep writing and this poet will keep reading. Linda
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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deepwater: your words are always a soothing salve to my soul. They lift me up above the daily disturbances even as they seek deeper meaning and understanding. Keep writing and this poet will keep reading. Linda
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Thanks Linda
Comment from kiwijenny
This appeals....living a life of my own choice...go as a pilgrim and seek out your own quest....simple response to life...but has epic possibilities...
Well done.........................................
God bless
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This appeals....living a life of my own choice...go as a pilgrim and seek out your own quest....simple response to life...but has epic possibilities...
Well done.........................................
God bless
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
Comment from BLACKDYKE
profound statements are eye openings
to me Deepwater. This is more profound
than most. I also like the simplicity
of the posting and the clear presentation.
Know thyself and thy expectations, is
the best advice. Eric
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profound statements are eye openings
to me Deepwater. This is more profound
than most. I also like the simplicity
of the posting and the clear presentation.
Know thyself and thy expectations, is
the best advice. Eric
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014