Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "But best is the ice-cream "A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from vfbryant
Love the picture you chose! It sets the stage for the innocence and joy of the child who speaks. You've captured the simple pleasure of a child, unencumbered y the worries of adult life.
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Love the picture you chose! It sets the stage for the innocence and joy of the child who speaks. You've captured the simple pleasure of a child, unencumbered y the worries of adult life.
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Comment from Smoothiecool
you have chosen your words well to allow the reader to see and feel the childhood memories at the beach but best of all was the ice cream
any child's delight
good visual
good rhyme through out
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
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you have chosen your words well to allow the reader to see and feel the childhood memories at the beach but best of all was the ice cream
any child's delight
good visual
good rhyme through out
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is excellent , deepwater, you did an excellent job writing this mono rhyme poem that speaks of the summer fun that ended with delightful ice cream. I enjoyed reading it. there's nothing better than vacation dessert. it just tastes better
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this is excellent , deepwater, you did an excellent job writing this mono rhyme poem that speaks of the summer fun that ended with delightful ice cream. I enjoyed reading it. there's nothing better than vacation dessert. it just tastes better
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Thank you jax
Comment from TamzinWhite
It is nice. The picture really helps create a longing for days gone by. Memories are sweet and you have captured a happy moment in a child's life very well. It's lovely to read. Thank you.
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It is nice. The picture really helps create a longing for days gone by. Memories are sweet and you have captured a happy moment in a child's life very well. It's lovely to read. Thank you.
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Comment from Starlit Ink
Summer is a happy and free time for children. You capture the innocence of carefree days, and the simple pleasure of the ice cream that hits the spot on those warm days. Your use of mono rhyme works nicely to convey the carefree days. I enjoyed how you ended with drifting off on those soft white sheets.
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Summer is a happy and free time for children. You capture the innocence of carefree days, and the simple pleasure of the ice cream that hits the spot on those warm days. Your use of mono rhyme works nicely to convey the carefree days. I enjoyed how you ended with drifting off on those soft white sheets.
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thank you for this
Comment from gazzagodbod
life is always best through the eyes of a child i think thats why i refuse to grow up lol loved this my friend thank you xxgazzagodbodxx
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life is always best through the eyes of a child i think thats why i refuse to grow up lol loved this my friend thank you xxgazzagodbodxx
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thank you gazza for your review
Comment from Max Edon
What a cute little poem. It was so sweet and fun to read. I loved the picture. You had a lot of very nice rhymes is this poem.
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What a cute little poem. It was so sweet and fun to read. I loved the picture. You had a lot of very nice rhymes is this poem.
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Comment from lappmellott
I really like your poem about younger children and what makes them happy. Although in this day and age, I'm not so sure that all it takes is some nice cold refreshing ice cream to make a child happy. I loved the photograph you chose to use with this poem.
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I really like your poem about younger children and what makes them happy. Although in this day and age, I'm not so sure that all it takes is some nice cold refreshing ice cream to make a child happy. I loved the photograph you chose to use with this poem.
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Comment from Scarlette DeLuca
I enjoyed the picture your poem painted of summers long past. Perhaps the rhyming of see and sea was a little repetitious but the over all rhyming of all lines made the poem flow as does the ebb and tide of the ocean. Loved the pic, it perfectly represented the feel of the poem
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I enjoyed the picture your poem painted of summers long past. Perhaps the rhyming of see and sea was a little repetitious but the over all rhyming of all lines made the poem flow as does the ebb and tide of the ocean. Loved the pic, it perfectly represented the feel of the poem
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Comment from Heidixoxo
Hey deepwater,
I really liked reading this wonderful new piece of poetry. You have a writing style in which I highly admire. The entire poem lines up and flows so smoothly. Your artwork of choice is great as well. I'll be returning to catch on more of your work soon....xoxo
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Hey deepwater,
I really liked reading this wonderful new piece of poetry. You have a writing style in which I highly admire. The entire poem lines up and flows so smoothly. Your artwork of choice is great as well. I'll be returning to catch on more of your work soon....xoxo
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
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thank you for this review Heidi
Gary