I Hereby Crown Thee ...
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "By Nightmare's Dark Decree"A collection of crowns of sonnets
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Comment from Maxine Kendall
How can I not give this epic a six?
Wow! I can see how you would find writing Crowns a challenge, and fascinating too. You are a better man than me (if I were a man), as writing something like this would overwhelm me. But, you do so with such aplomb. There are some staggeringly good lines, such as this ...
Full circle is my vicious nightly curse
in desperation's lee, and now in verse.
And this ...
If roads and cardboard boulders are a crime,
and dark syringes suckle gravel's teat,
Too many to recall here.
You have an amazing way with words. One day I think we may see students studying a book of yours. I could just see them trying to decipher your Crown Sonnets.
Very well done.
Maxine x
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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How can I not give this epic a six?
Wow! I can see how you would find writing Crowns a challenge, and fascinating too. You are a better man than me (if I were a man), as writing something like this would overwhelm me. But, you do so with such aplomb. There are some staggeringly good lines, such as this ...
Full circle is my vicious nightly curse
in desperation's lee, and now in verse.
And this ...
If roads and cardboard boulders are a crime,
and dark syringes suckle gravel's teat,
Too many to recall here.
You have an amazing way with words. One day I think we may see students studying a book of yours. I could just see them trying to decipher your Crown Sonnets.
Very well done.
Maxine x
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much, Maxine :-). I'd love to see what a class of willing students made of some of my work. Amusingly, when I was studying A-Level English, I raged at Seamus Heaney's obscure meanings and actually started writing poetry as a rebellious attempt.to pen clear, understandable verse. Rather ironic, really!
Mike
Comment from RKagan
Wow what an intense dream. I hope that now that you have written it perhaps it will stop reoccuring. Your poem is well written and very descriptive. great job.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Wow what an intense dream. I hope that now that you have written it perhaps it will stop reoccuring. Your poem is well written and very descriptive. great job.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, RK :-). I've had this a lot less in recent years - I think the constant poetry has beaten it back!
Mike
Comment from MENNIPLOSS
a wonderful writing, I like much, good words and beautiful phrases, I congratulate to you is a wonderful work. many congratulations.
menniploss
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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a wonderful writing, I like much, good words and beautiful phrases, I congratulate to you is a wonderful work. many congratulations.
menniploss
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Menniploss :-). I'm so glad you enjoyed the read.
Mike
Comment from Queenise
Mike, this is awe. It is a well written and well thought out piece. It scared me at times. Great imagery, flow and rhyme. Your sharp turns and curves made it exciting and it was worth the ride. Catches you from start to finish. Peaceful dreams,friend. Queenise
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Mike, this is awe. It is a well written and well thought out piece. It scared me at times. Great imagery, flow and rhyme. Your sharp turns and curves made it exciting and it was worth the ride. Catches you from start to finish. Peaceful dreams,friend. Queenise
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Queenise - I'm really glad you enjoyed it. This dream has plagued me since I was very young, but it's become very rare in recent years.
Mike
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You're welcome. Have a nightmare I've been having on and off since a
child that I'm considering writing a story on. Peace. Queenise
Comment from cupa tea
you have some wonderful discriptive parts in this poem. I like the image you have placed with it. It has a nice flow...A bit long but still its very good
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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you have some wonderful discriptive parts in this poem. I like the image you have placed with it. It has a nice flow...A bit long but still its very good
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Cupa. Yeah, I was a bit worried about the length, but I saved up two weeks'worth of reviewing money to promote it so it was worth people's while. I'm glad you enjoyed the read.
Mike
Comment from Bryana
Wow! I'm impressed! What a wonderful collection of sonnets you've written. Excellent rhyme, rhythm and flow. You certainly have a wonderful imagination to write all these about a nightmare.
It was certainly a pleasure reading your work, I'd love to read it from now on.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Wow! I'm impressed! What a wonderful collection of sonnets you've written. Excellent rhyme, rhythm and flow. You certainly have a wonderful imagination to write all these about a nightmare.
It was certainly a pleasure reading your work, I'd love to read it from now on.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Bryana :-). What a truly wonderful review - you've put a great big smile on my face this dreary morning in London.
Mike
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I've been in London in those dreary mornings, they are they are wonderful to write poems about nightmares! Keep on writingt Mike, you do a wonderful job.
Comment from words
Lord love a duck, you do have literate and horrific nightmares, my friend.
FYI: the colored type was hard to read against the black ... had to highlight it to read it.
Shade of Poe and his Absinthe nights in this one.
Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Lord love a duck, you do have literate and horrific nightmares, my friend.
FYI: the colored type was hard to read against the black ... had to highlight it to read it.
Shade of Poe and his Absinthe nights in this one.
Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Words! Apologies for the colour - I hadn't realised it would be problematic. I'm glad you enjoyed the read :-)
Mike
Comment from quashdog
Nighmares can make a night seem like an eternity. They fill one's soul with desperation and exasperation as we wish for the daylight to come to the rescue. Good verse with good rhyme.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Nighmares can make a night seem like an eternity. They fill one's soul with desperation and exasperation as we wish for the daylight to come to the rescue. Good verse with good rhyme.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Quash :-). Indeed, they can be a pain, but it felt good to write this one out in all its bizarre and creepy detail.
Mike
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Mike,
While I do write sonnets I have never attempted a crown of sonnets as I think they are incredibly difficult. Your iambic pentameter is spot on and the rhyming is strong and adds to the charm of this piece. While it is a little long for my tastes, once I started to read there was no way I could stop. Your description of the nightmare is vivid and evocative. Certainly worth 6 stars! Well done, chey
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Hi Mike,
While I do write sonnets I have never attempted a crown of sonnets as I think they are incredibly difficult. Your iambic pentameter is spot on and the rhyming is strong and adds to the charm of this piece. While it is a little long for my tastes, once I started to read there was no way I could stop. Your description of the nightmare is vivid and evocative. Certainly worth 6 stars! Well done, chey
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Chey :-). It's certainly quite an undertaking, but I am drawn to these beasts. That's five under the belt now, and I'm always trying to think of subjects that would suit the seven sonnet format. My first ever (unfinished) attempt was one based on the seven deadly sins, so maybe I should finish that some time.
I'm so thrilled you enjoyed it; a grand compliment from such an accomplished sonneteer as you.
Mike
Comment from bard owl
The imagery in this poem is very clear and terrifying. It is a dream gone mad, becoming a vivid, horrid nightmare. Your talent speaks for itself when you can so deftly compose several sonnets - a Crown of Sonnets - to comprise your poem. This poem is more than excellent. It is exceptional. Bravo! Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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The imagery in this poem is very clear and terrifying. It is a dream gone mad, becoming a vivid, horrid nightmare. Your talent speaks for itself when you can so deftly compose several sonnets - a Crown of Sonnets - to comprise your poem. This poem is more than excellent. It is exceptional. Bravo! Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Linda - I'm hugely complimented :-). I love writing long poetry, as long as I have enough to say, of course!
Mike