Hedgerow Tales
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "A Christmas Story"Book 3 in the Hedgerow Series
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Comment from Janetsue
This is a wonderful story for putting the message into a form children can easily relate to. It is a joy to read even for adults. The story and gang add a fresh sweetness to the the celebration of Christmas.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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This is a wonderful story for putting the message into a form children can easily relate to. It is a joy to read even for adults. The story and gang add a fresh sweetness to the the celebration of Christmas.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much, Spangle, for your lovely review. I'm delighted you enjoyed reading it. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra x
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sweet epic write about This Mouse family and friends celebrating Christmas Sandra, a busy day for them all here and this is a quaint and endearing story poem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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A sweet epic write about This Mouse family and friends celebrating Christmas Sandra, a busy day for them all here and this is a quaint and endearing story poem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Hi Dolly, thanks so much for reading my poem, and the lovely comments. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I like rhyming poems, which is why I like your children's poetry. You told an interesting Christmas story that mice helped baby Jesus when he was a baby, which must make them proud.
Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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I like rhyming poems, which is why I like your children's poetry. You told an interesting Christmas story that mice helped baby Jesus when he was a baby, which must make them proud.
Well done.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem, Lisa, and for your fabulous review!! I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Warm hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Sally Law
This is so precious! I'm in awe of your talent and wholesome writing. This is just a perfect Christmas story! I can't wait to read it to Sophia. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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This is so precious! I'm in awe of your talent and wholesome writing. This is just a perfect Christmas story! I can't wait to read it to Sophia. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Aw thank you so much, Sal! I hope Sophia enjoys it, how old is she? I'm sending it to my daughter-in-law to read to my granddaughter. Thank you, dear friend, for the lovely sixth star, that was so very nice of you. Keep well, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Mrs. KT
A darling Christmas story, Sandra!
How I love anthropomorphic stories - especially at Christmas!
And children of all ages will enjoy your newest addition to the "Hedgerow Capers Gang!"
My favorite stanza is as follows:
The mice scurried off to gather some hay;
Miss Sheep rubbed her coat till the wool came away.
Miss Cow cleaned the manger until it was bare,
then pulled up a hay bale, which made a great chair.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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A darling Christmas story, Sandra!
How I love anthropomorphic stories - especially at Christmas!
And children of all ages will enjoy your newest addition to the "Hedgerow Capers Gang!"
My favorite stanza is as follows:
The mice scurried off to gather some hay;
Miss Sheep rubbed her coat till the wool came away.
Miss Cow cleaned the manger until it was bare,
then pulled up a hay bale, which made a great chair.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Diane, and for telling me your favourite stanza. I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading it. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from SimianSavant
A nice contribution to the contest. Just one small correction to make:
"And tonight is his Birthday," Daddy Mouse smiled, **INSERT OPEN QUITE HERE**
and Santa is bringing a gift for each child."
The poem does not rhyme during the setup as Daddy Mouse is getting ready to read to them, and I think that is fine, as it is part of the setup and provides the reader with a brief change in tone, kind of like the Princess Bride narrative style.
Thanks for the fun read!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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A nice contribution to the contest. Just one small correction to make:
"And tonight is his Birthday," Daddy Mouse smiled, **INSERT OPEN QUITE HERE**
and Santa is bringing a gift for each child."
The poem does not rhyme during the setup as Daddy Mouse is getting ready to read to them, and I think that is fine, as it is part of the setup and provides the reader with a brief change in tone, kind of like the Princess Bride narrative style.
Thanks for the fun read!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem. I wasn't sure what you meant about it not rhyming during the set-up, though, or what you meant about **INSERT OPEN QUITE HERE**. But I'm really pleased you enjoyed the poem. Have a lovely day. Sandra
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Sorry, that was a typo on my part! It should have said OPEN QUOTE. A quotation mark is missing.
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Here is what I meant about missing rhymes (see line comments, demarcated by "**")
Timmy and Tommy Mouse sat in their beds,
both had a soft pillow for resting their heads. **rhyming observed**
Eagerly waiting for Daddy to come
and read them a story?a Christmassy one. **near rhyme**
Daddy Mouse came after just a short time,
and carried a book that was written in rhyme. **this rhymes**
He pulled up a chair and sat down beside
his sons, who were now wearing grins a mile wide. **rhymes**
?On this special night I?ll tell you the one
about Christmas Eve and the birth of God?s son.? **rhymes**
So I think the issue is that Fanstory was not wrapping your text properly on my device, and I could not see all your rhymes. It turns out you were rhyming after all! My bad.
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You had me worried for a moment!! Lol. I'm glad you can see it rhymes now. Thanks for coming back and explaining. That was nice of you. :)
Comment from Ben Colder
Well done, Sandy. God had blessed you with talent not many have. Reaching children to their level is amazing. I see nothing wrong. Humbling to the mind.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Well done, Sandy. God had blessed you with talent not many have. Reaching children to their level is amazing. I see nothing wrong. Humbling to the mind.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Chuck! I'm so pleased you enjoyed my Christmas poem. Thanks so much for the lovely sixth star! Love and hugs, dear friend. Sandy. xxx
Comment from country ranch writer
This presentation is heart warming and easy for all the children to read through out our land.love this it is a beauty of a scene on Christmas Eve watching poppa mouse read.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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This presentation is heart warming and easy for all the children to read through out our land.love this it is a beauty of a scene on Christmas Eve watching poppa mouse read.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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I'm so pleased you enjoyed my Christmas poem! Thank you for this lovely review and all the six stars, you are so kind! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Hugs to you to my friend🐁🐁
Comment from Pantygynt
Oh here we go! It vis that time of the year again. Someone had to kick it off and it might as well be the mice family as anyone else. This is in the best Beatrix Potter anthropomorphic traditions as well as being a fine adaptation. I hav always felt it a same that no one invited the pigs to this Christmas party but of course, they were the unclean beasts so there was no room for them not only in the inn but in the stable as well.
The children will love this, especially the ingenuity of the sheep!
Do you fancy a chat before 4.00 pm?
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Oh here we go! It vis that time of the year again. Someone had to kick it off and it might as well be the mice family as anyone else. This is in the best Beatrix Potter anthropomorphic traditions as well as being a fine adaptation. I hav always felt it a same that no one invited the pigs to this Christmas party but of course, they were the unclean beasts so there was no room for them not only in the inn but in the stable as well.
The children will love this, especially the ingenuity of the sheep!
Do you fancy a chat before 4.00 pm?
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Hi Jim, I'm so sorry I missed you, I had my granddaughter and her boyfriend come round to see me and they ended up staying for dinner! I'm all over the place this week, getting the last things ready for our holiday, but if it's ok with you, I'll ring you when I'm home. I think I'll be in tomorrow afternoon, and Tuesday most of the day. Hit and miss after that.
Thanks for reading my Christmas poem, it's been a long time since I wrote about my Hedgerow boys. I'm glad you liked it. Love and hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
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If you ring before 3.00 pm you should catch me.
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Ok, I'm sure I'll be around then. Chat tomorrow. xx
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I will be around most of the day. I look forward to that.
Comment from Susan Newell
Sandra,
You have outdone yourself. This should definitely be published as a children's book. The story is so beautifully told about how all of God's creatures were eager to participate in helping the newborn Jesus. There are millions of children who could benefit from hearing the story told in this way. If you have 50 other stories, you would have a fantastic series. I know publishing and marketing is difficult, and woke publishers aren't interested in this kind of thing, but there are some legitimate Christian publishers who might be excited to publish your work. Your talent shouldn't be limited to a FanStory audience.
Sue
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Sandra,
You have outdone yourself. This should definitely be published as a children's book. The story is so beautifully told about how all of God's creatures were eager to participate in helping the newborn Jesus. There are millions of children who could benefit from hearing the story told in this way. If you have 50 other stories, you would have a fantastic series. I know publishing and marketing is difficult, and woke publishers aren't interested in this kind of thing, but there are some legitimate Christian publishers who might be excited to publish your work. Your talent shouldn't be limited to a FanStory audience.
Sue
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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What a lovely thing to say, Sue, thank you so much. I've had fun writing my Hedgerow Capers stories but hadn't written any for a few years. It was one of the Fanstorians asked me if I'd write them again, so I wrote this one. If was fun. It's lovely that you enjoyed it. I might try a Christian publisher, thank you for the suggestion. I don't think I'd get very far with traditional ones, there are too many children authors out there.
Thank you so much for the six stars, that was very generous of you and I really appreciated it. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xx