Strawberry Supermoon
1/5/5/9 Four Line Poem for Contest11 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Gypsy,
This is a wonderful ekphrastic poem for this piece of artwork. It has good use fo imagery and emotion.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2021
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Gypsy,
This is a wonderful ekphrastic poem for this piece of artwork. It has good use fo imagery and emotion.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 13-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Joan. I appreciate your exceptional review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
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Don't mention it, Gypsy
Enjoy your weekend, also.
Joan
Comment from kahpot
A stunning presentation and four line poem, great alliteration and connection between lines, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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A stunning presentation and four line poem, great alliteration and connection between lines, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 26-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. May you have a wonderful weekend.
gypsy hugs
Comment from Justin Chopin
Enjoyed this piece Gypsy. I was impressed by how you were able to personify each of the animals you brought into this poem the dog being the one who gives out these melancholic wails at this massive moon and the falcon who calmly or perhaps with some sort of apathy flies by the moon without a second thought. Great job with the writing of this poem.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Enjoyed this piece Gypsy. I was impressed by how you were able to personify each of the animals you brought into this poem the dog being the one who gives out these melancholic wails at this massive moon and the falcon who calmly or perhaps with some sort of apathy flies by the moon without a second thought. Great job with the writing of this poem.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much, Justin, for taking the time to read and review my poem. May you have a wonderful weekend.
gypsy hugs
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You're welcome.
Comment from Ginnygray
Very lovely formatting! The dog howling at the super moon as though he was composing a song for such a radiant view! The sole falcon wanted to be the sole star on such a vibrant background! Lovely and well done 1/5/5/9
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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Very lovely formatting! The dog howling at the super moon as though he was composing a song for such a radiant view! The sole falcon wanted to be the sole star on such a vibrant background! Lovely and well done 1/5/5/9
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from VJWild
Wow, this is so great, the colors, the artwork, the words and mention of animals/nature...I actually said "mmm" when I finished reading it, I can't even explain how it made me feel...calm and happy...nice piece!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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Wow, this is so great, the colors, the artwork, the words and mention of animals/nature...I actually said "mmm" when I finished reading it, I can't even explain how it made me feel...calm and happy...nice piece!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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VJwild, thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An eerie write and the dog always senses something different and howls because he is scared of the unknown, but the falcon accepts the moon as part of life, I enjoyed the contrast, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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An eerie write and the dog always senses something different and howls because he is scared of the unknown, but the falcon accepts the moon as part of life, I enjoyed the contrast, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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Dolly, thank you very much. :)
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Robert Herold
'Wonderful poem! It's atmospheric and conveys a lot in four lines. Is it haiku? In any case, you have a gift for imagery. You also have the perfect picture accompanying this! Fantastic!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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'Wonderful poem! It's atmospheric and conveys a lot in four lines. Is it haiku? In any case, you have a gift for imagery. You also have the perfect picture accompanying this! Fantastic!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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I mainly write haiku and other japanese poetry. This one is not a haiku but I wrote as if it was. Haiku have 17 syllables or less, this one has 20. The rules of the contest is write a four line poem with a 1/5/5/9 syllables count. So you are right to think it could be a haiku.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Robert. I love your Dracula t-shirt and your smile. Good photo.
Gypsy
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Stark and stunning--a fine example of a four-liner. Sugg: replace AT and A with evocative adjectives that will enhance the imagery. Also, since this is not a haiku, aren't you permitted to use a title vs just the first word of the poem?
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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Stark and stunning--a fine example of a four-liner. Sugg: replace AT and A with evocative adjectives that will enhance the imagery. Also, since this is not a haiku, aren't you permitted to use a title vs just the first word of the poem?
Comment Written 24-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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Mmm...you are right...I can change the title.
Thank you very much, Elisabeth. I appreciate your kindness and helpful feedback. The poem has a set amount of syllables. 1/5/5/9 so I'm not sure I can change it.
Gypsy hugs
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I mean simply swap out/in words to keep the syllable count. I like the new title!
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I'm sorry I can't think of any one syllables preposition to substitute AT or AS
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I meant evocative adjectives, not prepostions.
Comment from royowen
Some really great alliteration dear Gypsy, the dog or the ancestor of all dogs is the Wolf perhaps. But this is a wonderful contest entry, it possesses those great attributes of a poem, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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Some really great alliteration dear Gypsy, the dog or the ancestor of all dogs is the Wolf perhaps. But this is a wonderful contest entry, it possesses those great attributes of a poem, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much, Roy. I appreciate your kindness.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Tasuke
Although solid standing solitaire I find myself wanting more; if only because the imagery and atmosphere are so crisp, clear and concise; it whets the appetite and paints a picture as vivid as the one above it.
While the contest will not allow it this begs for more. (I certainly do.) Simply because I want more of your writing; for now I must bark at the moon.
I'm looking forward to more.
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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Although solid standing solitaire I find myself wanting more; if only because the imagery and atmosphere are so crisp, clear and concise; it whets the appetite and paints a picture as vivid as the one above it.
While the contest will not allow it this begs for more. (I certainly do.) Simply because I want more of your writing; for now I must bark at the moon.
I'm looking forward to more.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much, Sobrikay, I appreciate your time and review.
I write two poems a day so you can read more of my poems if you wish :). This one is for a contest with restrictive rules....four lines and a 1/5/5/9 syllables count.