Comment from Rattler

Excellent

Your dialog flows so smoothly. It actually builds suspense just as well as the action does.

Great read.

P.S. I'll be back later. For some reason I need a hamburger and fries. :)

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012

LOL thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi Barbara,

You certanly have some nasty types working on Anna's husband's side. I suspect you have some more nastiness lined up for her before they're done though.

Patrick

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012

I sure do. I hope I can pull it off. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from purrfect tale

Excellent

I'm going to be wondering all week what this guy thought he was going to do in her office. Can't wait to see where you take things from here.

(Troy) chuckled. "That's the point of a disguise." - Oops, typo

About (half a block) from Anna's office,

With all the charges they're racking up(,)

So(,) Mrs. Rodgers won't be back until later this afternoon?

You shouldn't have risk(ed) coming here."

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012

I mess up with commas, but everything else was just stupid mistaked that I knew. I hate it when I do that. Thank you for your eagle eye.

Comment from WilliamDeen

Excellent

Good work, Barbara. Enjoyable read and really like the Troy character. No spags noticed. Good flow, dialogue, and details. Well done! Keep Reading & Writing! billy

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Well penned Barbara. I can see it building and building and waiting for the explosion.

Flowed well and still true to the characters and the plot/story.

Well done.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Janie King

Excellent

Now's no time for her to take a stand..the ding nats could blow up the building or shoot her coming out or only God knows what! Now, I have to wait a whole week to see what happens...mmoooaaannn...sigh...good chapter. It does make one want to tear off some bad peoples heads. God bless.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012

Thank you for the kind review. Some people never learn. LOL

Comment from Gert sherwood

Exceptional

Hello Barb You always come up with something new and exciting in your new chapters
Finally I know who the Beggar is (Sam)
Now I just hope and pray that who ever is threading Anna doesn't find out about Sam watching over Anna and her actions
I say it's pretty scary

Gert

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Gert sherwood on 11-Mar-2012

You are welcome
Gert

Comment from jadapenn

Excellent

Hi Barbie, the story is moving now. Poor Anna has every reason to be scared with all Bobbie's friends and relatives on her trail. I hope Troy knows what he's up to. Nice write. luv jada

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from JW

Excellent

In reading this well written chapter, it definitely appears that things are about to come to a head. Anna, no doubt, is being watched to closely if something wasn't about to happen.

Thanks for sharing this. JW

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Ohoh, she decides to take a stance and remain at the office. Be damned if I'd let these punks get to me. Time for some real action coming up. Sigh, and she thought she was safe.l

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012

Yes, reall action is about to happen. Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Gungalo on 11-Mar-2012

Oh goodie!