Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Part one. Chapter 7"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from amada
I enjoy the very easy and loving relationship between Troy and his dad. Good people, great dialog, it felt as if aI was there. Looking forward to the nest chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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I enjoy the very easy and loving relationship between Troy and his dad. Good people, great dialog, it felt as if aI was there. Looking forward to the nest chapter.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from WilliamDeen
Great writing. This will add a great chapter to your book. It seems Michael and Anna are going to be okay from Bobby. Or at least I hope so..Billy
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Great writing. This will add a great chapter to your book. It seems Michael and Anna are going to be okay from Bobby. Or at least I hope so..Billy
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Bobby will return. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from robyn corum
Once again, you have given us excellent work and an interesting read. The story is progressing well.
I found a couple of things to note:
1.)He pointed to a spot off the side.
->off to the side?
2.)ice tea x2
-> iced tea?
Hope these may help a little -
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Once again, you have given us excellent work and an interesting read. The story is progressing well.
I found a couple of things to note:
1.)He pointed to a spot off the side.
->off to the side?
2.)ice tea x2
-> iced tea?
Hope these may help a little -
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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I have fixed the missing word. Thank you for catching it. I has come to my attention that ice tea can be written either way. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Distracted23
I'm new to the story, so please forgive me for coming in late. I find this to be a well-written, intelligent read. Nice work on the dialogue. Very natural.
Thank you for bringing attention to domestic violence. This is a growing problem, especially among teenage girls.
Best of luck and much success,
Jill
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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I'm new to the story, so please forgive me for coming in late. I find this to be a well-written, intelligent read. Nice work on the dialogue. Very natural.
Thank you for bringing attention to domestic violence. This is a growing problem, especially among teenage girls.
Best of luck and much success,
Jill
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jen Gentry
Barb
I wish I had half your talent for dialogue I am struggling with it in my longer writes, cheers to you for another well done chapter
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Barb
I wish I had half your talent for dialogue I am struggling with it in my longer writes, cheers to you for another well done chapter
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I was taken under wings to help with my dialogue as a new writer. If you want help, let me know.
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Barb you can review my work anytime you want I just started a new novel it is posted in my portfolio as outline and Journey to Hook Pond I am struggling to find a title so it is UNTITLED
Thanks so much
Jenny aka Christa
Comment from axelbeariter
Before long he'll find another woman with a low self-esteem that he can beat up and the cycle continues."/Sad, but true.---- you've expanded the reader's knowledge about the legal aspects of quelling a batterer very well. Terrific as usual.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Before long he'll find another woman with a low self-esteem that he can beat up and the cycle continues."/Sad, but true.---- you've expanded the reader's knowledge about the legal aspects of quelling a batterer very well. Terrific as usual.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from ReaThomas
This is another brilliant chapter in this very worthwhile story. I still feel that the message is so important. The dialogue followed well and was really easy for me to follow. It also sounded natural - I don't like reading dialogue that you just feel no-one is real life is ever going to say.
Excellent chapter!
Thanks for sharing,
Rea x
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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This is another brilliant chapter in this very worthwhile story. I still feel that the message is so important. The dialogue followed well and was really easy for me to follow. It also sounded natural - I don't like reading dialogue that you just feel no-one is real life is ever going to say.
Excellent chapter!
Thanks for sharing,
Rea x
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from quashdog
Booby is what we refer to in Spanish as a machista. Machistas are guys who feel that a woman's place is in the kitchen and other house work. They believe that any man doing a household chore is effeminate. They are rude and crude and generally have their heads up their butts. Good post, I like the way you are developing the story.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Booby is what we refer to in Spanish as a machista. Machistas are guys who feel that a woman's place is in the kitchen and other house work. They believe that any man doing a household chore is effeminate. They are rude and crude and generally have their heads up their butts. Good post, I like the way you are developing the story.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from amahra
Very compelling chapter. She left the baby with a baby sitter, a man. I don't know about leaving a baby that young with a guy. I hope nothing happens to the little fella.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011
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Very compelling chapter. She left the baby with a baby sitter, a man. I don't know about leaving a baby that young with a guy. I hope nothing happens to the little fella.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011
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He's not a young guy, he's an old man. He's the father of the man she's interested in.
Comment from Queenise
Barbara, your authors notes are gems. I can tell you put a lot of hard work in your writing. They are filled with so much good information and I am in the game now that I'm caught up and can't wait for the next installment. Queenise
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011
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Barbara, your authors notes are gems. I can tell you put a lot of hard work in your writing. They are filled with so much good information and I am in the game now that I'm caught up and can't wait for the next installment. Queenise
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your support and review. I appreciate your kindness.
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The pleasure is all mine. Queenise