Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "The Dying Art"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from daymanrayne
The poem and the picture go together very beautifully. So good job on it but I have to say after watching Doctor Who all those years I still freaking out by statues of angels
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The poem and the picture go together very beautifully. So good job on it but I have to say after watching Doctor Who all those years I still freaking out by statues of angels
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from trevorletang
Thank you for sharing these sobering thoughts and great lessons for life. Your format is a great one and makes for an easy read. Well done I did enjoy reading this piece
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Thank you for sharing these sobering thoughts and great lessons for life. Your format is a great one and makes for an easy read. Well done I did enjoy reading this piece
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
I loved this - I'm not convinced it is poetry, though the language is poetic. There is no real structure that I see, no poetic device such as metaphor, simile, alliteration, rhyme, meter, etc., yes? To me it is prose. (I also thought that last sentence could be two.)
Whatever it is, it's elegant, and well-done, thought-provoking writing. I loved the opening especially. Great advice.
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I loved this - I'm not convinced it is poetry, though the language is poetic. There is no real structure that I see, no poetic device such as metaphor, simile, alliteration, rhyme, meter, etc., yes? To me it is prose. (I also thought that last sentence could be two.)
Whatever it is, it's elegant, and well-done, thought-provoking writing. I loved the opening especially. Great advice.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from JB Lynn
You had a couple of nice transitions in this piece:
Going from "but if you fall will always hold out a hand to help you back up," to "Falling is a part of life". The repetition of "fall" ties the two ideas together.
Also, "...we enter this world alone" moves to "We die with the understanding" and creates the echo of the cycle of life-death so these two lines then become linked. Nice job. Thank you for sharing.
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You had a couple of nice transitions in this piece:
Going from "but if you fall will always hold out a hand to help you back up," to "Falling is a part of life". The repetition of "fall" ties the two ideas together.
Also, "...we enter this world alone" moves to "We die with the understanding" and creates the echo of the cycle of life-death so these two lines then become linked. Nice job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from Llewellyn2012
The dying art of compassion. Couldn't agree more, the individualism that currently exists in big cities today is shocking; each one of us complete on our own with our headphone and our iPads and Kindles.
This is written so well, and its one thinking at a much deeper level. Thank you for sharing.
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The dying art of compassion. Couldn't agree more, the individualism that currently exists in big cities today is shocking; each one of us complete on our own with our headphone and our iPads and Kindles.
This is written so well, and its one thinking at a much deeper level. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from lakeport
The dying art, indeed that's a very heartfelt expressed poem. very well written I enjoyed reading it.God bless you. lakeport....
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The dying art, indeed that's a very heartfelt expressed poem. very well written I enjoyed reading it.God bless you. lakeport....
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from the blue pixel
I didn't expect this lovely piece deepwater. Now your name seems very appropriate indeed. I never thought about "falling" as part of life. I think most people automatically think about "failing" but "falling" is a much better word for it says so much more. "The in-between" as you call it, the living part seems to be truly lacking in compassion and empathy and just plain courtesy and respect for others. I thoroughly enjoyed this piece not only for its content and excellent writing but also because I wasn't expecting it for whatever reason and the surprise I received was very lovely. Thank you for making me think about such important matters. Pix
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I didn't expect this lovely piece deepwater. Now your name seems very appropriate indeed. I never thought about "falling" as part of life. I think most people automatically think about "failing" but "falling" is a much better word for it says so much more. "The in-between" as you call it, the living part seems to be truly lacking in compassion and empathy and just plain courtesy and respect for others. I thoroughly enjoyed this piece not only for its content and excellent writing but also because I wasn't expecting it for whatever reason and the surprise I received was very lovely. Thank you for making me think about such important matters. Pix
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
Comment from angelface2
Deepwater, this is so true to life. We need friendships and true ones, at that. And true friendship is based on trust. I must say I have many friends, but only a few trusted ones. Miss Sally
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Deepwater, this is so true to life. We need friendships and true ones, at that. And true friendship is based on trust. I must say I have many friends, but only a few trusted ones. Miss Sally
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
Comment from Angel Lawson81
Hi Deepwater. You are very true, and this is the real way to happiness, surround yourself with the positivism and eradicate from your life what is detrimental to your happiness.
I had to make that choice some time ago and it works, let me say. You may become more careless, but we need to protect ourselves from pain.
Liked particularly the last two lines.
Take care.
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Hi Deepwater. You are very true, and this is the real way to happiness, surround yourself with the positivism and eradicate from your life what is detrimental to your happiness.
I had to make that choice some time ago and it works, let me say. You may become more careless, but we need to protect ourselves from pain.
Liked particularly the last two lines.
Take care.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
Comment from Aplgwest
A strong, instructive message on how to make the best of our time between life and death. One suggestion: on the next to last line after "others," use who, not that.
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A strong, instructive message on how to make the best of our time between life and death. One suggestion: on the next to last line after "others," use who, not that.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014