Ten Acorns Grew Upon an Oak
rhyming counting poem119 total reviews
Comment from angelface2
This is a cute poem, Brooke. I especially like the ending where another tree can grow. Rhythm and rhymes are good as always. Nice. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
This is a cute poem, Brooke. I especially like the ending where another tree can grow. Rhythm and rhymes are good as always. Nice. Miss Sally
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Miss Sally :_) Brooke
Comment from His Grayness
Dear Brooke: This is an interesting lesson in Mother Nature's endless book of lessons about her endless power and a great gift for one to read and understand. Life goes on and there's always a purpose. Lovely work...I'll bet this puts a smile on Sawyer's face..I did on mine! Cheers Vance
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
Dear Brooke: This is an interesting lesson in Mother Nature's endless book of lessons about her endless power and a great gift for one to read and understand. Life goes on and there's always a purpose. Lovely work...I'll bet this puts a smile on Sawyer's face..I did on mine! Cheers Vance
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Vance, thank you so much for your generous and gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from DSMalott
Very good.
I loved the story quality of this piece. The progressive nature of the acorn countdown was delightful. The rhymes were consistent and strongly set to keep the tempo moving forward.
Great job.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
Very good.
I loved the story quality of this piece. The progressive nature of the acorn countdown was delightful. The rhymes were consistent and strongly set to keep the tempo moving forward.
Great job.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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DS, thank you so very much for your generous and gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
"Seven acorns graced the tree
where hung a wooden swing.
When swinging rocked one acorn loose,
the others heard a ping." ...What, the ground was made of metal, LOL? Perhaps the swing had a metal seat, and that's what made the "ping'-ing sound. Hey, don't laugh...it could happen!
I really enjoyed this, Brooke. Clever and inventive use of storyline and rhyming. A perfect, impeccable meter (as always), and an ending that says, quite succinctly, that nature is always with us, and ever-growing. The beautiful cycle of life, 'ey?
Great work!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
"Seven acorns graced the tree
where hung a wooden swing.
When swinging rocked one acorn loose,
the others heard a ping." ...What, the ground was made of metal, LOL? Perhaps the swing had a metal seat, and that's what made the "ping'-ing sound. Hey, don't laugh...it could happen!
I really enjoyed this, Brooke. Clever and inventive use of storyline and rhyming. A perfect, impeccable meter (as always), and an ending that says, quite succinctly, that nature is always with us, and ever-growing. The beautiful cycle of life, 'ey?
Great work!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Dean :-) Brooke
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You're very welcome, Brooke. I just love your "countdown" poems...good stuff! :}
Respectfully,
~DeanO
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Brooke,
Beautiful artwork!
I so enjoy your story poems---especially the countdown ones like this.
I used to go with my dad rabbit and squirrel hunting. Of course, he spent most of the time telling me to 'sit down and shut up!' I wouldn't listen, so he'd threaten not to take me again, but the next time---he took me. (*,*).
Thanks for the cherished memories, indeed, my friend.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
Hi, Brooke,
Beautiful artwork!
I so enjoy your story poems---especially the countdown ones like this.
I used to go with my dad rabbit and squirrel hunting. Of course, he spent most of the time telling me to 'sit down and shut up!' I wouldn't listen, so he'd threaten not to take me again, but the next time---he took me. (*,*).
Thanks for the cherished memories, indeed, my friend.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Jax, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
Well, I can call it a night for now. Had to wait up and see if Grandmother is at it again, Sawyer. Yep! She said nuts to the squirrels Blessings to you, Brooke.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
Well, I can call it a night for now. Had to wait up and see if Grandmother is at it again, Sawyer. Yep! She said nuts to the squirrels Blessings to you, Brooke.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Ben, thank you so much :-) Have a good sleep, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
Excellent poem , I always smile at this style of yours,
great fun images as each acorn disappear . I am sure Sawyer must
have fun with them, Sara , my granddaughter love them. Pili
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
Excellent poem , I always smile at this style of yours,
great fun images as each acorn disappear . I am sure Sawyer must
have fun with them, Sara , my granddaughter love them. Pili
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are very welcome. Pili
Comment from Bina1
How very delightful! Though we know what lies ahead, you create a suspense to endear your clever poem! Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
How very delightful! Though we know what lies ahead, you create a suspense to endear your clever poem! Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Bina, thank you so much for your generous response to this counting poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
Another great entry in the count-down suite :-)
And even though I knew there was no other logical conclusion
than the one you drew. . .I enjoyed every step of the journey :-)
(one small suggestion. . .you might consider adding "up" after snatched in the next to last line. It just seems to flow more naturally :-)
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
Another great entry in the count-down suite :-)
And even though I knew there was no other logical conclusion
than the one you drew. . .I enjoyed every step of the journey :-)
(one small suggestion. . .you might consider adding "up" after snatched in the next to last line. It just seems to flow more naturally :-)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Leineco - I'll check out that line :-) Brooke
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Thanks, Leineco - I'll check out that line :-) Brooke
Comment from nancyjam
I love your counting poems and I'm sure
Sawyer does as well.
This is very clever with charming scenes
for the count-down.
I love the message of hope at the end. all is not lost as a new acorn tree will grow and produce a whole new family of little acorns! Life goes on. Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
I love your counting poems and I'm sure
Sawyer does as well.
This is very clever with charming scenes
for the count-down.
I love the message of hope at the end. all is not lost as a new acorn tree will grow and produce a whole new family of little acorns! Life goes on. Nancy
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke