Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "As I wander through time and space"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from lola29
This is so lovely. Each and every word radiates with your passion for those two special ladies. I'll bet they are watching you from heaven.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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This is so lovely. Each and every word radiates with your passion for those two special ladies. I'll bet they are watching you from heaven.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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thank you Lola i hope...smiling
Comment from Judian James
Hi there Deepwater. What a lovely tribute to two important, loving women in your life. Very nice and I'm certain they know! I think I might walk "through" time and space, rather than "from" it. Just a thought. Also,
"not so sad" sounds like your were sad but not terribly sad
Perhaps "never" would work better? well done
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Hi there Deepwater. What a lovely tribute to two important, loving women in your life. Very nice and I'm certain they know! I think I might walk "through" time and space, rather than "from" it. Just a thought. Also,
"not so sad" sounds like your were sad but not terribly sad
Perhaps "never" would work better? well done
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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thanks for the comments Judian
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I would expect the same from you with reviews. Even if the writer never pays heed, at least other's opinions are known and it does cause one to think and become a better writer no matter what. That's what I'm here for anyway!
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a lovely and poignant poem that bring picture from the past back to my own mind. I love the way the stars whisper the names of "mom and gorn," and know how it would be to see them in your dreams. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
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This is a lovely and poignant poem that bring picture from the past back to my own mind. I love the way the stars whisper the names of "mom and gorn," and know how it would be to see them in your dreams. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
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thank you Jeanie
Comment from NadiaScrieva
Lovely little poem, but don't you mean "gran" instead of "garn"?
I'm so glad your memories make you happy and not sad. It is good to gain strength from those loved and lost.
Best wishes,
Nadia
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Lovely little poem, but don't you mean "gran" instead of "garn"?
I'm so glad your memories make you happy and not sad. It is good to gain strength from those loved and lost.
Best wishes,
Nadia
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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thank you Nadia
Comment from vandawalker
What a tribute! I like the simplicity of this poem. Free verse always expresses so much emotion, and this one does also. Should garn be capitalized as a name? Thanks for a good read.
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What a tribute! I like the simplicity of this poem. Free verse always expresses so much emotion, and this one does also. Should garn be capitalized as a name? Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
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thanks for the review and comments Vandawalker
Comment from J.E. Brown
What a sad, yet great piece of poetry! The reader can feel the pain of the author as they read and I'm sure that more than once, the reader also shared in that tear from the heart!
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What a sad, yet great piece of poetry! The reader can feel the pain of the author as they read and I'm sure that more than once, the reader also shared in that tear from the heart!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
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thank you J.E
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful tribute to your mother and ?grandmother? i didn't know what Garn stood for. great job
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful tribute to your mother and ?grandmother? i didn't know what Garn stood for. great job
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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thank you sweet for the review
Comment from missy98writer
deepwater,
what a lovely photo of your mother and grandmother. Your poem is beautifully written with ritch imagery. Excellent rhyme, great narrative, and very descriptive writing. I especially enjoyed the lines:
I do think of you both from time to time,
Knowing we'll be together again some day,
Remembering little things in life
We cherished along the way,
Dear mom and garn I miss you dear
But see you in my dreams
The stars at night do whisper your names
My heart still carries a tear,
You poem is very moving. Impressive job. You are a truly talented writer and thanks for sharing. . .Melissa.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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deepwater,
what a lovely photo of your mother and grandmother. Your poem is beautifully written with ritch imagery. Excellent rhyme, great narrative, and very descriptive writing. I especially enjoyed the lines:
I do think of you both from time to time,
Knowing we'll be together again some day,
Remembering little things in life
We cherished along the way,
Dear mom and garn I miss you dear
But see you in my dreams
The stars at night do whisper your names
My heart still carries a tear,
You poem is very moving. Impressive job. You are a truly talented writer and thanks for sharing. . .Melissa.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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thank you Melissa for this review Gary
Comment from jadapenn
This was sad but sweet, Deepwater. Your memories come in to play well and you recall all the little things which mattered so much. I enjoyed the poem and the presentation.
Well done. luv jada
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This was sad but sweet, Deepwater. Your memories come in to play well and you recall all the little things which mattered so much. I enjoyed the poem and the presentation.
Well done. luv jada
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
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thank you Jada for this review
Comment from c_lucas
This is a wonderful tribute to the poet's mother. It is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good job.
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This is a wonderful tribute to the poet's mother. It is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good job.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Thank you Mr C for your review
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You're welcome, Gary. Charlie