Autumn's Passion
Based on a True incident13 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
I love your flash non-fiction.... Great entry for the Short Story Writing Prompt contest. You managed to write a complete story in a few words, that's harder than it seems.
I love the romantic and sensual story of a married couple who know how to keep it hot after fifteen years. I agree with you.
Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Hello,
I love your flash non-fiction.... Great entry for the Short Story Writing Prompt contest. You managed to write a complete story in a few words, that's harder than it seems.
I love the romantic and sensual story of a married couple who know how to keep it hot after fifteen years. I agree with you.
Well done!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL!! That was such a funny twist at the end, and I'm sure that has happened to many couples. I thought it was really lovely that you've been married 15 years, and the flame still burns. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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LOL!! That was such a funny twist at the end, and I'm sure that has happened to many couples. I thought it was really lovely that you've been married 15 years, and the flame still burns. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, these two are a daring couple who should get a room! You made me smile as these love birds are still deeply in love, a fun post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Ha ha ha, these two are a daring couple who should get a room! You made me smile as these love birds are still deeply in love, a fun post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Dolly
Comment from BethShelby
This is a funny story. It was getting very romantic as the wife tempts her husband under the light of the Beaver moon. The romantic evening came to a crashing halt with that surprise ending. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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This is a funny story. It was getting very romantic as the wife tempts her husband under the light of the Beaver moon. The romantic evening came to a crashing halt with that surprise ending. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Wouldn't that be an awful feeling to have happen, when the fire is igniting? Sometimes we have to put out the fire before it can happen; especially in a park that's public....
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Wouldn't that be an awful feeling to have happen, when the fire is igniting? Sometimes we have to put out the fire before it can happen; especially in a park that's public....
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Yes, it happened to me once, years ago.
Thank you.
Comment from royowen
Poor dear married couple, fulfilling their passion isn't going to be fulfilled, because a female female police officer won't let them. Inspired effort and a good entry in this short story Entry, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Poor dear married couple, fulfilling their passion isn't going to be fulfilled, because a female female police officer won't let them. Inspired effort and a good entry in this short story Entry, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Roy.
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Welcome
Comment from jenintorre
A very erotic little tale. I didn't expect the ending which is good in a flash fiction. I wish you lots of luck in the short story competition. Best wishes, Jen.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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A very erotic little tale. I didn't expect the ending which is good in a flash fiction. I wish you lots of luck in the short story competition. Best wishes, Jen.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Jen.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I love this short story. It was so cute that drew me in and then a pale of ice water was poured over my head. You are a skillful romance writer and should post more stories like this.
I would have given you six stars if I can.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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I love this short story. It was so cute that drew me in and then a pale of ice water was poured over my head. You are a skillful romance writer and should post more stories like this.
I would have given you six stars if I can.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
Really, really well-done.
The ending, especially, was a total surprise and expertly penned.
In this short story, you get a good sense of the strong relationship between the pair; the love, passion, trust and easy way they have with each other. After fifteen years ... we should all be so lucky.
The artwork is a fine accompaniment.
I wonder about the title; yes it is autumn when it takes place but isn't their love for all seasons?
Autumn, for me, makes it sound time-sensitive.
This contest has several strong entries...yours is one of them. Good luck.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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Really, really well-done.
The ending, especially, was a total surprise and expertly penned.
In this short story, you get a good sense of the strong relationship between the pair; the love, passion, trust and easy way they have with each other. After fifteen years ... we should all be so lucky.
The artwork is a fine accompaniment.
I wonder about the title; yes it is autumn when it takes place but isn't their love for all seasons?
Autumn, for me, makes it sound time-sensitive.
This contest has several strong entries...yours is one of them. Good luck.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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Thank you. The Autumn is the time of their marriage and age. Most people think of young passion but it exist in our Autumn and Winter years too. Or so I hope.
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Ahh, very good.
I don't think I looked in the notes section. If you haven't, I think it would be good to add that info about the couple there. Really nice tribute.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Hm, they should put up signs in the parks for no hutchy -pochy in public space. " The police officer shook her head. "Park's closed. All lovebirds must return to their nest."
I am not sure, because English is my third language, but shouldn't be icicle? Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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Hm, they should put up signs in the parks for no hutchy -pochy in public space. " The police officer shook her head. "Park's closed. All lovebirds must return to their nest."
I am not sure, because English is my third language, but shouldn't be icicle? Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much. I was thinking of an ice weapon used in video games and fantasy tales, but I see, people may not see it that way. So, I will change it.
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Ha, ha everyone went into the wrong direction