Pantoum Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Farewell"Poems written using the pantoum form
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Comment from l.raven
HI Tony, this is just brilliant...So very romantic...and I love how you describe the stars as sea glass...just beautiful wording in this one...wish they would give us our sixes....******a truly wonderful write and a beautiful picture...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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HI Tony, this is just brilliant...So very romantic...and I love how you describe the stars as sea glass...just beautiful wording in this one...wish they would give us our sixes....******a truly wonderful write and a beautiful picture...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Very many thanks for this lovely review, Linda, and for highlighting the part you liked best.
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you are so welcome Tony...luff
Comment from Cajungirl
I am very glad I still had one six star rating left for this week. Exceptional Sonnet and a perfect contest entry. Beautiful flow of words and simply gorgeous picture. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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I am very glad I still had one six star rating left for this week. Exceptional Sonnet and a perfect contest entry. Beautiful flow of words and simply gorgeous picture. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, Cajungirl, and for the six stars!
Comment from kiwisteveh
Tony, this is a beautiful and haunting piece, well-suited to the pantoum sonnet form.
It has a romantic, slightly mournful feel to it - lovers forced to be apart, portrayed in the simultaneous beauty and loneliness of sea and stars.
I liked this image in particular:
Such sea-glass stars have twins set in the sky
Good luck in this tough contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Tony, this is a beautiful and haunting piece, well-suited to the pantoum sonnet form.
It has a romantic, slightly mournful feel to it - lovers forced to be apart, portrayed in the simultaneous beauty and loneliness of sea and stars.
I liked this image in particular:
Such sea-glass stars have twins set in the sky
Good luck in this tough contest.
Steve
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Very many thanks for this very kind review, Steve, and for highlighting the part you liked best. Thanks, too, for the six-star rating and your good luck wishes. You are right, there is some stiff opposition!
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Just reserved my own spot - no idea what to do it on yet....
Steve
Comment from yolieday
Beautifully written piece. I love how you refer to the stars as sea glass. I love the introduction of the Pantourn Sonnet. I felt the mood in the piece and the sadness in time passing. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Beautifully written piece. I love how you refer to the stars as sea glass. I love the introduction of the Pantourn Sonnet. I felt the mood in the piece and the sadness in time passing. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Very many thanks for this lovely review, yolieday, and for highlighting the part you liked best.
Comment from DR DIP
that is one beautifull written Pantoum sonnet t . it really is you have ticked all the dip boxes and as I type I am reciting your poem to my work mates I kid you not. You have really captured the moment
as always dip
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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that is one beautifull written Pantoum sonnet t . it really is you have ticked all the dip boxes and as I type I am reciting your poem to my work mates I kid you not. You have really captured the moment
as always dip
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Many thanks, dip, for taking the time to review. Much appreciated, as are your kind comments! I hope that your workmates enjoyed the recitation!
Comment from Pili Pubul
I wish I had a hundred stars for this astounding poem.
Wonderful style, beautiful imagery , very romantic, sad melancholia.
I can see the stars dancing in the sea , great picture selection.
Hugs. Pili
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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I wish I had a hundred stars for this astounding poem.
Wonderful style, beautiful imagery , very romantic, sad melancholia.
I can see the stars dancing in the sea , great picture selection.
Hugs. Pili
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Many thanks, Pili, for taking the time to review. Much appreciated, as are your lovely comments! You certainly know how to make a fellow blush!
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I love a man that can blush, lol. You are welcome. ;:--) Pili
Comment from DDLacy
So beautiful! The tranquility of the deep blue sea at night as the stars above dazzle upon it's surface as the night shifts into daybreak. Very nice and thanks for the share!
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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So beautiful! The tranquility of the deep blue sea at night as the stars above dazzle upon it's surface as the night shifts into daybreak. Very nice and thanks for the share!
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Very many thanks for your review, DDL, and for highlighting what worked best for you in my poem. Much appreciated.
Comment from kiwijenny
Tony ah I love your poem.....thank you for an excellent pantoum...
Our stars are dancing are dancing on the sea tonight
Alive I this blue hour of shifting light
Just beautiful.....
God bless
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Tony ah I love your poem.....thank you for an excellent pantoum...
Our stars are dancing are dancing on the sea tonight
Alive I this blue hour of shifting light
Just beautiful.....
God bless
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Very many thanks for your review, Jenny, and for highlighting what worked best for you in my poem. Much appreciated.
Comment from krys123
I loved reading your poem Tony because it was an amazing romantic, chimerical and passionate piece of poetry that shows your inventiveness and creativeness in writing this type of sonnet. As the picture does displaying complement your home your words and your imagery does complement your picture. In your imagery and makes one feel this sway of the ocean waves in the glistening wave tops of the sea. Thank you for sharing them posting this for everyone and may the sun always shine on your shoulders for you to be able to write as fast as you can think.
Alex
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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I loved reading your poem Tony because it was an amazing romantic, chimerical and passionate piece of poetry that shows your inventiveness and creativeness in writing this type of sonnet. As the picture does displaying complement your home your words and your imagery does complement your picture. In your imagery and makes one feel this sway of the ocean waves in the glistening wave tops of the sea. Thank you for sharing them posting this for everyone and may the sun always shine on your shoulders for you to be able to write as fast as you can think.
Alex
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Many thanks, Alex, for taking the time to review. Much appreciated, as are your kind comments and blessing!
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You are so sincerely welcome Tony
Comment from Leineco
This is truly both melancholic and celebratory at the same time. The imagery of stars, shining like each human soul, reflecting/dancing on the sea of earthbound life. . .mirrored in the infinity. The inescapable knowledge that time is short, and no matter how deep our love, sooner or later we will be parted. . .hopefully to be rejoined in the afterlife. Just gorgeous!
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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This is truly both melancholic and celebratory at the same time. The imagery of stars, shining like each human soul, reflecting/dancing on the sea of earthbound life. . .mirrored in the infinity. The inescapable knowledge that time is short, and no matter how deep our love, sooner or later we will be parted. . .hopefully to be rejoined in the afterlife. Just gorgeous!
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, Leineco, and for the six stars!