Comment from scongrove

Exceptional

I love the photo you put with your poem/song! It sets the mood right away. You have many talents Roy! :) I didn't know you had wrote a recorded song. That's wonderful! Have you recorded many songs? Wow, I learned something new about you today. :)
This definitely set my mood well this morning with a smile. Your words are always pleasing to read. Thank you for that.
Always your fan,
Shana :)

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Thanks Shana, your great support is amazing, your comments always uplifting and reviews very encouraging, blessings, Roy.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A lovely poem only the ones that are close to God can understand the beauty of this lovely poem. You did a good job and thank you for the Bible verses.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Thanks so much Sandra, for great review, kind words and excellent rating, blessings, Roy.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That was absolutely beautiful my friend, I hope there are some on here who still have 6 stars to give it. I can imaging it being sung in church, the acoustics would be fabulous and a joy to listen to. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xsx

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Thank you Sandra, your approval is outstanding and inscribed on my heart, blessings, Roy.

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi Roy, so a lyric writer and a singer eh, your talents are endless, this is beautifully composed with wonderful words, but I do think you should have been fair and put the singing version on here lol!

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

I don't know how Eric, I've lost the original recording, it was a single, I've still got albums and most single recordings, but not that one, my daughter was best for recording this one, she is a superb alto singer! Thank you for wonderful review, my friend blessings, Roy.

reply by Eric1 on 25-Sep-2015

You are very welcome my friend, shame about the record though!

reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015

Most welcome

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Hi, Roy.

You are a very accomplished writer in meter (a minority on site, unfortunately), but as this is a song lyric, where the words are emphasised with the chords or feelings, I don't think meter is important, so I won't comment on that aspect, though the words still have a lyrical flow and feeling to them.

I must admit I've never been privilege to these either factual or written in metaphor fabulous dreamy experiences, but they are sure uplifting, my friend.

Nice one.

Best wishes, Ray



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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Thanks Ray, you're right about the meter, it's true the chords, in this case, are in front of the beat, sometimes the vowel sounds are shortened and lengthened depending on subsequent melody, thanks for the gracious review, my friend, blessings, Roy.

reply by Domino 2 on 24-Sep-2015

Thank YOU for your 'gracious' reply, Roy.

I bought a Spanish guitar some years ago and tried my hand at song-writing after perfecting about THREE cords - and I could still only strum and not pick.

I eventually gave the guitar to my daughter, but a recent plan of mine is to buy another one and put more effort into it this time. If nothing else, it will annoy my grumpy neighbours. LOL.

Cheers, mate. Ray.

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

You probably need a few minor chords and 7ths and a decent capo to get the correct pitch for the song,I wrote some with the keyboard, but mostly voice and guitar, with variations on chord patterns for melody, there are other things such as time signatures, such as 4/4 3/4, and rhythm is important, you don't necessarily need to pick to get a nice song, but have a go, it's very rewarding, Ray, you'll learn. blessings, Roy.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

or waltzed upon with the flowers in the wild?
--> delete 'upon' ?

Roy,

This is another lovely offering to the book of hymns! I love your praise and worship songs. They are simply beautiful. This is from the book of Job, I'm assuming?

Great work!

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Thanks Robyn for this great review, this one is mostly my own perceptions, inspired by psalms mainly, thanks again, blessings, Roy.

reply by robyn corum on 24-Sep-2015

It sounds just like the discussion between God and Job -- it's cool.

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Yes there is some wonderful dialogue and subsequent cross examination by God, saying "where were you when I laid the foundations of the earth? "After that commences the most delicious dialogue."
Yes you're right, Robyn, "lean not unto your own understanding" the song does relate to that conversation, and yet God supported Job. So He doesn't do it because we're smart, wow, blessings, Roy.

reply by robyn corum on 24-Sep-2015

Yep! Just a good thing God loves us, huh?

Thanks for this one!

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2015

Yep you're right, I guess that's what unconditional means.