Comment from WilliamDeen

Excellent

Nice work, Barbara. Good catch at the ending. Leaves the reader wanting the next chapter. No spags noticed. Keep Reading & Writing! billy

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from CALLAHANMR

Exceptional

Hi Barbara:)
I hope Sam enjoys his cheeseburger. Great disguise for a PI.

Now that the stalker with the loud muffler has been
identified, it should be easy to get him back in jail. Surely he is violating a parole. Since Slim is now a known associate of Anna's ex husband, assault charges should get him out of the way. I hope that Anna can start to relax more.

I noted only one small nit:

This is a short, but important post.

Love and Irish hugs,

Roger With [a] smile she watched Mr. Keller leave her office. {I think you need the article "a".}

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012

I must have been correcting that as you were reading, but thank you for your eagle eye. I appreciate your help and support.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

manager at one o'clock, and I'm not sure - add comma
With smile she watched - With a smile
Nobody's supposed know he's guarding - to know
Oh, how terrible that the man who's been trailing her is a dangerous criminal associate of Bobby. That certainly confirms all their worst suspicions. Brooke

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012

I have added the comma. The other changes I was making while you were reading. Thank you for your eagle eye. I appreciate your support.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

a great chapter, Barbara..
I feel so sorry for Anna,
as she no sooner leaps over
one hurdle and there's another
threatening her future - poor
woman.

Thank goodness she's found a friend in Troy.. a comfort.

I wonder if Everett found out who owns the truck with the loud muffler. - is this as a question to herself... (the ?)

With (a)smile she
caf©.- evil eddie at work

Margaret

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012

Thank you for your kind review. My prayers are still with you.

reply by Margaret Snowdon on 26-Feb-2012

thank you, my friend. Mx

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Very fast-paced and suspenseful, barbara. The dialogue is great, and the interaction with the boss is good. Shows Anna as a competent person after all she's been through. Tracking down the owner of the truck is a good step in discovering who's behind the threats to Anna. Slim's supposed to be in jail, but sounds like he's out. Maybe he's conspiring with Anna's ex and his family. judi

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from purrfect tale

Excellent

I figured the jerk causes the trouble was a friend or relative. I still think the mother-in-law is probably paying him though.

Notes:

With (a) smile(,) she watched Mr. Keller leave her office

Before sending to an agent, remember the times have to be written out: ten thirty; eleven thirty-eight.

Nobody's supposed (to) know he's guarding you."

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012

I have made the changes. I do have a question, one of my writing books say to write time as numbers. Now what do I do? Thank you for the kind review.

reply by purrfect tale on 26-Feb-2012

I worded for Random House for 20+ years and have only been retired for 4. The rule there was write it out unless using military time. Please don't tell others I'm an editor. I'm already swamped with requests to review book. Thanks.

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi Barbara,

Good development of the story and a new threat cleverly introduced. Looks like the cousin is a wanted man on the run.

Nicely developed.

Patrick

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Another great chapter. After such a long time they finally find a photo to show Anna of the one following her and worse he is a close friend of Bobby's cousin, supposed to be in jail for a serious offense. Can't wait for the next chapter.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from jadapenn

Excellent

I liked this. The plot thickens and now Anna's nerves will take a bashing with this Slim out and about. How come we never met Sam - or is he the beggar. Bet he is.
Good progress here. Troy has all the patience in the world. Where do you find men like him??? lol. luv jada

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012

Troy is a figment of my imagination. There's no man that good. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello Barb twice you brought up the sighting of the down and out homeless man.
Make me very suspicious of no good is going to happen to Anna?

Again your dialogue etc is well written.
Always look forward to reading your new chapters..
Gert

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2012

Thank you for the kind review and continued support.

reply by Gert sherwood on 26-Feb-2012

You are welcome Barb
Gert