Comment from Mastery

Excellent

A great write, DeanO. One could not help but reflect on all the alliteration you have used throughout this entire piece. Like:

"dire desperation and tender tendencies."

Wow! Blessings, my friend. Bob

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

Thanks for checking it out, Bob.
Have a great week.
~Dean

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Nice, much safer in the abyss of the feeling in life, love, laughter feeling, can't get at you there. Nicely done, thanks for the share and have a great day.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

Thanks for checking it out, William.
Have a great week.
~Dean

Comment from bookishfabler

Excellent

good morning, my friend.
Now that is the Dean I love. Creepy, deep and disturbing in the most wonderful way. Nice work again.
hugs Heidi

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

Thanks for taking the time required to read and comment on this, Heidi.
It's appreciated.
Have a wonderful week.
~Dean

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This is an interesting review of a horrific situation, in the concentration. Is it bettere to feel the pain an and the horror or the nothingness of total despair. I hope i never have to face such an awful question.

This is real life horror as opposed to the nightmare variety.

"Plaintiff cries for help," I think you mean the adjective "plaintive" here. This is the noun, one who brings a law suit against a "defendant".

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

Thanks for checking it out, Jim.
Yes, I meant plaintive.
Have a great week.
~Dean

Comment from BOO ghost

Exceptional

What a fracking worm hole! worm HOLES DEVIATE TIME. Oh some therapeutic music, how cool is that. Oh, I must know who that group is, not the honeydripers? relaxing, as I float off this floor like a gyroscope. Harried hurricane, that is original. TEARDROPS IN THE OCEAN. That sets BOO'S TRANQUIL MOOD down to the debts of the abyss. in concentration death camps,
filled to overflowing
with the starving,
the tortured;
persecuted...
...and downtrodden-- like that quatrain.
Hum.. the dark abyss seems like it could be a metaphor. It may mean something different for each person, depending on the circumstance.
iT DOES HAVE ME THINKING, DEEPLY.
The sea is deep and thoughts are just as deep, immersed in fear and the unknown which exists in another dimension and time, like the hell experienced in POW camps. It's a pit of hell, itself, if you ever been in one like BOO. tHAT IS ANOTHER STORY. Fantastic!!!! BOO gives his gold nugget stuck in his back pack. BOO!

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2016

Comment from Nika2016

Excellent

For crying out loud..as my grandmother would say...
Yesterday you were in love with flowers and dances on beaches..and today you are back in the abyss? What changed? Passion was there..but it dissipated? Or is this just a poem reflecting your fear of being happy? ...
You feel TOO much...not that you just feel something...(in the abyss)....
We are all afraid of love...that real giving of self where one must let go...Can I trust this person with my heart?

For you...sleep well...,

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

I just write whatever comes to me that day, Nika.
I never know what that might be.
Being manic depressive, I can be high on a mountaintop one day, and in the Valley of the Shadow of Death the next.
That's just how it works.
Today has been a particular bad day, a day in which I didn't even want to get our of bed.
I did only because I have to, I have responsibilities to deal with.
Thanks very much for reading.
~Dean

reply by Nika2016 on 27-Nov-2016

Dean...I hope the video made you laugh and not offended you...It was making fun of me..
ofor trying to help...I think I know how you feel...One day I can be so happy and the change in weather can set off depression..I was not diagnosed with bipolar disorder, but my son has it..Mine is all lack of sunshine...
I truly hope you feel better...I will remove the video if you want....

reply by Nika2016 on 27-Nov-2016

PS...Your poem last night was so beautiful...be proud...

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

Thank you, that's very kind of you to say. :)

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

Oh no, I wasn't offended at all, Nika.
No, I enjoyed the video, it's fine, really.
Thanks so much again.
~Dean :)

reply by Nika2016 on 27-Nov-2016

I fixed it...

Comment from danpald

Excellent

The realm of the depressed
So filled with direst
flows the poem from inside
The mind that does not hide

Merry Christmas dear friend
The Season now begins
Fear that in the end
Will come Coal and Straw

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

Merry Christmas to you & yours too, Dan.
Thanks a bunch for reading.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great description of a deep spiritual pain something that is outside the normal realm of physical reality and yet there is a longing to connect in the risky world of human relationships. Artful alliteration and the formatting fits the ethereal nature of the conflicting words of a wounded soul.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

Well stated, lyednochka.
Thanks so much for reading.

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Beautiful use of alliteration throughout this write dean not you standard horror poem.... oops! I forgot my horror poem for tonight, sorry
Excellent write as usual with great set out

dip

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

I know, I was looking forward to it.
Thanks, Dip.

reply by DR DIP on 27-Nov-2016

do you really think that shit i wrote last night was worthy of a post? lol

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

With a bit of tweaking, yes, I do. :)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Never give up on love. It seems to miss the mark many times. One day the right person will step into your life and you will know it was worth waiting for.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016

Once you've given up on love, you've pretty much given up on life as well.
Thanks for reading, Sandra.