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Voice in the Ocean

Four Line Poem

13 total reviews 
Comment from tempeste
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Now that is expressive poetry

Love how you describe those ample curves, loops in cursive format as waves.

Peaks to plunge is beautiful said.

Sorry I'm struggling to find the right words to describe the awesomeness of this poem .. I hope giving you a six star review does the job.


 Comment Written 06-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
    Thank you!! I LOVE that you noticed this...
Comment from lyenochka
Excellent
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Great use of alliteration and assonance in your brief four-line poem! I especially liked the metaphor " surf cursive waves " for the wavy handwriting. Congrats on your third place finish!


 Comment Written 11-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
    Thank you so much!!! That's awesome!
Comment from kmoss
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Six stars for only four lines, but this poem is absolutely beautiful.
Letters drawn give voice to thoughts is a wonderful line.
Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
    SIX STARS!!

    You are the best. Thank you so much :)

reply by kmoss on 07-Aug-2021
    No, you are the best! :)
Comment from dragonpoet
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This short poem intertwines the movement of thoughts from your muse to your ming with the rise and fall of actual writing.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
    Thank you so much :) so much for reading. You are awesome and a Great writer
reply by dragonpoet on 08-Aug-2021
    Don't mention it. And thanks for your compliment.
    Joan
Comment from Ric Myworld
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A "Voice in the ocean," sorta sounds like gurgles to me, but when you put pen to paper, or fingers to keyboard, you make the dips and dives, highs and lows scribe out poetry. :-) Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
    Haha. Thank YOU. Seriously man thank you.
Comment from rama devi
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I always love reading your work aloud, with the fantastic phonics, especially P and S sounds plus T, E and U in this write. Your letters give eloquent voice to thoughts. Love the near-consonance of F and V in surf cursive waves - like sweet silk on the tongue. Peaks to plunge speaks volumes with brevity.

Skillful, original, impacting and artistic write. Great flow and AHA effect too.
Bravo.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
    NO WAY. Thank you so so much!! Sixes from You are HUGE to me. Thank you. And when you get the Sound of it. Really Rama thank you.
reply by rama devi on 07-Aug-2021
    YAY! Thrilled you're thrilled!
Comment from Pantygynt
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I found the apparent oxymoron bringing this four liner to a close to be most intriguing. 'Peaks to plunge' creates several conflicting images, and that is before we relate it to the earlier part of the poem. This one gets my final six of the week.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
    WOW man. Wow. I just told Rama this too. But Sixes from you are HUGE to me. Seriously both of you are such Insanely talented people, your opinion especially means a lot to me man. Thank you so much, truly.
Comment from karenina
Excellent
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Beauty fully presented! It's just saying exactly like that! "surf cursive waves.". Wish I'd thought of that! So! This feels like a winner Gregory!!

Karenina

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
    Thank you Karenina you are AWESOME!! Thank you :)
reply by karenina on 08-Aug-2021
    I think you are...so there!

    Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
    ;) thank you
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I loved your well chosen words here to describe your muse pouring through your pen and inking the page with joyous magic, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
    Aw thank you Dolly :)
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Excellent
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Brilliant--first of all, you nailed the title--it enhanced the imagery of this short poem rather than repeating a line of poem like many do --what a waste of free space. The poem itself is ingenious.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
    THANK YOU!! I love YOUR reviews! I just told Rama and Pantygynt that. You guys are seriously so talented, which is why your opinion means so much. Plus I like you a lot ;)
reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 07-Aug-2021
    Right back at you. You flatter me--Reviewer Rama is in a class by herself. (Funny, she only once reviewed mine and I don't recall seeing any of her work). As for Panygynt--he's a master writer (and poet)--I read most of his chapters, but he's rarely read my work.