Writings From the Heart
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Comment from missy98writer
deepwater,
Excellent poem you've written. Cleaver use of hyperbole with the phrase 'fields of stone.' Beautiful art work and presentation. Excellent imagery, good rhymes and very descriptive writing. Great title 'Fields of stone.' I especially like the lines:
For he alone forgives our sins
And he returns us to our kin
Or leaves us to lie in fields far away
So just believe and hold to faith
For you may see him on this day
Fields of stone remember us all
We are the ones, who made the call
As fields of stone remember the past
The names of the fallen will always last
Thanks for sharing your fabulous spiritual poem. . . Melissa!
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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deepwater,
Excellent poem you've written. Cleaver use of hyperbole with the phrase 'fields of stone.' Beautiful art work and presentation. Excellent imagery, good rhymes and very descriptive writing. Great title 'Fields of stone.' I especially like the lines:
For he alone forgives our sins
And he returns us to our kin
Or leaves us to lie in fields far away
So just believe and hold to faith
For you may see him on this day
Fields of stone remember us all
We are the ones, who made the call
As fields of stone remember the past
The names of the fallen will always last
Thanks for sharing your fabulous spiritual poem. . . Melissa!
Comment Written 18-May-2010
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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your most welcome Melissa
Comment from words
I liked the "fields of stone metaphor.
I especially liked your last stanza:Fields of stone remember us all
We are the ones, who made the call
As fields of stone remember the past
The names of the fallen will always last
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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I liked the "fields of stone metaphor.
I especially liked your last stanza:Fields of stone remember us all
We are the ones, who made the call
As fields of stone remember the past
The names of the fallen will always last
Comment Written 18-May-2010
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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thank you for reading this words
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi GW,
This a good poem especially since Memorial day approaches. The title speaks to the many grave stones that indicate where a soldier lays. My husband served in Korea so this poem really speaks to me. I think you should cap the word God and the several 'He' words. Well done....chey
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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Hi GW,
This a good poem especially since Memorial day approaches. The title speaks to the many grave stones that indicate where a soldier lays. My husband served in Korea so this poem really speaks to me. I think you should cap the word God and the several 'He' words. Well done....chey
Comment Written 18-May-2010
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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thank you Chey i will and thanks for the comments
Comment from fairydancer
Very good rhyming and slant rhyming, combined with good flow very much enhance your powerful message, which it sounds like , really does come from the heart. This poem makes me think that I don't have a clue of half of what goes on in this world every day.
Thanks for a strong read - Cally :)
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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Very good rhyming and slant rhyming, combined with good flow very much enhance your powerful message, which it sounds like , really does come from the heart. This poem makes me think that I don't have a clue of half of what goes on in this world every day.
Thanks for a strong read - Cally :)
Comment Written 18-May-2010
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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your most welcome Cally
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, what a sorrowful piece
of verse, Gary, and of course,
what makes it so is that it
is true to life, and so many
don't come back - leaving widows
and orphans... and those who do
come back are often hurting from
deep within.
I've just written Is This Glory,
as my eyes fill and my mother's
heart breaks each time I see another
soldier come home in a coffin.
So take hold of god his anchor firm - God
As he controls - He - Cap each time you refer to God/He
Well penned, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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Oh, what a sorrowful piece
of verse, Gary, and of course,
what makes it so is that it
is true to life, and so many
don't come back - leaving widows
and orphans... and those who do
come back are often hurting from
deep within.
I've just written Is This Glory,
as my eyes fill and my mother's
heart breaks each time I see another
soldier come home in a coffin.
So take hold of god his anchor firm - God
As he controls - He - Cap each time you refer to God/He
Well penned, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 18-May-2010
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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welcome Margaret and thanks for reading
Comment from c_lucas
There is nothing romatic about a field of graves. Young men had their lives ripped assunder, leaving their loved ones behind. You're poem is very well written with good imagery and descriptive schemes.
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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There is nothing romatic about a field of graves. Young men had their lives ripped assunder, leaving their loved ones behind. You're poem is very well written with good imagery and descriptive schemes.
Comment Written 18-May-2010
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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thank you for reading C
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You're welcome, Gary. Charlie
Comment from jgirlie152
Your poem Fields of Stone is excellent. Well written and clear to read, a soldier must leave his home, his life, wishing to return but knowing he may end up in the fields of stone. War is hell.
Peace, Joan
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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Your poem Fields of Stone is excellent. Well written and clear to read, a soldier must leave his home, his life, wishing to return but knowing he may end up in the fields of stone. War is hell.
Peace, Joan
Comment Written 18-May-2010
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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thank you Joan
Comment from WRITER1
I can just imagine how hard it must be to have to leave your family and go off to war. Never knowing if you will see them again. Very good piece.
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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I can just imagine how hard it must be to have to leave your family and go off to war. Never knowing if you will see them again. Very good piece.
Comment Written 18-May-2010
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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thank you Writer1 for reading
Comment from josejodar
Very very good poem!the issue of the poem is very strong. it is very well written and i like a lot its rythm. congratulations for the good job. Greetings. Jose
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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Very very good poem!the issue of the poem is very strong. it is very well written and i like a lot its rythm. congratulations for the good job. Greetings. Jose
Comment Written 18-May-2010
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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Jose, thank you for reading
Comment from skye
Your poem is filled with strong, loving images of beauty, of family, life, and the pain of separation.
Well crafted, memorable.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Your poem is filled with strong, loving images of beauty, of family, life, and the pain of separation.
Well crafted, memorable.
Very well done.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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thank you skye