dusting out memories
one line poem entry13 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Mark,
This is a good metaphor in a one line poem. Maybe we don't loose memories, but they come back when we need them.
Congrats on placing thifd in the contest,
Keep writng and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Mark,
This is a good metaphor in a one line poem. Maybe we don't loose memories, but they come back when we need them.
Congrats on placing thifd in the contest,
Keep writng and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 03-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Joan,
Thank you for your review/ comments and recognition of my podium placement. Stay safe. Keep healthy too.
Mark
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Mark,
You're welcome and Thank you.
Joan
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Mark, a BIG CONGRATULATIONS to you on this winning piece.
I can't believe I missed reviewing this one. It is an excellent
entry and no wonder that it placed. I LIKE it! xx
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Mark, a BIG CONGRATULATIONS to you on this winning piece.
I can't believe I missed reviewing this one. It is an excellent
entry and no wonder that it placed. I LIKE it! xx
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Thanks DD for this sixer! So pleased with your comments about my podium placement. Your late review is still greatly appreciated.
Mark
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Absolutely my pleasure :-) ~DD
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-line poem, Dusting Our Memories, uses nine words and suggests that we never fully forget things in our past. Sometimes, when we least expect it, a dust bunny hops back into the light.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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This one-line poem, Dusting Our Memories, uses nine words and suggests that we never fully forget things in our past. Sometimes, when we least expect it, a dust bunny hops back into the light.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Bill,
Yep, those dust bunnies do happen!
Mark
Mark
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Marco!
I like the theme .. but I think wording it slightly differently , your poem would flow better ..eliminate those useless THE ..OF
and even OUR could be scraped.
(Our )Memories, like cobwebs, rarely get completely dusted out.
I think the jist of your poem is still there ..
The art choice is unusual but fits .. shows how memories in time can become fogged, confused, intersect
Keep safe!
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Ciao Marco!
I like the theme .. but I think wording it slightly differently , your poem would flow better ..eliminate those useless THE ..OF
and even OUR could be scraped.
(Our )Memories, like cobwebs, rarely get completely dusted out.
I think the jist of your poem is still there ..
The art choice is unusual but fits .. shows how memories in time can become fogged, confused, intersect
Keep safe!
Comment Written 07-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Tempeste,
I edited just a bit. Thanks for your insight and recommendation.
Mark
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Glad you eliminated THE and OF .. it flows like a steady stream now..( wink)
Mother?s Day tomorrow .. is your mamma still alive .. ?
I have my mother?s ashes with me in the house still ..
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She would have been 100 at the end of April. Both my mother and mother in law celebrated their 95th birthdays in good health.
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I hope you have a lovely day celebrating , eating cake and drinking spumante!
Keep safe!
Comment from royowen
I think there's a measure of comfort derived from old memories that perhaps should have been laid to rest, but haven't been for whatever, like old and useless obsessions that we like to hold on to, creating clutter, perceptive here Mark, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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I think there's a measure of comfort derived from old memories that perhaps should have been laid to rest, but haven't been for whatever, like old and useless obsessions that we like to hold on to, creating clutter, perceptive here Mark, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Roy,
Methinks your selective cleaning is the right way to declutter some memories.
Thanks for your review.
Mark
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Well done
Comment from Sugarray77
Well done on this verse, Mark. You have a knack and talent for saying things in a complete and concise manner in these short forms. I like this thought and can relate to it. Well done, and good luck!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Well done on this verse, Mark. You have a knack and talent for saying things in a complete and concise manner in these short forms. I like this thought and can relate to it. Well done, and good luck!!
Melissa
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thanks Melissa for your support.
It is true, I have no knack for longer poem formats. And I do try to be concise (-; Often good things do come in small packages: my wife and daughter stand tall at less than 5?3? (-;
Mark
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is so true and the trick to only hold onto the precious memorable and happy ones that fill our hearts with love and let go of the anxiousness in those memories which are best forgotten, much enjoyed Mark, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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This is so true and the trick to only hold onto the precious memorable and happy ones that fill our hearts with love and let go of the anxiousness in those memories which are best forgotten, much enjoyed Mark, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Dolly,
Your selectiveness is a worthy consideration.
Thanks for your insight and response to my post.
Mark
Comment from June Sargent
Cobwebs, indeed! The memories in the attic of our minds include the good, the bad and sometimes, the ugly. Sorting them out is an option not many are willing to take. Best to let the cobwebs cover them...
reply by the author on 07-May-2021
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Cobwebs, indeed! The memories in the attic of our minds include the good, the bad and sometimes, the ugly. Sorting them out is an option not many are willing to take. Best to let the cobwebs cover them...
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 07-May-2021
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June,
We should massage those memories, warts and all! Thanks for your review of my one-liner post and stars.
Mark
Comment from Iza Deleanu
What a beautiful poem, I think you have a winner here :"The cobwebs of our memories
rarely get completely dusted out." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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What a beautiful poem, I think you have a winner here :"The cobwebs of our memories
rarely get completely dusted out." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thanks Iza!
Let?s hope the contest voters agree with your assessment.
Regardless, your review gives me positive vibes.
Mark
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You are a winner already in my books:)
Comment from DentedSyke
A deep truth in a few words. The word "completely" makes the poem. Our residual memories stay with us, color the texture of our dreams. This simple piece is full of meaning, worthy of introspection.
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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A deep truth in a few words. The word "completely" makes the poem. Our residual memories stay with us, color the texture of our dreams. This simple piece is full of meaning, worthy of introspection.
Comment Written 05-May-2021
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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THANK YOU DS!
Your review includes some great phrases and future ideas for my typical 5-7-5 Haiku poems.
...(color) the texture of dreams and residual memories are kernels for thought!
Mark
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I am honored to help.