Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Wading in Thought"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello JLR, this is very well written with strong, descriptive lines that are very convincing dreamlike activity. It is the kind of thing we do dream like. You have make a wonderful entry to the contest with exactly 20 words, accompanied by a great pictures. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Hello JLR, this is very well written with strong, descriptive lines that are very convincing dreamlike activity. It is the kind of thing we do dream like. You have make a wonderful entry to the contest with exactly 20 words, accompanied by a great pictures. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Dorothy, I appreciate the validating words.
Comment from June Sargent
What powerful imagery you've presented in just 20 words! Sparkling moonbeams. Gushing thoughts. Dreamland is anything but boring here. Great entry for the contest.
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What powerful imagery you've presented in just 20 words! Sparkling moonbeams. Gushing thoughts. Dreamland is anything but boring here. Great entry for the contest.
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June, I appreciate your validation.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image, JLR.
-You have used your
twenty words well.
-A good topic and
effective imagery and rhyme.
-You also create a vivid
word picture, and then
you "wake from the dream."
-Good luck in the contest.
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-Nice image, JLR.
-You have used your
twenty words well.
-A good topic and
effective imagery and rhyme.
-You also create a vivid
word picture, and then
you "wake from the dream."
-Good luck in the contest.
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Pam, thanks much!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a respectable entry for the 20 word poem contest. I like all the rhymes within it. The words effectively set the atmosphere of the piece. I enjoyed reading this one. The image is a great addition.
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This is a respectable entry for the 20 word poem contest. I like all the rhymes within it. The words effectively set the atmosphere of the piece. I enjoyed reading this one. The image is a great addition.
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Susan, thank you for the for the validation.
Comment from padumachitta
hello. This is a fast paced poem, and hits the mark for this contest.
It certainly gives the reader a window into thought to the atmosphere of wading in mind.
Of waking, from sleep, of waking from sleeping alive?
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hello. This is a fast paced poem, and hits the mark for this contest.
It certainly gives the reader a window into thought to the atmosphere of wading in mind.
Of waking, from sleep, of waking from sleeping alive?
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Thank you
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was excellent! You've written a fabulous 20 word poem, and it gives us the story of your dream. I thought you did really well with this contest entry, well done and good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xx
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That was excellent! You've written a fabulous 20 word poem, and it gives us the story of your dream. I thought you did really well with this contest entry, well done and good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xx
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Sandra, I value your comments and validation.
Comment from Sally Law
A great contender for the twenty word contest, J. Rich in descriptive imagery and beautifully formatted and illustrated.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sally :)
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A great contender for the twenty word contest, J. Rich in descriptive imagery and beautifully formatted and illustrated.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sally :)
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Thank you good friend, I appreciate the validation.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written twenty word poem our thoughts are much like water rushing with moonbeams reflecting and flushing through our bloodstream before waking up from a dream.
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A very well-written twenty word poem our thoughts are much like water rushing with moonbeams reflecting and flushing through our bloodstream before waking up from a dream.
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Sandra, thank you for the validation.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Well written little poem using only twenty words! And you described it quite accurately the idea of waring in thought. That is how it feels like to me as well. Best wishes for the contest! Cheers
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Well written little poem using only twenty words! And you described it quite accurately the idea of waring in thought. That is how it feels like to me as well. Best wishes for the contest! Cheers
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Aaqib, I appreciate your validation. Thank you for reviewing and commenting!
ps where is home?
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You mean where do I live?
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Yes sorry
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I live in Lahore, Pakistan!
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Thank you! I very much delight how FanStory provides a bridge for writers from around the globe. I look forward to reading your work. My name is. Jim
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Well thank you Jim! I only just joined this month. Hope to read more of your work as well!
Comment from Minglement
I really enjoyed this entry in the 20 word poem contest. Beautifully illustrated to augment the ethereal feel of your dream/wake scenario. It's my kind of poem. Good luck in the contest.
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I really enjoyed this entry in the 20 word poem contest. Beautifully illustrated to augment the ethereal feel of your dream/wake scenario. It's my kind of poem. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
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Your comments are very appreciated!