Forgotten Thoughts
Sometimes They Come Back103 total reviews
Comment from doris1022
Fine poem...keep your thoughts inspiring and entertaining for others to share at FAR. have a fine week and much cheer to you my poetic partner.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Fine poem...keep your thoughts inspiring and entertaining for others to share at FAR. have a fine week and much cheer to you my poetic partner.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you Doris,
I appreciate your thoughts.
Curt
Comment from rantingsenior
A wonderful rhythm, beautiful and disturbing imagery, and great artistry in dealing with the topic. Thanks for a nice experience.
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A wonderful rhythm, beautiful and disturbing imagery, and great artistry in dealing with the topic. Thanks for a nice experience.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your most humbling rating of this work...I am honored.
Curt
Comment from Black_Oxygen
with scars that last from days gone past in hues of blacks and greys.
This poetry flows nicely. The rhymes are perfect and make
it easy to read. It holds the reader's attention from
start to finish. Thank You for your creation.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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with scars that last from days gone past in hues of blacks and greys.
This poetry flows nicely. The rhymes are perfect and make
it easy to read. It holds the reader's attention from
start to finish. Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you my friend for your time and for your thoughts,
Curt
Comment from expressions9
Your poem is really well-written Curt with excellent rhythm and rhyme! Forgotten thoughts (particularly hurts) do like to resurface and try to linger if given the chance.
In the last line of your first stanza, perhaps
"what seem (like) dreams to some ...." etc.
There is excellent imagery and use of metaphors throughout this excellent piece!
Thanks for sharing :)
Christine
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Your poem is really well-written Curt with excellent rhythm and rhyme! Forgotten thoughts (particularly hurts) do like to resurface and try to linger if given the chance.
In the last line of your first stanza, perhaps
"what seem (like) dreams to some ...." etc.
There is excellent imagery and use of metaphors throughout this excellent piece!
Thanks for sharing :)
Christine
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you Christine,
I am truly honored to receive a six from you.
I thought of that change, but in the reading, I wanted something just a bit different from the normal "like."
I hope it still works for you, and again, many thanks.
Curt
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You're welcome! That's fine - it's still an excellent poem all the way through :)
Christine
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
This flows down the page like sweet honey, dear Ab. Such extraordinary talent you have for making it all flow, rhyme and come together in a perfect meter! (Slant rhymes are great as well.) Yes, the thoughts are always there, slightly beneath the surface. Exceptional! xo, Dais~
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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This flows down the page like sweet honey, dear Ab. Such extraordinary talent you have for making it all flow, rhyme and come together in a perfect meter! (Slant rhymes are great as well.) Yes, the thoughts are always there, slightly beneath the surface. Exceptional! xo, Dais~
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much Daisy!
I am more than honored to receive such high praise from you, as you well know I consider you one of the best out here in free verse.
You made my day.
Love,
Ab
Comment from Titanx9
There is so much truth in this well-crafted poem. It's amazing when we allow thoughts to roam unbridled through our minds, especially the not so good ones and believe they are fleeting. Often, they are not! I'm glad you touched on this subject, because I realized a long time ago that if you don't put bad thoughts to rest when they surface they will come back to haunt you at the most inopportune time. Thanks for sharing a very pertinent piece, I enjoyed reading it!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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There is so much truth in this well-crafted poem. It's amazing when we allow thoughts to roam unbridled through our minds, especially the not so good ones and believe they are fleeting. Often, they are not! I'm glad you touched on this subject, because I realized a long time ago that if you don't put bad thoughts to rest when they surface they will come back to haunt you at the most inopportune time. Thanks for sharing a very pertinent piece, I enjoyed reading it!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for your candid thoughts and for your generous rating my friend.
Curt
Comment from jaydub99
Outstanding poem full of alliterative punch and carefully crafted sentences. It is poignant and full of imagery. I really liked the phrasing and the metaphors that dance throughout your piece. This is really good.
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Outstanding poem full of alliterative punch and carefully crafted sentences. It is poignant and full of imagery. I really liked the phrasing and the metaphors that dance throughout your piece. This is really good.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for your sincere thoughts and for your most generous rating of this piece.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from seren james
This is a wonderfully crafted poem. A very poignant story told about some extreme memories. 'wounds that sit on shelves in broken jars'. Goodness what imagery! Throughout the poem you have used these visuals with brlliant effect.The poem flows so smoothly.
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This is a wonderfully crafted poem. A very poignant story told about some extreme memories. 'wounds that sit on shelves in broken jars'. Goodness what imagery! Throughout the poem you have used these visuals with brlliant effect.The poem flows so smoothly.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Your thoughts are the sixc I strive for my friend, and I want to thank you sincerely for thinking so highly of my work.
I am honored.
Curt
Comment from Glasstruth
Alliteration and the internal rhymes weave your thoughts into beautiful metaphors. My favorite:
"contained inside the cobalt tide that no one vessel keeps
what seems are dreams to some become the nightmares while I sleep." Awesome! Les
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Alliteration and the internal rhymes weave your thoughts into beautiful metaphors. My favorite:
"contained inside the cobalt tide that no one vessel keeps
what seems are dreams to some become the nightmares while I sleep." Awesome! Les
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank Les,
I really appreciate your thoughts and am glad you enjoyed this read.
Curt
Comment from Chanphy
The imagery in your poem is profound. Your use of language is strong, and you clearly get your points across to the reader. I really love the structure, the rhythm, and the tone of the poem. They all flow together perfectly. Excellent job.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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The imagery in your poem is profound. Your use of language is strong, and you clearly get your points across to the reader. I really love the structure, the rhythm, and the tone of the poem. They all flow together perfectly. Excellent job.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you my friend, your thoughts and rating are much appreciated.
Curt