Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "storm warning"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from ravenblack
You capture the tempest well in this piece, those monstrous waves splintering your craft and leaving you to drown. Why do I get the feeling that you lived this?
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You capture the tempest well in this piece, those monstrous waves splintering your craft and leaving you to drown. Why do I get the feeling that you lived this?
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a poignant poem of those last moments and the world beyond for seafarers lost to the tumult. It seems to catch the fury of the sea and the plight of the lone seaman against nature's strongest force. Good read.
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This is a poignant poem of those last moments and the world beyond for seafarers lost to the tumult. It seems to catch the fury of the sea and the plight of the lone seaman against nature's strongest force. Good read.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
Comment from Ric Myworld
This is an experience that I'd rather enjoy from your words, than to suffer as a helpless sailor out on the seas. I felt the panic, and I'm so glad it's not real. I'll fresh up my coffee and be thankful for the read. Great job. :-)
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This is an experience that I'd rather enjoy from your words, than to suffer as a helpless sailor out on the seas. I felt the panic, and I'm so glad it's not real. I'll fresh up my coffee and be thankful for the read. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
Comment from Petriesan
danger has passed me, I'm out of fight,--good line. int he real life of mine, I find that mu ability to fight, often dies before ethe danger is past. I love your pictures.
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danger has passed me, I'm out of fight,--good line. int he real life of mine, I find that mu ability to fight, often dies before ethe danger is past. I love your pictures.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
Comment from His Grayness
Dear deepwater: clearly this deserve the maximum six stars which I'm not in possession of at this moment...as I reel from sharing this awesome experience you have so very well presented in the great poem. Awesome work! HIS GRAYNESS Vance
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Dear deepwater: clearly this deserve the maximum six stars which I'm not in possession of at this moment...as I reel from sharing this awesome experience you have so very well presented in the great poem. Awesome work! HIS GRAYNESS Vance
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
Comment from skye
Melancholy and filled with high tension and imagery. The sea captures and keeps those that sail upon her waters.
Your poem is filled with many details that keep the reader engaged. Love the interior rhymes.
Great story poem.
Excellent.
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Melancholy and filled with high tension and imagery. The sea captures and keeps those that sail upon her waters.
Your poem is filled with many details that keep the reader engaged. Love the interior rhymes.
Great story poem.
Excellent.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very well written and deeply meaningful poem. I don't think I have read your work until today, but both of these are really awesome and I look forward to reading many more. Take care, my friend~Debbie
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A very well written and deeply meaningful poem. I don't think I have read your work until today, but both of these are really awesome and I look forward to reading many more. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
Comment from Sefiros
I like the rhyme scheme. I would capitalize the beginning of each line to give it some impact. Other than that some good rhymes. good job.
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I like the rhyme scheme. I would capitalize the beginning of each line to give it some impact. Other than that some good rhymes. good job.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
Comment from daymanrayne
I love how you detail every action in this and especially loved the picture for it. I thought it was great to add the boat to it sailing away.
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I love how you detail every action in this and especially loved the picture for it. I thought it was great to add the boat to it sailing away.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014
Comment from Bryan G
I love this exciting but sad sea story. I love to read about sailing. You have rekindled the fire to feel the wind and the waves. Your poem reminds me of "The Perfect Storm". Well done.
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I love this exciting but sad sea story. I love to read about sailing. You have rekindled the fire to feel the wind and the waves. Your poem reminds me of "The Perfect Storm". Well done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2014