Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 56 "part three, chapter 17"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from amada
Anna is quite an spirited and smart lady. I like the way you portray a person who was down on her luck but still has the courage to stand up. I love this chapter!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Anna is quite an spirited and smart lady. I like the way you portray a person who was down on her luck but still has the courage to stand up. I love this chapter!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ebeta
It's been a while since I've seen one of your chapters. I must say that your writing has come a long way since the first encounter in the bookstore, where she fell into Troy's lap.
Your dialogue an narrative flow much more naturally.
A few things confused me, but I'm certain that has more to do with my having been away from the site for a while than any lack in writing skill. I'll have to go back and find where I left off.
I look forward to seeing more
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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It's been a while since I've seen one of your chapters. I must say that your writing has come a long way since the first encounter in the bookstore, where she fell into Troy's lap.
Your dialogue an narrative flow much more naturally.
A few things confused me, but I'm certain that has more to do with my having been away from the site for a while than any lack in writing skill. I'll have to go back and find where I left off.
I look forward to seeing more
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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If you have questions, I will be happy to answer them. Thank you for the kind review.
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I think I'd rather go back and read what I missed, but thank you!
Comment from RebelRose
While I can understand Anna's wanting to take a stand and stop runing, I am afraid for her. It is such a terrible position for a woman to be put in and a hard decision to make. You tell the story very well.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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While I can understand Anna's wanting to take a stand and stop runing, I am afraid for her. It is such a terrible position for a woman to be put in and a hard decision to make. You tell the story very well.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Many women are put in that positiion.
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I am so sorry that I didn't thank you for your review. I do appreciate you taking time to read my posts.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Anna has made a brave but foolish decision. Someone is going to get hurt as she "stands up for herself". Multiple bodyguards 24/7 for her and her son and Troy's entire family just aren't possible. Well written, Barbara. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Anna has made a brave but foolish decision. Someone is going to get hurt as she "stands up for herself". Multiple bodyguards 24/7 for her and her son and Troy's entire family just aren't possible. Well written, Barbara. :) Nancy
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
I get more nervous for Anna with every chapter. Well done; looking forward to the next.
Troy,(no comma) knows I'm here. What's going on?
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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I get more nervous for Anna with every chapter. Well done; looking forward to the next.
Troy,(no comma) knows I'm here. What's going on?
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and I will get rid of that comma.
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent dialogue conveys the emotions of your characters well, including Anna's anxieties and Troy's need to reassure and protect her.
I love Anna's resolve in the end as she determines not to remain a victim of intimidation :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Excellent dialogue conveys the emotions of your characters well, including Anna's anxieties and Troy's need to reassure and protect her.
I love Anna's resolve in the end as she determines not to remain a victim of intimidation :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Anna is getting stronger. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from WLHall
A very suspenseful chapter. I believe you write great and keep the reader focused to the page. Leaves me wondering what's going to happen next. I don't think staying at work is such a good idea for Anna, but it's believable because I think most people would. Face the problem head on. But I'm concerned about her son. Is he in any danger?
Again, the writing flowed nicely, good dialogue.
Best Wishes,
Wanda
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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A very suspenseful chapter. I believe you write great and keep the reader focused to the page. Leaves me wondering what's going to happen next. I don't think staying at work is such a good idea for Anna, but it's believable because I think most people would. Face the problem head on. But I'm concerned about her son. Is he in any danger?
Again, the writing flowed nicely, good dialogue.
Best Wishes,
Wanda
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
There is so much intrigue going on in Anna's life and all she wants is to be left alone to live her life. Thank heavens she has Sam and the others looking out for her. I think she is brave to make a stand and stay at the office even though she has been warned not to. I understand her feelings in not wanting to run away. Bobby, his mother and friends are scaring her to death but at some point she must stand her ground. Good writing here....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Hi Barbara,
There is so much intrigue going on in Anna's life and all she wants is to be left alone to live her life. Thank heavens she has Sam and the others looking out for her. I think she is brave to make a stand and stay at the office even though she has been warned not to. I understand her feelings in not wanting to run away. Bobby, his mother and friends are scaring her to death but at some point she must stand her ground. Good writing here....blessings, chey
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did a grea job writing this chapter where the ones that are out to hurt anna are getting closer. but she says she's tired of running and is determined to stay working where she is. i only saw one spag. troy chuckled instead of tory chuckled
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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this is very well written, barbara, you did a grea job writing this chapter where the ones that are out to hurt anna are getting closer. but she says she's tired of running and is determined to stay working where she is. i only saw one spag. troy chuckled instead of tory chuckled
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Alright! Anna is making a stand. I guess a person can only take to much. Good chapter. I sense things are coming to a head here, and there'll shortly be a showdown.
Enjoyable read, Barbara. Well done. Hugs, Av.
(")I bet he's glad the parking garage - missing the quotation at the start.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Alright! Anna is making a stand. I guess a person can only take to much. Good chapter. I sense things are coming to a head here, and there'll shortly be a showdown.
Enjoyable read, Barbara. Well done. Hugs, Av.
(")I bet he's glad the parking garage - missing the quotation at the start.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
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Thnk you for your eagle eye. I had changed that part and forgot to add the quotation mark.