Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Part three, Chapter 15"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Chris Tee
Barbara this is another absolutely marvelous part you have written here for us old sport.
Well done indeed with this work which is as usual splendid
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Barbara this is another absolutely marvelous part you have written here for us old sport.
Well done indeed with this work which is as usual splendid
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Penny 4 your thought
This is a well written chapter I have been following along for a while. This is written in a language that will appeal to the average reader. If you do not have a publicist try selling it to Amazon for Kindle. All in all a solid five.
Penny 4 your thought
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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This is a well written chapter I have been following along for a while. This is written in a language that will appeal to the average reader. If you do not have a publicist try selling it to Amazon for Kindle. All in all a solid five.
Penny 4 your thought
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I will consider that.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I think Anna has become
a stronger woman after
going through so much
and has the right attitude..
to move on and not play their
games.
Most enjoyable, Barbara.
Margaret
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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I think Anna has become
a stronger woman after
going through so much
and has the right attitude..
to move on and not play their
games.
Most enjoyable, Barbara.
Margaret
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from purrfect tale
Looks like she is finally going to come out strong. I'm so glad. I am worried about the alarm though. It sounds like a possible set-up.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Looks like she is finally going to come out strong. I'm so glad. I am worried about the alarm though. It sounds like a possible set-up.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Just when I thought Troy was going to go for it. You've built the anticipation once again for eagerly awaiting the next post. Warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Just when I thought Troy was going to go for it. You've built the anticipation once again for eagerly awaiting the next post. Warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from livingwords
This continues to read well. You're finishing an excellent book.
I'm not sure if this is something I've seen in earlier chapters, but, I'm concerned about the inconsistency of how you display Anna's inner thoughts. In the eighth and final paragraphs, you use quotations, but in other sections, you use italics.
I'd probably stick with italics since few people talk out loud to themselves, however, either way, I think it should be consistent.
Best, Dan :))
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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This continues to read well. You're finishing an excellent book.
I'm not sure if this is something I've seen in earlier chapters, but, I'm concerned about the inconsistency of how you display Anna's inner thoughts. In the eighth and final paragraphs, you use quotations, but in other sections, you use italics.
I'd probably stick with italics since few people talk out loud to themselves, however, either way, I think it should be consistent.
Best, Dan :))
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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I will check that but sometimes during this post I have Anna speaking out loud and not using inner thoughts. When I have used only inner thoughts, I have got gigged for using too many. Thank you for your kind review.
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Yeah, that is a problem we all face when writing from this POV. The only other option is She thought..., etc. But that can be overdone also. Dan :))
Comment from irishauthorme
Excellent construction. Your dialogue contained just the right amounts of drama and humor, very real. I will go back and read your story from the first chapter, to do you justice.
I have been confused about the use of italics, so I interpreted your sentences in italics as Anna's thoughts, and the sentences in quotation marks as words she said out loud to herself, is this correct?
irish
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Excellent construction. Your dialogue contained just the right amounts of drama and humor, very real. I will go back and read your story from the first chapter, to do you justice.
I have been confused about the use of italics, so I interpreted your sentences in italics as Anna's thoughts, and the sentences in quotation marks as words she said out loud to herself, is this correct?
irish
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
Brian painted the perfect picture for this chapter. I know Troy used a great deal of strength to leave Anna when he did. I too wonder what happened at his office. I wonder if it's Bobby's mother who is harassing her? I am glad she won't back down and become more afraid of her own shadow and it is starting to look like she has. Good chapter! Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Hi Barbara,
Brian painted the perfect picture for this chapter. I know Troy used a great deal of strength to leave Anna when he did. I too wonder what happened at his office. I wonder if it's Bobby's mother who is harassing her? I am glad she won't back down and become more afraid of her own shadow and it is starting to look like she has. Good chapter! Blessings, chey
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
It seems Anna can never be free of thoughts of past abuse. The phone call (from Bobby's mother?) is another attempt to keep her from achieving her true independence. There's evidence of stalking with the phone call and then the muffler sound. Could the alarm being set of at Troy's office have been someone's attempt to get him away from Anna' place? Intriguing possibilities. Good for Anna when she declares she's not throwing a pity party. judi
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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It seems Anna can never be free of thoughts of past abuse. The phone call (from Bobby's mother?) is another attempt to keep her from achieving her true independence. There's evidence of stalking with the phone call and then the muffler sound. Could the alarm being set of at Troy's office have been someone's attempt to get him away from Anna' place? Intriguing possibilities. Good for Anna when she declares she's not throwing a pity party. judi
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thank for the kind review.
Comment from bonnick
This piece had my attention from beginning to end, so much so I have become a fan of yours so I can read from the beginning (When I get a minute :-)
Well written and easy to read, I can pick the storyline up easy enough even though there's a lot written before it :-)
Thank you :-)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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This piece had my attention from beginning to end, so much so I have become a fan of yours so I can read from the beginning (When I get a minute :-)
Well written and easy to read, I can pick the storyline up easy enough even though there's a lot written before it :-)
Thank you :-)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2012
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.