Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem. It would be a lovely one read with music background. All so true and I relate. I particularly loved these lines...

"My eyes grow dim not so my sight...This fire within cannot be quenched"

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for the great review, kind words and excellent rating, sorry I'm so late, been away for a week, blessings, Roy.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

A neat way of referring to the verses in the Gospel of Mark. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks so much Charlie, for the great review, kind words and excellent rating, sorry I'm so late, been away for a week, blessings, Roy.

reply by c_lucas on 31-Aug-2015

You're welcome, Roy. Charlie

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Just lovely Mr. Roy....I do believe age becomes all of us if we don't fight it. I like your message here, better to keep your soul, yours for eternity, than things, yours for a time....blessings.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for the great review, kind words and excellent rating, sorry I'm so late, been away for a week, blessings, Roy.

Comment from JanPerry

Excellent

Nice rhyming. I like the stanzas, you have been doing these types for sometime now and I had hoped you might try different stanzas. Either 5,7,5 or different rhyme but always a pleasure to read your work.
I noticed you changed your picture 6 times. Indecisive are we? lol

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks so much Jan, the artwork was by the site, I didn't attach artwork. But thanks for the great review, kind words and excellent rating, sorry I'm so late, been away for a week, blessings, Roy.

Comment from June Estep Fiorelli

Excellent

The poem has many beautiful sentiments, and gives the feeling of a life well-lived. There are a few things I suggest.
1) I would eliminate one reference to the soul. I believe you refer to it three times. Maybe in verse 2 you could say "...feeds my being. I'm aglow." or "feeds my spirit. I'm aglow".
2) Verse 3: the meaning of "that maze of truth" seems unclear. Maybe change to "that search for truth."
3) Verse 3: "content" is used in verse 1 and 3. First, I don't know if hope can be content...??? Perhaps you could use "life's content" in verse 3, and rephrase verse 1 so that line 4 follows the thought of line three. Something like:
The path ahead draws near my goal
To be complete, as is my soul.
Repositioning words is one way to fix rhythm and ideas, so play around with substituting words, changing the order, and watch for repetition. I've found that there's usually another way, and often a better way, to get the message across.
Good job. Keep at it.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks so much June, for the great review, kind words and excellent rating, sorry I'm so late, been away for a week, blessings, Roy.

Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Yeah Roy... a strong and wonderful imparting message... life is full of journey to get the whole picture to what or who we think we are, or should be... you, my friend have wisdom coming from your pores and you have written it here in this fine poem so eloquently.

I thoroughly enjoyed reading your contentedness as age becomes you and so does your magical insight to self... yes, a true pleasure Sir!

With our thoughts we create,
the negotiation of time,
James.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks so much James, for the great review, kind words and excellent rating, sorry I'm so late, been away for a week, blessings, Roy.

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Roy,

This poem is absolutely beautiful. I loved every word of it. You are such a great poet and I really enjoy reading your work. Thanks for sharing this and also that it has received the All Time Best award.

Kat

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks so much Kat, for the great review, kind words and excellent rating, sorry I'm so late, been away for a week, blessings, Roy.

reply by MizKat on 30-Aug-2015

No need to explain. I knew you'd get to my poem when you could.

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015

Thanks Kat

Comment from JanetRussek

Excellent

This is a wonderful poem, Roy. Down to earth and heartfelt. Smooth, easy to read and flowed beautifully. I found it very touching. As always, I enjoyed the read.
Warm Regards,
Janet

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks so much Janet, for the great review, kind words and excellent rating, sorry I'm so late, been away for a week, blessings, Roy.

Comment from dpgarrick38

Excellent

Wonderful poem, royowen. I love the line "To gain this world but lose my soul". Love truly is all that matters, though we are tempted to find too much meaning in what's material.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for the great review, kind words and excellent rating, sorry I'm so late, been away for a week, blessings, Roy.

Comment from bard owl

Exceptional

The last line is absolute truth. Your poem was such a pleasure to read. The flow was very smooth due to the flawless rhythm and rhyme. But it is the message found in your words that make it such a worthwhile, pleasant read. This has to have a six star rating. Blessings to you, Linda

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015

Thanks so much Londa, for this marvellous review and very kind comments, I've been away for a week, sorry for the lateness, also the exceptional rating is appreciated, blessings, Roy.