Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 61 "November Beaver Moon"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
I love your flash fiction.... Great entry for the Short Story Writing Prompt contest. You managed to write a complete story in a few words, that's harder than it seems.
I love the nature scene imagery ...so beautiful.
Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Hello,
I love your flash fiction.... Great entry for the Short Story Writing Prompt contest. You managed to write a complete story in a few words, that's harder than it seems.
I love the nature scene imagery ...so beautiful.
Well done!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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thank you,
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
Hi JLR.
For me you have written a very creative and engaging short story about the feeling you felt when looking at a beaver moon. I had to look up what it was, LOL.
Many thanks for sharing. Take care, Pete
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Hi JLR.
For me you have written a very creative and engaging short story about the feeling you felt when looking at a beaver moon. I had to look up what it was, LOL.
Many thanks for sharing. Take care, Pete
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Pete, thank you I am not usually a prose writer, I do more free verse poetry, so your validation is appreciated.
Comment from lancellot
Well, while I found this narrative very descriptive of the telling of a person's feelings at that time of night. And, this is not an insult. Where is the STORY? Beginning, middle, and end.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Well, while I found this narrative very descriptive of the telling of a person's feelings at that time of night. And, this is not an insult. Where is the STORY? Beginning, middle, and end.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Lance Hum that my friend s why I stick to poetry... great input, thank you!
Comment from BethShelby
This is a good story for the prompt line. Looking at a full moon for some reason does cause you to start thinking of other times when the moon was full and you were in love. I like the words you've used in this story. They almost sound like poetry.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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This is a good story for the prompt line. Looking at a full moon for some reason does cause you to start thinking of other times when the moon was full and you were in love. I like the words you've used in this story. They almost sound like poetry.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Beth, thank you, do not do much prose, perhaps that is why it may seem more like a free verse poem. I like to practice writing however, it does make one think.
Comment from estory
This is a nicely imagined romantic piece, you create that moment when through the image of the moon, you are transported to all those romantic moments of life, past and future included. It's like a window onto the soul. Detailed descriptions of the night air and the light of the moon flesh out the scene. It's that moment in the darkness, alone with your lover, when the emotions hidden inside bubble up to the surface. estory
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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This is a nicely imagined romantic piece, you create that moment when through the image of the moon, you are transported to all those romantic moments of life, past and future included. It's like a window onto the soul. Detailed descriptions of the night air and the light of the moon flesh out the scene. It's that moment in the darkness, alone with your lover, when the emotions hidden inside bubble up to the surface. estory
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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estory, thank you!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lovely short story, it certainly had the beginning, middle and end. I
enjoyed reading all the detail, the imagery and journey through the moons cycle, and the wonderful love that once was. Excellent. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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What a lovely short story, it certainly had the beginning, middle and end. I
enjoyed reading all the detail, the imagery and journey through the moons cycle, and the wonderful love that once was. Excellent. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Sandra, thank ou very much!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Your story is very romantic; revealing the low hung moon displaying the night's skyline. The cool night air brings about a bit of calm stillness as you think about your loved one.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Your story is very romantic; revealing the low hung moon displaying the night's skyline. The cool night air brings about a bit of calm stillness as you think about your loved one.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Smiling back, thank you!
Comment from equestrik
This is a nicely presented story for the contest. Beautiful picture and well written story. Your last lines are lovely and thought provoking. Best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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This is a nicely presented story for the contest. Beautiful picture and well written story. Your last lines are lovely and thought provoking. Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thanks for your time spent reviewing and commenting.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Friend,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the moments filled with romantic feelings.
Live description of scenes and situations is particularly noteworthy.
Laudable Attempt!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Hello Friend,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction meeting the desired norms, having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the moments filled with romantic feelings.
Live description of scenes and situations is particularly noteworthy.
Laudable Attempt!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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My! thank you so much!
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JLR, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
You are a beautiful writer and a contemplative philosopher, it would seem.
There is a nice lyrical quality to your writing...seems like you've likely been a writer for some time.
There are several strong entries in this contest and yours is one of them. Yours is the only one I have read that mentions the Beaver moon twice (though not in those words.) I thought it was a good thing to go back and reconnect to the beginning of your story.
Your last line is a strong one...journeys without needing a passport. Well-done.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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You are a beautiful writer and a contemplative philosopher, it would seem.
There is a nice lyrical quality to your writing...seems like you've likely been a writer for some time.
There are several strong entries in this contest and yours is one of them. Yours is the only one I have read that mentions the Beaver moon twice (though not in those words.) I thought it was a good thing to go back and reconnect to the beginning of your story.
Your last line is a strong one...journeys without needing a passport. Well-done.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Cynthia, wow! I am so very grateful for your review and comments, thank you!