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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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what a terrible situation for
poor Anna - what will she do?
And Troy, such a kind, caring
young man, who would take care
of her in the way she deserves.

A most enjoyable chapter, Barbara.

Margaret

 Comment Written 02-May-2011


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    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Chris Tee
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Another wonderful write and part.
I have followed this book from inception and look forward to the next part.
From your authors notes: What a shame to read these stats.
Only cowards do things like that!!
I salute you!!!

 Comment Written 02-May-2011


reply by the author on 02-May-2011
    I agree only coward beat their spouses. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Alaskastory
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'Part three chapter three' is written with vivid images and the dialogue does show the feelings of characters well. Anna's thoughts expressed in italics are effective to telling of her fears. You've done an excellent job on this part of the chapter. I look forward to more.

 Comment Written 02-May-2011


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    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from The Stranger
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Now the question is drawn as to who the biological father of Michael really is, and we wait to see if Anna will fall stupidly back into Bobbys waiting arms...

 Comment Written 02-May-2011


reply by the author on 02-May-2011
    We shall see. Bobby is the father of Anna's child. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dbmccarter
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Glad to see the next part. The story is progressing along.
This sounds very real which makes it a very good read. Can't wait for more.

 Comment Written 01-May-2011


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    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from denhagan
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I really appreciate being able to read this story. It is well-written and brings out the problem our society has of spousal abuse.
Need to add a "the" before room, where Troy steps into the hospital room, around the middle of the story. Also, the sentence, "Bobby beat me so badly because I did I ended up here." didn't make good grammatical sense.
All-in-all, this was a good short story with an important message about the problem of spousal abuse.


 Comment Written 01-May-2011


reply by the author on 02-May-2011
    I have fixed those areas. Thank you for your kind review.
reply by denhagan on 02-May-2011
    You're quite welcome! ~denhagan
Comment from ulster3
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Hello barbara...
This is another perfect write and it addresses a big problem in the world. Your notes are a great addition, and I could see this book with its notes on the stands. Good going!
Fondly, rebecca

 Comment Written 01-May-2011


reply by the author on 02-May-2011
    Thank you for your support and the review.
reply by ulster3 on 02-May-2011
    This is an exceptional write!!!
    Hugs. R
Comment from sunnilicious
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Flowers... that's such a sweetheart touch. I like that. You just have to accept the baby. But breakfast is the most important meal of the day. At least some coffee. That's why she's depressed. Glad she nibbled the toast and touched the bouquet.

This is turning out to be a real soap opera. Good work.

Got something for you. Saw this show in Florida a few months ago. You don't have to speak spanish to even understand it. But you can chalk it up to research. maybe for another story. 'La Rosa De Guadalupe' is broken into 3 parts. Here's part 1; http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p8e3_erJumQ

All the best



 Comment Written 01-May-2011


reply by the author on 02-May-2011
    Don't worry I speak Spanish. I live in TX and teach at a bilingual school. I appreciate your kind review.
reply by sunnilicious on 02-May-2011
    That's nice. Hope you enjoy the show.
    You're welcome.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
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Barbara:

I man a Sexual Assault Crisis Hotline 9 hours a week
(10 pm - 7 am) and many of the calls are from women
who have been assaulted by their spouses or by their
significant others. It is heartbreaking to hear their
stories.

thanks for sharing
love,
jan

 Comment Written 01-May-2011


reply by the author on 01-May-2011
    Thank you for sharing your insight. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from amada
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Your story continues to be very moving well. I am touched by Troy's sense of helpfulness and caring. Anna deserves some kindness. Good plot.

 Comment Written 01-May-2011


reply by the author on 01-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.