Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 64 "part three, Chapter 19"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Allison78
I think this is another great chapter you have written and that you made an accurate depiction of what it's like waiting for a loved one. I'm anxious to read the next chapter like always!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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I think this is another great chapter you have written and that you made an accurate depiction of what it's like waiting for a loved one. I'm anxious to read the next chapter like always!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbara,
This had a very realistic feel and portrayed the gamut of emotions suffered by loved ones in a waiting room. Very cleanly and effectively written. Great job--Ted
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Dear Barbara,
This had a very realistic feel and portrayed the gamut of emotions suffered by loved ones in a waiting room. Very cleanly and effectively written. Great job--Ted
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb Tell your hubby Brian I like his sketch.
Now you have me worried about Anna ( code blue in the recovery room)
I could feel the tension if Anna was going to be alright and seems to be a lot of concern for Micheal
Gert
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Hello Barb Tell your hubby Brian I like his sketch.
Now you have me worried about Anna ( code blue in the recovery room)
I could feel the tension if Anna was going to be alright and seems to be a lot of concern for Micheal
Gert
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
OMG - I hope Anna hasn't had a turn for the worse..
poor Troy is suffering on her behalf also.
a tense chapter, Barbara.
She (has)been through
[Troy](He) stood and threw - as you've mentioned Troy and reader knows whom your talking about, might I suggest you change it to "He"
"You know.(")He paused
bastard beat his mom to death - death doesn't seem right since not true... might you consider... almost to death
settled into (our) own little world
At first(,) it took time
Margaret
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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OMG - I hope Anna hasn't had a turn for the worse..
poor Troy is suffering on her behalf also.
a tense chapter, Barbara.
She (has)been through
[Troy](He) stood and threw - as you've mentioned Troy and reader knows whom your talking about, might I suggest you change it to "He"
"You know.(")He paused
bastard beat his mom to death - death doesn't seem right since not true... might you consider... almost to death
settled into (our) own little world
At first(,) it took time
Margaret
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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I will make those changes, thank you for your eagle eye. Troy watched his stepfather beat his mother to death, that's what I was refering too.
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Sorry, Barbara, I misunderstood. M
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I will make those changes, thank you for your eagle eye. Troy watched his stepfather beat his mother to death, that's what I was refering too.
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Not a problem. I may not have made it clear. I will recheck it.
Comment from elgone
This is a much calmer piece than the last, but it does what it needs to do in bridging between the tension of the last piece and seeing how things will advance. The ending is alarming. It could be anyone in recovery but you assume it is Anna.
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This is a much calmer piece than the last, but it does what it needs to do in bridging between the tension of the last piece and seeing how things will advance. The ending is alarming. It could be anyone in recovery but you assume it is Anna.
E
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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The next post will tell if it's Anna or not. Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from tinams
I enjoyed this post very much. You use very good description and imagery in your writing, and your words flow smoothly. A very enjoyable read :) Tina
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I enjoyed this post very much. You use very good description and imagery in your writing, and your words flow smoothly. A very enjoyable read :) Tina
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
This is moving along so well, Barbara. You really have the readers all involved in what's happening to Anna. I like the way you handled Troy's inner dialogue. You show very realistically how families and loved ones react when someone has to undergo serious surgery. It's sad to hear about the plans for Michael should Anna not pull through. Hope the cohorts get's what's coming to them. A very suspenseful ending. I'll be waiting to see how Anna gets along. judi
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This is moving along so well, Barbara. You really have the readers all involved in what's happening to Anna. I like the way you handled Troy's inner dialogue. You show very realistically how families and loved ones react when someone has to undergo serious surgery. It's sad to hear about the plans for Michael should Anna not pull through. Hope the cohorts get's what's coming to them. A very suspenseful ending. I'll be waiting to see how Anna gets along. judi
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. judi
Comment from RebelRose
I hope it's not Anna. Guess I'll have to wait and see. This is another great, edge-of-your-seat, chapter. I look forward to the next one.
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I hope it's not Anna. Guess I'll have to wait and see. This is another great, edge-of-your-seat, chapter. I look forward to the next one.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Kingsland
You put very good imagery in your writing. That is essential in writing a good story line. This was another very good chapter in your ongoing story. I enjoyed partaking of it... John
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You put very good imagery in your writing. That is essential in writing a good story line. This was another very good chapter in your ongoing story. I enjoyed partaking of it... John
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you for sticking with me. I know this isn't your area so I really appreciate you taking time to read.
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I have started a couple of novels. but they take so much time away from my poetic avenues...
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very true, writing a novel does take time.
Comment from c_lucas
Nice hook. I am assuming it is for someone else, not Anna. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for an excellent read.
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Nice hook. I am assuming it is for someone else, not Anna. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for an excellent read.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie