Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Chapter 4 Part one"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from bowls
Once again, I'm delighted with the story. You've advanced it just enough to make your reader feel that progress is being made but not so much that it seems rushed. I liked the new step in the development of the relationship and also the delicate details of character revelation of the two main characters. It was nice that you focused on just the two of them so your readers could have a richer experience of them as they react to one another. Bring on the next bit!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Once again, I'm delighted with the story. You've advanced it just enough to make your reader feel that progress is being made but not so much that it seems rushed. I liked the new step in the development of the relationship and also the delicate details of character revelation of the two main characters. It was nice that you focused on just the two of them so your readers could have a richer experience of them as they react to one another. Bring on the next bit!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your comments. Once in awhile I get a reviewer who wants more details about the other people and I wonder why they have nothing to do with the story except maybe bring coffee.
Comment from Monte Carbolic
You continue to stray away from the cliched romance story and give your reader a fresh, original take on the genre here. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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You continue to stray away from the cliched romance story and give your reader a fresh, original take on the genre here. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Rama Rao
Excellent. The story is moving along fine.
I liked the way Sara checked his ID and other documents and said there was no warning to a woman. I also liked the last line regarding the announcement Joe made to the town people before kissing Sara. They were original concepts and not seen in any other books. I liked the humor too.
As usual a great Job.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Excellent. The story is moving along fine.
I liked the way Sara checked his ID and other documents and said there was no warning to a woman. I also liked the last line regarding the announcement Joe made to the town people before kissing Sara. They were original concepts and not seen in any other books. I liked the humor too.
As usual a great Job.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from menachem
Finally! I'm glad to see they're finally addressing the issues!
Did Sara have a watch or not, I'm slightly confused?
Take care!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Finally! I'm glad to see they're finally addressing the issues!
Did Sara have a watch or not, I'm slightly confused?
Take care!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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No, Sara didn't have a watch, she used Joe's. I'm glad to hear from you.
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Yeah, I've been kind of uninspired. But, I'm putting something up.
Who knows, maybe it's back.
Thanks, though. It's nice to know people are looking out for me. :)
Comment from jmdg1954
This has the makings of a very good chapter. I liked the lines about the cell phone companies making a fortune after they left the reunion. Another good chapter. I normally (not normally, never) read a romance novel, but since I started reading yours, I've enjoyed it, although it probably won't change my mind on these novels. Keep up the fine writing! John
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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This has the makings of a very good chapter. I liked the lines about the cell phone companies making a fortune after they left the reunion. Another good chapter. I normally (not normally, never) read a romance novel, but since I started reading yours, I've enjoyed it, although it probably won't change my mind on these novels. Keep up the fine writing! John
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your review and sticking with me. I just had another male reviewer say the same thing. I appreciate you sticking with me.
Comment from BeautifulLie
Haha! I liked the last bit. I imagine she was blushing xD Good work as always! Loving the story. I wonder what will happen when he has to leave.. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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Haha! I liked the last bit. I imagine she was blushing xD Good work as always! Loving the story. I wonder what will happen when he has to leave.. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate you sticking with me.
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
Aha...he is also an extrodinaire. Lol! Well done on the presentation, Barb. I saw the one idiot's review--"weak characters"--and wished you'd have let him have it.
Anyway, I'm not much into Romance either, but every genre teaches a writer something. Your characters are NEVER weak, and your stories aren't the typical romance either. Lol! Good job.
Isaiah
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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Aha...he is also an extrodinaire. Lol! Well done on the presentation, Barb. I saw the one idiot's review--"weak characters"--and wished you'd have let him have it.
Anyway, I'm not much into Romance either, but every genre teaches a writer something. Your characters are NEVER weak, and your stories aren't the typical romance either. Lol! Good job.
Isaiah
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. I checked his profile. I think he's now off the site. Thank you,
Comment from MitchellScott
Ok, Barbara, I am going to award you with my "Oh Bollox" complement. You get this because I am reading your romantic story and enjoying it. Seriously though, it's pretty good.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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Ok, Barbara, I am going to award you with my "Oh Bollox" complement. You get this because I am reading your romantic story and enjoying it. Seriously though, it's pretty good.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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Thank you for sticking with me, for that you get a virtual hug. I do appreciate it. I have quite a few men fans, I am not sure why, but I do. Sincerely thank you.
Comment from patwannabe
barbara, this is a very cute chapter. I love the shout at the end. Joe Barnes is a very remarkable fellow and I could go for someone like that, too. I may be old, but I'm not dead yet.
I found no SPaG, good sentence structure and flow. Thank you, pat
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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barbara, this is a very cute chapter. I love the shout at the end. Joe Barnes is a very remarkable fellow and I could go for someone like that, too. I may be old, but I'm not dead yet.
I found no SPaG, good sentence structure and flow. Thank you, pat
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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I agree, where the men like him when I was looking? OH yea, he's a a figment of my imagination. DARN!!!! Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from fictionwriter
A wonderful guy. Many of us are jealous that she's found such a good one. Maybe he's a little too good, there's got to be something coming to shake things up. Great job.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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A wonderful guy. Many of us are jealous that she's found such a good one. Maybe he's a little too good, there's got to be something coming to shake things up. Great job.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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There is. You have followed me long enough to know something is up. Thank you for your review and support.