Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
At last tings seem to be going right for Anna, although clear liquids might seem like torture with the other food in the room.
Retrograde memory loss is a well-know result after a concussion. It may be a factor of the way our brains store short-term memory. There may be a short, perhaps only microsecond, lag time before memories move from short-term to long-term memory. I suspect that traumas corresponding to tis exact time cause this short time memory loss.
Just an aside: When I took my two kittens to be spayed, they had just devoured a salmon dinner. Salmon was always their favorite. But guess what happened? When we bought them home from the vets, they refused salmon, and now over a year later, neither cat will eat salmon. Association is a powerful phobia producer.
More love and Irish Hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Hi Barbara:)
At last tings seem to be going right for Anna, although clear liquids might seem like torture with the other food in the room.
Retrograde memory loss is a well-know result after a concussion. It may be a factor of the way our brains store short-term memory. There may be a short, perhaps only microsecond, lag time before memories move from short-term to long-term memory. I suspect that traumas corresponding to tis exact time cause this short time memory loss.
Just an aside: When I took my two kittens to be spayed, they had just devoured a salmon dinner. Salmon was always their favorite. But guess what happened? When we bought them home from the vets, they refused salmon, and now over a year later, neither cat will eat salmon. Association is a powerful phobia producer.
More love and Irish Hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Wow, my kittens go in the end of July to be neutered. I told my husband no declawing. It seems so cruel. Thank you for the kind review.
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No declawing for my little darlings. They use claw for some of their most enjoyable activities.
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I agree.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, barbara. I'm so happy to see Anna is going home. Sounds like she's not out of the woods, but she's certainly surrounded by a loving 'family'. You are masterful when it comes to writing dialogue that is precise and carries the story forward. Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Hi, barbara. I'm so happy to see Anna is going home. Sounds like she's not out of the woods, but she's certainly surrounded by a loving 'family'. You are masterful when it comes to writing dialogue that is precise and carries the story forward. Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
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You're most welcome, barbara
Comment from jaeladarling
Good to see her awake and going home soon. Poor thing has a surprise coming if she does ask about what happened. Good story flow. Looking forward to more. :)
A handful of comma stuff for your consideration:
"answer Anna's question you" (Comma after "question")
"Later that morning the doctor" (Comma after "morning")
"Early this morning Anna" (Comma after "morning")
"and yes there's fresh" (Comma after "yes")
"My wife is an excellent cook and" (Comma after "cook")
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Good to see her awake and going home soon. Poor thing has a surprise coming if she does ask about what happened. Good story flow. Looking forward to more. :)
A handful of comma stuff for your consideration:
"answer Anna's question you" (Comma after "question")
"Later that morning the doctor" (Comma after "morning")
"Early this morning Anna" (Comma after "morning")
"and yes there's fresh" (Comma after "yes")
"My wife is an excellent cook and" (Comma after "cook")
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind eagle eye. Commas and I don't see eye to eye. LOL
Comment from elgone
I've been waiting for this update. It is well written and presenting as always. There was one minor glitch. I copied it at the end.
As often as amnesia is used in in the plots of hospital soap operas, there is little evidence of it existing as anything but a very temporary thing. There is a post traumatic stress symptom that is quite like amnesia is often portrayed. The suppressed memories do begin to return as the brain heals and emotions settle. It can manifest itself in many bizarre ways, though. Anna will have a difficult time regardless. But she has a lot of caring support, which is the best thing for her.
One minor thing:
"Yes. Could we step into the hall? I'm not sure Anna needs to hear this.(") Troy opened the door and allowed the doctor and Paul to walk through first.
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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I've been waiting for this update. It is well written and presenting as always. There was one minor glitch. I copied it at the end.
As often as amnesia is used in in the plots of hospital soap operas, there is little evidence of it existing as anything but a very temporary thing. There is a post traumatic stress symptom that is quite like amnesia is often portrayed. The suppressed memories do begin to return as the brain heals and emotions settle. It can manifest itself in many bizarre ways, though. Anna will have a difficult time regardless. But she has a lot of caring support, which is the best thing for her.
One minor thing:
"Yes. Could we step into the hall? I'm not sure Anna needs to hear this.(") Troy opened the door and allowed the doctor and Paul to walk through first.
E
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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I will fix that mistake. Thank you for the kind review. I have done research on this and have had plenty of help with the coma. Anna will remember very soon.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Another great chapter. I have awakened in the hospital before and not remembered what happened. How frightening. I did not ever recover the memories, and in the case of my accident think it is for the best. Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Another great chapter. I have awakened in the hospital before and not remembered what happened. How frightening. I did not ever recover the memories, and in the case of my accident think it is for the best. Debbie
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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I think you are probably correct about that. I appreciate your review and insight.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
You're doing this in a natural order, and taking no short cuts. It makes it realistic. I found nothing I would suggest.
Congrats on the kittens. Moreover, congrats on your health progress. Last year at this time was sure scarey.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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You're doing this in a natural order, and taking no short cuts. It makes it realistic. I found nothing I would suggest.
Congrats on the kittens. Moreover, congrats on your health progress. Last year at this time was sure scarey.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Yes, last year was scarey. I hope I never go back. Thank you. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
So you still have problems with your old cat and new kittens? Hope it works out.
I enjoyed this read. About repression of memories, you might look into this. My understanding (which could be wrong) is that a severe trauma is often forgotten because the brain's being battered prevents long-term memories from being stored; it is not a Freudian repression.
I have a few comments on the writing:
In the following set of paragraphs, it is not clear who is speaking past the first paragraph.
"Paul ran his hands through his balding gray hair. "I think before you answer Anna's question you should talk with the doctor."
"Is it normal not to remember what happened?"
"I'm guessing she has suppressed the bad memory." Troy moved the chair closer for his dad to use. "I wouldn't want to remember being beaten."
"I doubt the memory will be suppressed forever. I think it's best she deals with it."
"Maybe we can speak with the doctor together." Troy glanced toward the closed door when he heard noises outside. "I think she's returning."
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other comments:
"...and allowed the doctor and Paul [to] walk through first."
"The two men walked into Anna's room and waited for her to wake-up [wake up, or better, awaken]."
"Did you fry chicken and make potato salad." This is a question and needs to end with a question mark.
Dave
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Barbara,
So you still have problems with your old cat and new kittens? Hope it works out.
I enjoyed this read. About repression of memories, you might look into this. My understanding (which could be wrong) is that a severe trauma is often forgotten because the brain's being battered prevents long-term memories from being stored; it is not a Freudian repression.
I have a few comments on the writing:
In the following set of paragraphs, it is not clear who is speaking past the first paragraph.
"Paul ran his hands through his balding gray hair. "I think before you answer Anna's question you should talk with the doctor."
"Is it normal not to remember what happened?"
"I'm guessing she has suppressed the bad memory." Troy moved the chair closer for his dad to use. "I wouldn't want to remember being beaten."
"I doubt the memory will be suppressed forever. I think it's best she deals with it."
"Maybe we can speak with the doctor together." Troy glanced toward the closed door when he heard noises outside. "I think she's returning."
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other comments:
"...and allowed the doctor and Paul [to] walk through first."
"The two men walked into Anna's room and waited for her to wake-up [wake up, or better, awaken]."
"Did you fry chicken and make potato salad." This is a question and needs to end with a question mark.
Dave
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Yes, I do still have problems with my old female. She still doesn't like them. She dislikes one more than the other. Thank you for the kind review and the suggestions. I will fix things, ASAP
Comment from mumsyone
Good chapter, Barbara. Glad to see that Anna is awake.
I think its (it's) best she deals with it."
Later that morning the doctor stepped in (into) the room.
"I see this family can turn anything into (a) special event."
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Good chapter, Barbara. Glad to see that Anna is awake.
I think its (it's) best she deals with it."
Later that morning the doctor stepped in (into) the room.
"I see this family can turn anything into (a) special event."
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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I think you must have read this at the same time I was making corrections, but I will double check, sometimes I forget to save. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb ah, an uplifting chapter to read
Like it when there is reassurance and happiness going on
Just have to wait and see if Anna's memory comes back
I read about the kittens
Smiles
Gert
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Hello Barb ah, an uplifting chapter to read
Like it when there is reassurance and happiness going on
Just have to wait and see if Anna's memory comes back
I read about the kittens
Smiles
Gert
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from Janie King
I am glad you are on summer break..yes...the kittens are really small...do you do facebook..I just posted a picture album of the puppies and Bro. Ron and Sis. Kimberly's vacation in N. Carolina? Good chapter. God bless.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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I am glad you are on summer break..yes...the kittens are really small...do you do facebook..I just posted a picture album of the puppies and Bro. Ron and Sis. Kimberly's vacation in N. Carolina? Good chapter. God bless.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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I will look you up. Yes I do face book. Oh yea,,,, thank you for the kind review.