Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "Transitions"Musings of an old man -2020
35 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
I Love your poem about the oncoming winter. There is a lot to marvel at when the seasons change, but there is something special about the time between fall and winter. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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I Love your poem about the oncoming winter. There is a lot to marvel at when the seasons change, but there is something special about the time between fall and winter. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are descriptive, uplifting and creative. I thought about
fall when I lived in New York and I do miss it. I live in Florida now and even though it has it's benefits there is no fall. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome. Hope you are doing well.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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The author's words are descriptive, uplifting and creative. I thought about
fall when I lived in New York and I do miss it. I live in Florida now and even though it has it's benefits there is no fall. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome. Hope you are doing well.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Harmony, thank you.
Comment from amada
You wrote very nice lines about the change of the seasons, very well written lines, my favorite was the lines came to the chilled air and those chilled shivers. Very good rhyming poem about nature's changes.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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You wrote very nice lines about the change of the seasons, very well written lines, my favorite was the lines came to the chilled air and those chilled shivers. Very good rhyming poem about nature's changes.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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amada, thank you for dropping in your comments. have a great weekend!
Comment from estory
A nice romantic poem that captures this feeling of the fading season, of life waning away, falling asleep, and the last crop of the garden being brought in. A feeling of accomplishment, but also there's that fading light, the creeping darkness, that shadows our emotions and clouds our hopes. estory
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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A nice romantic poem that captures this feeling of the fading season, of life waning away, falling asleep, and the last crop of the garden being brought in. A feeling of accomplishment, but also there's that fading light, the creeping darkness, that shadows our emotions and clouds our hopes. estory
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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Estory, thanks have a delightful weekend.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a lovely poem to go with the beautiful picture. You described the Fall just as it happens and the gardens last crop, the need to split more wood for the approaching winter, the birds chirping goodbye. Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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This is a lovely poem to go with the beautiful picture. You described the Fall just as it happens and the gardens last crop, the need to split more wood for the approaching winter, the birds chirping goodbye. Well done!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2020
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Rebecca, thank you so very much! Have a splendid weekend.
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You're very welcome! I will.
Comment from Sanku
Every season has its own thrill and bring the beauty and purpose with it .The transition into autumn has been described here beautifully .The perfect meter and the rhymes add to the enjoyment.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Every season has its own thrill and bring the beauty and purpose with it .The transition into autumn has been described here beautifully .The perfect meter and the rhymes add to the enjoyment.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Sanku, thank you so much!
Comment from Susan X Smith
I love the image, which drew me in right away to this poem about the Autumn season. The rhymes are pleasant. I would change the last line, however, because it did not flow as smoothly as the rest, and the reference to other seasons seemed distracting. I would prefer a final, pity observation about Autumn.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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I love the image, which drew me in right away to this poem about the Autumn season. The rhymes are pleasant. I would change the last line, however, because it did not flow as smoothly as the rest, and the reference to other seasons seemed distracting. I would prefer a final, pity observation about Autumn.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Susan, thanks for your fine comments.
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YW Note I made a typo, meant to say pithy observation, not pity
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Transitions", is an extremely well-written, and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill, this talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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"Transitions", is an extremely well-written, and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill, this talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Duchess, as always thank you very kindly.
JLR,
you're very welcome.
God bless, take care, and keep safe!
the Duchess
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The changing season from summer to autumn is always a little sad and we have to accept this transition and embrace the forthcoming winter too. I enjoyed your choice of words and rhymes here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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The changing season from summer to autumn is always a little sad and we have to accept this transition and embrace the forthcoming winter too. I enjoyed your choice of words and rhymes here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Dolly, as always I appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I was disappointed by the end of this poem, where you seem to infer that autumn cannot stand up against spring and summer, and this despite having done such a good job describing fall's glorious colours and its unique somber moments.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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I was disappointed by the end of this poem, where you seem to infer that autumn cannot stand up against spring and summer, and this despite having done such a good job describing fall's glorious colours and its unique somber moments.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Katherine,m then I will have made you enjoy the poem as more succinct now with a change. Thanks for the honest nudge.