Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Part two, Chapter 11"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
Looks like romance is about to enter the picture. I think Anna would normally not want a man in her life at this point, but she needs a protector. We'll see what happens.
I enjoyed this read and found one nit:
"I protected your son, but couldn't catch the abductor." I think the comma should come out. I had to look hard to find any nits at all.
Dave
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Barbara,
Looks like romance is about to enter the picture. I think Anna would normally not want a man in her life at this point, but she needs a protector. We'll see what happens.
I enjoyed this read and found one nit:
"I protected your son, but couldn't catch the abductor." I think the comma should come out. I had to look hard to find any nits at all.
Dave
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and you are correct about the romance. Anna is not ready for a man in her life. It will take her a while to be ready.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara. The abduction of Michael is scary. I'm glad the child does not suffer of trauma, or will he? Good hook in the end, it makes me wait for romance under the moonlight. Just hoping nobody looks...:) Interesting write AND beautiful artwork, tell your husband so for me.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Hi, Barbara. The abduction of Michael is scary. I'm glad the child does not suffer of trauma, or will he? Good hook in the end, it makes me wait for romance under the moonlight. Just hoping nobody looks...:) Interesting write AND beautiful artwork, tell your husband so for me.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. My husband thanks you also.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
I know I say this all the time but I really enjoy reading your work.I would some day like to be as good as you. This is a good read. The characters are great. I has a realistic flow. Deorre
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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I know I say this all the time but I really enjoy reading your work.I would some day like to be as good as you. This is a good read. The characters are great. I has a realistic flow. Deorre
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from teacherdub
Heightened intensity in the determination of Anna's ex. Very well done in line with the slow unfolding of the danger up to this point. Love the image from your husband. It worked perfectly for this chapter. Keep them coming, Barbara. td
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Heightened intensity in the determination of Anna's ex. Very well done in line with the slow unfolding of the danger up to this point. Love the image from your husband. It worked perfectly for this chapter. Keep them coming, Barbara. td
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and my husband thanks you too.
Comment from Mara del Mar
Loved. This a chapter very romantic at the end, I' m waiting a kiss at the light of moon haha! That good that Michael not was kidnapped and now esta better vigilance. Splendid flower, Indian blanket. As always, a great chapter. congrats!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Loved. This a chapter very romantic at the end, I' m waiting a kiss at the light of moon haha! That good that Michael not was kidnapped and now esta better vigilance. Splendid flower, Indian blanket. As always, a great chapter. congrats!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
chapter thirty five of your book Lonely Hearts Meet is excellently written. You're moving the story along. This is a romantic write. Your descriptive wring is great and dialogue is very good. The art work is gorgeous you used. Anna collects baby Michael form the hospital. Paul, is with her and he holds her little boy as she fills out paper work. I hate paper work in the hospital. Paul asks her to spend time with Betty and him. Once she arrives at their hope, sweet Betty takes her to their guest bedroom. They all discuss about the man who tried to abduct Michael and Paul deduces that her exes nasty mother-in-law hired the creep. Betty suggest they stop shop talk and enjoy dinner. I like the part of the ladies giving Michael a bath and then putting him to bed. Anna goes outside for fresh air where she drifts off to sleep after picking an Indian blanket bloom. Those are exquisite flowers. She drifts off hearing the songs of crickets and their cricket tunes. Troy startles her and proceeds to tell Anna the "legend" of Indian blanket flowers. I liked what you wrote: I love how he copped a move. I felt my breath catch when "Anna turned her eyes to met Troy's. Ooh romance is in the fall air. Your hubby's art work is amazingly gorgeous. This is a most excellent chapter and I'd recommend it to other reviewers. I look forward to reading more a week from today. How's school going, Teacher. You are a top notch writer. I love your stories, Margaret, Avril and Rea's just to name a few. Please have a super day.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Barbara,
chapter thirty five of your book Lonely Hearts Meet is excellently written. You're moving the story along. This is a romantic write. Your descriptive wring is great and dialogue is very good. The art work is gorgeous you used. Anna collects baby Michael form the hospital. Paul, is with her and he holds her little boy as she fills out paper work. I hate paper work in the hospital. Paul asks her to spend time with Betty and him. Once she arrives at their hope, sweet Betty takes her to their guest bedroom. They all discuss about the man who tried to abduct Michael and Paul deduces that her exes nasty mother-in-law hired the creep. Betty suggest they stop shop talk and enjoy dinner. I like the part of the ladies giving Michael a bath and then putting him to bed. Anna goes outside for fresh air where she drifts off to sleep after picking an Indian blanket bloom. Those are exquisite flowers. She drifts off hearing the songs of crickets and their cricket tunes. Troy startles her and proceeds to tell Anna the "legend" of Indian blanket flowers. I liked what you wrote: I love how he copped a move. I felt my breath catch when "Anna turned her eyes to met Troy's. Ooh romance is in the fall air. Your hubby's art work is amazingly gorgeous. This is a most excellent chapter and I'd recommend it to other reviewers. I look forward to reading more a week from today. How's school going, Teacher. You are a top notch writer. I love your stories, Margaret, Avril and Rea's just to name a few. Please have a super day.
Melissa.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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You are so encouraging. Thank you my dear friend. We are almost done with the abuse story and ready for the romance to begin, but I need to be careful with it because Anna has so much baggage. Thank you, dear friend.
Comment from Janie King
I can see where someone in this situation was have a fear about being in constant danger..it would really frighten a mom where her children are concerned. We need to pray and be as supportive of anyone, that comes our way, as we can. I never heard of the flower or its legend. Great chapter. God bless.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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I can see where someone in this situation was have a fear about being in constant danger..it would really frighten a mom where her children are concerned. We need to pray and be as supportive of anyone, that comes our way, as we can. I never heard of the flower or its legend. Great chapter. God bless.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight. There are many women in this situation that need our prayers.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Doing a good job. Really looking forward to see how this all works out.
Betty walked into [the] room carrying Michael. "No more shop talk. Dinner's ready and you know my rule about discussing business around the dinner table."
When she walked into the living [g]room,
Roberta
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Doing a good job. Really looking forward to see how this all works out.
Betty walked into [the] room carrying Michael. "No more shop talk. Dinner's ready and you know my rule about discussing business around the dinner table."
When she walked into the living [g]room,
Roberta
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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I have made both those corrections. I better check and make sure I remembered to click save. Thank you for your kind review. I hope you are back for a long time.
Comment from TammyGail
Another great chapter here.. I see you changed the imagery very nice of your husband its beautiful.. Your chapter was well written, compelling, and kept my eye it was a pleasure.. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Another great chapter here.. I see you changed the imagery very nice of your husband its beautiful.. Your chapter was well written, compelling, and kept my eye it was a pleasure.. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I will go back to the usual image. Anna was looking at those flowers so I used a different image.
Comment from Mariea
Good morning Barbara. Another great chapter and the story is consistently developing smoothly. Characters and dialogue still believeable and without clutter.
Para starting 'Betty walked' - insert 'the' after 'into'
Para starting 'They watched' - rise/rose.
Hugs Mia
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Good morning Barbara. Another great chapter and the story is consistently developing smoothly. Characters and dialogue still believeable and without clutter.
Para starting 'Betty walked' - insert 'the' after 'into'
Para starting 'They watched' - rise/rose.
Hugs Mia
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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I had make corrections in both of those sentences and didn't correct everything. Thank you for catching it. I appreciate it.