Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Part one, Chapter 8"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Writeaway...
Barbara another excellent chapter add, bravo. Your writing is clear, well-written and cleverly constructed, I cannot suggest anything for improvment, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Barbara another excellent chapter add, bravo. Your writing is clear, well-written and cleverly constructed, I cannot suggest anything for improvment, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from robina1978
Great chapter-think I read the previous one as well.
Grabbed my attention all the way.
Characters realistic and dialogues as well.
Nicely chosen subject with knowledge about it. Not everybody has this.
Like the art by your husband-sorry to hear he is struggling and pleased for your access of the site;you must have been missed by quite a few.
Can't make suggestions for improvement:held my attention all the way through.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Great chapter-think I read the previous one as well.
Grabbed my attention all the way.
Characters realistic and dialogues as well.
Nicely chosen subject with knowledge about it. Not everybody has this.
Like the art by your husband-sorry to hear he is struggling and pleased for your access of the site;you must have been missed by quite a few.
Can't make suggestions for improvement:held my attention all the way through.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Tellis
I liked the two tales he told about the origin of the flowers. Making up a little story like that to help someone is a good idea. Great chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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I liked the two tales he told about the origin of the flowers. Making up a little story like that to help someone is a good idea. Great chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from writerwish
Very well written and peaks interest. I'll miss you and your stories. This was great and the emotions that were shown and not told were a good example. I am beginning to see the romance coming.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Very well written and peaks interest. I'll miss you and your stories. This was great and the emotions that were shown and not told were a good example. I am beginning to see the romance coming.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from amada
Have a great holiday, we will be waiting for another great chapter whenever you come back. I liked this chapter because of the extra treat to the legend of that beautiful
flower. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Have a great holiday, we will be waiting for another great chapter whenever you come back. I liked this chapter because of the extra treat to the legend of that beautiful
flower. Best wishes.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from dbmccarter
I like the Indian Blanket story. Very creative. I also like that Anna is growing every day. We will miss you but I hope you have a great vacation. My Mom doesn't have internet either so I always go to the library. Have a great time.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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I like the Indian Blanket story. Very creative. I also like that Anna is growing every day. We will miss you but I hope you have a great vacation. My Mom doesn't have internet either so I always go to the library. Have a great time.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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My parents live way out in the country in the bottom of a valley. It would take awhile to get to town. I appreciate your kind review. I am hoping when I am visiting my boys I will be able to use the computer once in awhile.
Comment from Chris Tee
Barbara, another part which has captured my total attention and I liked the flowers legends being a comparative tool for Anna.
This is excellent work we have here old sport.
A rather splendid piece of writing and an enjoyable read indeed.
Have a nice holiday when you go my dear lady
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Barbara, another part which has captured my total attention and I liked the flowers legends being a comparative tool for Anna.
This is excellent work we have here old sport.
A rather splendid piece of writing and an enjoyable read indeed.
Have a nice holiday when you go my dear lady
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from fairy77
I really liked that Anna finally learning to trust again after the abuse.I liked your husbands picture.The stories taking a romantic turn.Great detail and plot.Well done!beth fairy 77.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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I really liked that Anna finally learning to trust again after the abuse.I liked your husbands picture.The stories taking a romantic turn.Great detail and plot.Well done!beth fairy 77.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your story Barbara, I thought it was very lovely. It was cleverly written and well thought out. I only have a couple of suggestions:
"I don't how to handle all this help" should it be "I don't (know) how to handle all this help"
"It'll take a while have a seat" should it be "I'll take a while(,) have a seat"
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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I enjoyed reading your story Barbara, I thought it was very lovely. It was cleverly written and well thought out. I only have a couple of suggestions:
"I don't how to handle all this help" should it be "I don't (know) how to handle all this help"
"It'll take a while have a seat" should it be "I'll take a while(,) have a seat"
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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I have made the corrections, thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from The Stranger
Troy certainly is Anna's "knight in shining armor", I was most taken by the native indian story he was telling, it was most believable of the way I percieve the native american tribes
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Troy certainly is Anna's "knight in shining armor", I was most taken by the native indian story he was telling, it was most believable of the way I percieve the native american tribes
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.