Another Pretty Face
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Comment from eliz100
This was another great read from beginning to end. In the third paragraph from the bottom there is a nit. Will (we) be able to get that back?
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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This was another great read from beginning to end. In the third paragraph from the bottom there is a nit. Will (we) be able to get that back?
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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I just fixed that. Thank you for catching it.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, I like George, too. He's a comforting soul to have around Sara. Good job as always with your storyline, conversations and realism that draws us into the story. Anxious to know where Joe is going at midnight.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Barbara, I like George, too. He's a comforting soul to have around Sara. Good job as always with your storyline, conversations and realism that draws us into the story. Anxious to know where Joe is going at midnight.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I always liked George too.
Comment from bookishfabler
I know the feeling about poss. I never think mine are ready. I didn't see too much to fix, this is what I noted down.
I do appreciate the description which is so natural of the walls being painted and the conversation, however I do need to ask myself. If my daughter was missing, would I give a rat's ass about wall color. It might be a distraction, but in reality, Sara should be a total wreck.
He moved the bedding aside, so Sara could sit.
(I dn't think there should be a comma)
"How much sleep have you had the past two night(s)?"
how wonderful it was making love with her. He sighed, then turned(-,) and lay back down on the couch.
Another fun read. Truly, I see your name in my box and go right to your book. For a romance, that says alot. But you put the crime thing in, so, I get really involved. Great job
hugs Book
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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I know the feeling about poss. I never think mine are ready. I didn't see too much to fix, this is what I noted down.
I do appreciate the description which is so natural of the walls being painted and the conversation, however I do need to ask myself. If my daughter was missing, would I give a rat's ass about wall color. It might be a distraction, but in reality, Sara should be a total wreck.
He moved the bedding aside, so Sara could sit.
(I dn't think there should be a comma)
"How much sleep have you had the past two night(s)?"
how wonderful it was making love with her. He sighed, then turned(-,) and lay back down on the couch.
Another fun read. Truly, I see your name in my box and go right to your book. For a romance, that says alot. But you put the crime thing in, so, I get really involved. Great job
hugs Book
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate you sticking with me. I have a friend whose husband is a helicopter pilot that flies for special forces. Everytime he's gone she paints the walls.
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really? I'm picturing a very multi-colored house. Enough paint and the walls will start shrinking in. LOL.
Comment from pickthorn
Ah...We are about to find Cassie! I like the dialogue between Joe and Sara. I think they are developing a trusting relationship, or Sara is becoming more trusting of Joe. I enjoyed this chapter. Looking forward to the next. ( I think you may have left out 'we' in this sentence. "Will be able to get that back?"
pickthorn
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Ah...We are about to find Cassie! I like the dialogue between Joe and Sara. I think they are developing a trusting relationship, or Sara is becoming more trusting of Joe. I enjoyed this chapter. Looking forward to the next. ( I think you may have left out 'we' in this sentence. "Will be able to get that back?"
pickthorn
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your keen eye. I fixed that little error. I appreciate your review.
Comment from RKagan
Organized crime? Interesting... Now everything changes again. I am waiting eagarly for the next post. The ciff hanger at the end keeps me on the edge of my seat.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Organized crime? Interesting... Now everything changes again. I am waiting eagarly for the next post. The ciff hanger at the end keeps me on the edge of my seat.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your continued support.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written. You have done a good job of maintaining the suspense factor. Joe and his releationship with Sarah are really being put to the test.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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This is very well written. You have done a good job of maintaining the suspense factor. Joe and his releationship with Sarah are really being put to the test.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
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YOu're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from Shirley McLain
Very good story and still full of tension and mystery. Your characters are strong and the dialogue is good. You did a great job as usual.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Very good story and still full of tension and mystery. Your characters are strong and the dialogue is good. You did a great job as usual.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a great chapter to your book. it shows people trying to live as normally as possible to cope with a sad situation and the characters are shown to be caring and diligent.
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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this is a great chapter to your book. it shows people trying to live as normally as possible to cope with a sad situation and the characters are shown to be caring and diligent.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.