Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Part Three of Chapter One"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from lola29
Barbara, I read your author notes, and I hope this week turns out to be a really good for you. This was an excellent chapter, and I think Anna is learning to trust Troy, which is a good thing, because I believe he truly cares for him. Needless to say, I despise Bobby.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Barbara, I read your author notes, and I hope this week turns out to be a really good for you. This was an excellent chapter, and I think Anna is learning to trust Troy, which is a good thing, because I believe he truly cares for him. Needless to say, I despise Bobby.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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I think everybody despises Bobby. Or at least I hope they do, if they don't then they have a problem. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Allezw2
Lady bw,
A woman, with children, essentially a single parent with few resources, is the bane of our society.
Too often I saw this in the military.
So many of my fellow recruits went home on leave after boot camp and married their sweethearts.
If the girl could live at home, the basic allowance for quarters made it quite nice for her. If her husband also set aside and allotment as well, to save for the future, even better.
I'll never forgive Bob Dole for muttering about how active duty military needed food stamps when as long ago as 1963, an E4 stationed at Norfolk, VA, made the headlines there when he applied for food stamps.
Where was Bob Dole for all of those years?
This is a dispiriting tale, and only a possibility of help for this unfortunate woman provides a glimmer of hope.
Well presented, and a theme close to mirroring the times.
fantasist
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Lady bw,
A woman, with children, essentially a single parent with few resources, is the bane of our society.
Too often I saw this in the military.
So many of my fellow recruits went home on leave after boot camp and married their sweethearts.
If the girl could live at home, the basic allowance for quarters made it quite nice for her. If her husband also set aside and allotment as well, to save for the future, even better.
I'll never forgive Bob Dole for muttering about how active duty military needed food stamps when as long ago as 1963, an E4 stationed at Norfolk, VA, made the headlines there when he applied for food stamps.
Where was Bob Dole for all of those years?
This is a dispiriting tale, and only a possibility of help for this unfortunate woman provides a glimmer of hope.
Well presented, and a theme close to mirroring the times.
fantasist
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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I was a military spouse for 23 years. I haven't forgotten how hard those first few years were, until my husband gained rank. Thank you for the kind review.
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I remember one of the guys said that they played cards and drank lots of Kool-Ade with others in the base housing. Cheap entertainment.
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Yep. I can honestly say, I miss military living. I enjoy being a civilian again, but I still miss it.
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For certain, everyone knew their place!
Fanstory's Buctar, Bill Terry, RAdm USN (Retired) agreed. He went from being in charge of thousands of men and billions of dollars worth of equipment to a civilian with a good pension and no authority whatsoever.
Comment from jclark
I have a knot in my stomach for this poor girl. I hope she does call Troy. Way to write a "cliff hanger" Barbara. You always create "real" characters that make your stories intriguing.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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I have a knot in my stomach for this poor girl. I hope she does call Troy. Way to write a "cliff hanger" Barbara. You always create "real" characters that make your stories intriguing.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from JBCaine
Engaging, and well written.One spot I would look at: "Why can't he be satisfied my insurance covers most of cost?" --Might want to make it 'most of (the) cost' --just a thought.
At any rate, nicely done. Good use of dialog. A very emotion-evoking subject, which you have managed to not over-emotionalize. Well done.
JBCaine
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Engaging, and well written.One spot I would look at: "Why can't he be satisfied my insurance covers most of cost?" --Might want to make it 'most of (the) cost' --just a thought.
At any rate, nicely done. Good use of dialog. A very emotion-evoking subject, which you have managed to not over-emotionalize. Well done.
JBCaine
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and I will take another look at that sentence.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with imagery A GREAT story line and well structured with a descriptive script. I really enjoyed reading this chapter. Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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A good write with imagery A GREAT story line and well structured with a descriptive script. I really enjoyed reading this chapter. Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from patmedium
April 6th is now marked on my calendar. xxx
Another part of the jigsaw, building the foundation of this tale in our minds, Barbara. Nicely done. Pat. xxx
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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April 6th is now marked on my calendar. xxx
Another part of the jigsaw, building the foundation of this tale in our minds, Barbara. Nicely done. Pat. xxx
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your warm friendship and the kind review.
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I am always here if you need me. xxx
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I know that.
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Comment from Distracted23
Great chapter. The subject of abuse is hard to read about, but your writing is easy to read. Well done. I need to get caught up on the whole story. I already know I like Anna. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes for your health. Take care, Jill
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Great chapter. The subject of abuse is hard to read about, but your writing is easy to read. Well done. I need to get caught up on the whole story. I already know I like Anna. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes for your health. Take care, Jill
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
barbara, first of all i am praying you will get to start phase three of the chemo and your radiation gets started. my father dealt better with the radiation that the chemo, your chapter is so well written and detailed, i hope she gets away before it's too late.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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barbara, first of all i am praying you will get to start phase three of the chemo and your radiation gets started. my father dealt better with the radiation that the chemo, your chapter is so well written and detailed, i hope she gets away before it's too late.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the kind words. I have heard after chemo radiation is a breeze. I sure hope so. My heart goes out to your father. Thank you for the review.
Comment from MS Writer
Excellent continuing story. Keeps your interest and flows very well. Good characters and dialogue. Very happy you let us know about the treatment. Good luck.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Excellent continuing story. Keeps your interest and flows very well. Good characters and dialogue. Very happy you let us know about the treatment. Good luck.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Abuse is such a terrible thing and it is even difficult to read it. Excellent chapter and I want to read more as always.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Abuse is such a terrible thing and it is even difficult to read it. Excellent chapter and I want to read more as always.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and continues support.