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Writings From the Heart

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A book of Poetry & Writing

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Comment from jack silver
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A very pondering sort of poem. I enjoyed reading and didn't see anything about it that needed to be fixed up. And I thought it was really very good.

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 Comment Written 09-May-2010


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    thank you jack
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    no probs
Comment from fionageorge
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Ah, yes, when asked the question? Will I tell the truth? You have posed some very interesting questions here, my friend. Are we honest, or do we hide behind a mask, trying to please others, partners etc. Well written, flows freely, and has excellent rhythm.
Warmest regards,
Marijke

 Comment Written 09-May-2010


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    thank you Marijke
Comment from honeytree
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Washing our mouths with soap never happened within our family. I have heard it being used though.

I think talking situations through with children and some adults.It is important as they will learn where they went wrong. A frightened child knowing consequences, can be quite daunting for a child and partners within adults life.

Honeytree

 Comment Written 09-May-2010


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    thanks for reading
Comment from wholechild
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It is so much easier to avoid conflict than to really address issues as they arise and in the process, we get farther away from those that we love. We are no longer true to ourselves or to them. Your poem may encompass more than I am talking about, but that is what stands out for me. It reminds me of one of my poems, "A Difficult Time". I am enjoying your writing.
Shannon

 Comment Written 09-May-2010


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    thank you for reading shannon
Comment from Carol D Parker
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This is unique. "Are we completely true when living with all their whims?" No we're not. We need to get out of all those whims. Your poem asks many questions. It's very thought provoking and stirred up my ire over things that happnened in the past. That's what a good poem does. It's very creative and clever. Great job.
Delora

 Comment Written 08-May-2010


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    thank you Delora
Comment from Orchidea Blu
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Flows well and enjoyable reading. You're bringing back old memories for me. "Soap was the punishment for children, to wash away their lies" I remember when they used to use soap to wash out your mouth for lying or saying a naughty word. I am enjoying your writing! Thank you.

 Comment Written 08-May-2010


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    thanks again
Comment from enjoi
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You did very well with this one. It's a great addition to your book and a rather interesting poem, all said. I couldn't see any errors or anything dragging down the quality. Thank you for sharing and much respect.

 Comment Written 08-May-2010


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    thank again for reading
Comment from Zoe Yates
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Deep thoughts from Deep Water. There is a verse about love in the bible, I think that is the answer to the poem these questions ask. Love covers a multitude of sins, and love is patient and long suffering, it never boasts and all kinds of other stuff I believe this will answer your poem. I enjoyed reading this. Nice work.
Zoe Yates

 Comment Written 08-May-2010


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    thanks Zoe
Comment from mermaids
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You give the reader food for thought and I like the line "leaving words unspoken". Gives us a point to ponder about getting those words out. I also like the structure of this poem.

 Comment Written 08-May-2010


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    thank you mermaids
Comment from Realist101
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It is very difficult to lead a life of pleasing yourself, while trying to please all around you. Almost impossible. And does create strife. I like how you open this to question in this excellent piece. Susan

 Comment Written 08-May-2010


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    thank you susan