Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Part one, Chapter 8"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from axelbeariter
"It'll take a while have a seat."/Do two sentences--"It'll take a while. Have a seat."----Troy opened the glass sliding door for her and called/Not a big deal on this one, but say, Troy opened the sliding glass door for her and called----This is a very good set of character sketches. Well done as usual.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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"It'll take a while have a seat."/Do two sentences--"It'll take a while. Have a seat."----Troy opened the glass sliding door for her and called/Not a big deal on this one, but say, Troy opened the sliding glass door for her and called----This is a very good set of character sketches. Well done as usual.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for catching those. I have made the corrections.
Comment from Jen Gentry
lovely touching well done and smooth write you can feel the love blossoming between anna and troy and I did enjoy the story of the indian blanket very awesome chapter
blessings
Jenny
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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lovely touching well done and smooth write you can feel the love blossoming between anna and troy and I did enjoy the story of the indian blanket very awesome chapter
blessings
Jenny
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from teacherdub
I wish I had a six left, Barbara. This is well thought out, and the Indian legend scenario is a realistic addition. The short one definitely adds depth to what Anna will experience. It also adds excitement to the connection between she and Troy. Excellent chapter. God bless. td
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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I wish I had a six left, Barbara. This is well thought out, and the Indian legend scenario is a realistic addition. The short one definitely adds depth to what Anna will experience. It also adds excitement to the connection between she and Troy. Excellent chapter. God bless. td
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Another good chapter, Barbara. I like the legend(s) of the Indian flower. Indian blankets bring back good memories of trips to Minnesota every year (years ago); and of Indians in and near all the little towns, selling blankets and mocassins.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Another good chapter, Barbara. I like the legend(s) of the Indian flower. Indian blankets bring back good memories of trips to Minnesota every year (years ago); and of Indians in and near all the little towns, selling blankets and mocassins.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
This is a lovely chapter, Barbara. I really like the story telling. Romantic undertones ring through - very sweet. Like the dialogue and the imagery. Good write.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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This is a lovely chapter, Barbara. I really like the story telling. Romantic undertones ring through - very sweet. Like the dialogue and the imagery. Good write.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from animatqua
The legends are interesting. I collect Native American legends. I think the one you refer to as "Indian Blankets" may be "Indian Pain Brushes" here in Northern Michigan. The legend here is that Nanabozho, Creator's great helper, used the plants to paint with.
The other legend you will find, in a somewhat different form, in "The Rough Faced Girl", an Iroquois legend. I think it's also called "Indian Cinderella".
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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The legends are interesting. I collect Native American legends. I think the one you refer to as "Indian Blankets" may be "Indian Pain Brushes" here in Northern Michigan. The legend here is that Nanabozho, Creator's great helper, used the plants to paint with.
The other legend you will find, in a somewhat different form, in "The Rough Faced Girl", an Iroquois legend. I think it's also called "Indian Cinderella".
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Indian Paint Brushes are a little different flower but very similar. The story about the Indian Maiden Troy made up, but the first one is a real legend. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from egmosley
B,
I still like the way you are allowing the reader to see that there are caring people still left in the world...abuse can be stopped...Ilike the shyness of your character...and the flower story is really good...
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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B,
I still like the way you are allowing the reader to see that there are caring people still left in the world...abuse can be stopped...Ilike the shyness of your character...and the flower story is really good...
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rchitwood
I have been following your story and have really enjoyed it .So you get six stars foe vacation,Have fun your story has good dialogue and characters very believable.I would also give your husband a star if I could.Your photo compliments your story.Safe trip,Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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I have been following your story and have really enjoyed it .So you get six stars foe vacation,Have fun your story has good dialogue and characters very believable.I would also give your husband a star if I could.Your photo compliments your story.Safe trip,Blessings Rita
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the well wished. I appreciate your kind review. If you would like to see more of Brian's artwork his site is brwartwork.com.
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I will take a look at it .Rita
Comment from quashdog
I have a bad feeling that those three missed calls at the office were actually from Booby who is trying to find to Anna through Troy. I had never heard of those flowers or the legend attached. True or not, it was a nice addition to the narrative.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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I have a bad feeling that those three missed calls at the office were actually from Booby who is trying to find to Anna through Troy. I had never heard of those flowers or the legend attached. True or not, it was a nice addition to the narrative.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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The first legend was a true one, the second on Troy made up. Thank you for your kind reveiew.
Comment from stanishmichelle
I like the story Troy told Anna, and the girl does sound like her. Anna and Michael are adjusting nicely a healthy, happy family oriented environment. I think she now realizes that she has a good chance at living a normal life now. The story is always interesting and believable. I wish you happy vacation. Michelle
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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I like the story Troy told Anna, and the girl does sound like her. Anna and Michael are adjusting nicely a healthy, happy family oriented environment. I think she now realizes that she has a good chance at living a normal life now. The story is always interesting and believable. I wish you happy vacation. Michelle
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review
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You're welcome.