I, Man!
A man thinks himself a god...113 total reviews
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Hello there~!
As always, I absolutely love the presentation. Loved the lightning in the middle, and the story shared in the poem is very awesome too.
Thanks for sharing the info about 'Frankenstein' . i didn't know that it was written due to a sort of 'dare'.
Good luck in the contest!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
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Hello there~!
As always, I absolutely love the presentation. Loved the lightning in the middle, and the story shared in the poem is very awesome too.
Thanks for sharing the info about 'Frankenstein' . i didn't know that it was written due to a sort of 'dare'.
Good luck in the contest!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from Sanku
what an extraordinary creation-both the poem and the character.man should never attempt to play God -the result would be disastrous. I felt my flesh creep as i read the creation calling him "father.'.As i read your second stanza and saw your illustration, i thought you were perhaps writing about daVinci who has studied human body's structure in detail.Another Frankenstein story emerged .It was a stroke of genius to make IT address his creator father.(i haven't read the original Frankenstein except as abridged version )
A big VOW!
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what an extraordinary creation-both the poem and the character.man should never attempt to play God -the result would be disastrous. I felt my flesh creep as i read the creation calling him "father.'.As i read your second stanza and saw your illustration, i thought you were perhaps writing about daVinci who has studied human body's structure in detail.Another Frankenstein story emerged .It was a stroke of genius to make IT address his creator father.(i haven't read the original Frankenstein except as abridged version )
A big VOW!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from c_lucas
Man has often paid the price of trying to create a living being from a corpse. This is the first time I've heard that Mary suffered from nightmares. This is very well written. Good luck in your contest.
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Man has often paid the price of trying to create a living being from a corpse. This is the first time I've heard that Mary suffered from nightmares. This is very well written. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from Tsukuyomi969
You know, you're starting to become a favorite of mine lol. I absolutely love this; I've recently started reading Frankenstein, so this came at a good time. First, let me say that I don't know how to critique poetry, about meter and stuff like that, but I know I like this. It was a story, not words taken from the middle of sentences--which is how most poems read to me. Your use of specific words as a way to control the pace of the poem was fantastic, and the added images made it seem real, if you understand what mean lol.
I only had one minor thing to say against it: in the second verse you talk about "sketched body parts", but the image you gave was like an ancient spell book. It was strange to me, since the rest were consistent with what you wrote. But that's probably just me.
Love this!
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You know, you're starting to become a favorite of mine lol. I absolutely love this; I've recently started reading Frankenstein, so this came at a good time. First, let me say that I don't know how to critique poetry, about meter and stuff like that, but I know I like this. It was a story, not words taken from the middle of sentences--which is how most poems read to me. Your use of specific words as a way to control the pace of the poem was fantastic, and the added images made it seem real, if you understand what mean lol.
I only had one minor thing to say against it: in the second verse you talk about "sketched body parts", but the image you gave was like an ancient spell book. It was strange to me, since the rest were consistent with what you wrote. But that's probably just me.
Love this!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from MisinformedPoet
A great re-storying of the Frankenstein tale (and was that a reference to Leonardo da Vinci at the start?). A gripping poem that gorily takes you to a philosphical ending line. Really enjoyed reading it.
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A great re-storying of the Frankenstein tale (and was that a reference to Leonardo da Vinci at the start?). A gripping poem that gorily takes you to a philosphical ending line. Really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from His Grayness
Dean: this is bound to be a 'CLASSIC' as the imagination and the delivery is astounding!!! I'm almost without enough expression to celebrate the brilliance of this work1 The creativity and the packaging and presentation of this is simply magnificent and worth a thousand stars!~Vance
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Dean: this is bound to be a 'CLASSIC' as the imagination and the delivery is astounding!!! I'm almost without enough expression to celebrate the brilliance of this work1 The creativity and the packaging and presentation of this is simply magnificent and worth a thousand stars!~Vance
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from stanishmichelle
This is awesome! You have definitely written an impressive poem and have made a classic story that is a favourite of mine come to life with your effective words. You really got into the doctor's head as his thoughts and actions were so visible and realistic, aided by the images.
Good rhyme and excellent ending, especially with that last line. The author notes are also interesting. A great contender in the contest. Thanks for making my day with this post. Michelle
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This is awesome! You have definitely written an impressive poem and have made a classic story that is a favourite of mine come to life with your effective words. You really got into the doctor's head as his thoughts and actions were so visible and realistic, aided by the images.
Good rhyme and excellent ending, especially with that last line. The author notes are also interesting. A great contender in the contest. Thanks for making my day with this post. Michelle
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Well done and interesting all the way, but that last line bothers me. We are all human (men/women) but we don't all kill our fathers. So, it was good, but the conclusion you were heading for just didn't work for me.
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Well done and interesting all the way, but that last line bothers me. We are all human (men/women) but we don't all kill our fathers. So, it was good, but the conclusion you were heading for just didn't work for me.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from pipersfancy
It frightens me to the core - the actions that mad and power-hungry humans will take... as IF we had the right to do what we do...
How many cautionary tales must we be given... starting with the bible (and, every other sacred text that I'm aware of)... Man is not God, and nothing good ever comes of man trying to take on that role.
PF
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It frightens me to the core - the actions that mad and power-hungry humans will take... as IF we had the right to do what we do...
How many cautionary tales must we be given... starting with the bible (and, every other sacred text that I'm aware of)... Man is not God, and nothing good ever comes of man trying to take on that role.
PF
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
Dean, you know I am a fan of horror, but I honestly don't know how you do it! Some of the things you write give me nightmares, and this poem is no exception for sure. Totally creeped me out. LOL.
Your metering is the only thing needing work, and I honestly do not know how to help you in that way, but as I've said before, the rest is SO exceptional you simply HAVE to get that under control -please! Marvelous entertainment, Dean - presentation is awesome too, as usual. Simply brilliant.
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Dean, you know I am a fan of horror, but I honestly don't know how you do it! Some of the things you write give me nightmares, and this poem is no exception for sure. Totally creeped me out. LOL.
Your metering is the only thing needing work, and I honestly do not know how to help you in that way, but as I've said before, the rest is SO exceptional you simply HAVE to get that under control -please! Marvelous entertainment, Dean - presentation is awesome too, as usual. Simply brilliant.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014