Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 27"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
18 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Alert! Alert! Jack knew about this gold! Darryl know as well, and allowed Cynthia to assume he was in the dark... Cynthia has no redeeming social value in my book! (But then again, that's what you had be thinking about Darryl!)-- Good luck keeping her off the land and away from trying to locate Annie and the rest! Geez. As always, your plots twist and turn...and ultimately always come together!
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Alert! Alert! Jack knew about this gold! Darryl know as well, and allowed Cynthia to assume he was in the dark... Cynthia has no redeeming social value in my book! (But then again, that's what you had be thinking about Darryl!)-- Good luck keeping her off the land and away from trying to locate Annie and the rest! Geez. As always, your plots twist and turn...and ultimately always come together!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Here we are! I wanted you to hurry up and read and then bang! I got swamped by life and by Fanstory and it's my turn to play catch up... Yes, Jack had discovered a lot of things but he hadn't shared them with anyone yet except Darryl who he trusted. Smiles, Carol
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Cool! The voice from beyond the grave!
Works for me!
Karenina
Comment from robyn corum
Carol,
I gotta admit, I was worried about Darryl for a long time, but now I'm settling down. I can see that he's for real and on the right team. Whew.
This was another fine chapter and so enjoyable. Moving on!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Carol,
I gotta admit, I was worried about Darryl for a long time, but now I'm settling down. I can see that he's for real and on the right team. Whew.
This was another fine chapter and so enjoyable. Moving on!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Yes, many thought Darryl was a bad guy, but he was just being loyal to Jack and doing what he was told. He had no idea who he could trust either. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Now that Darryl has unloaded all the secrets he's been safeguarding, Hank and Garth have a lot of grist for the mill to mull over. Lots of pieces are beginning to fit into a very large puzzle. Emmy's arrival has a very calming effect on Hank, as the story rolls on nicely.
Ralf
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Now that Darryl has unloaded all the secrets he's been safeguarding, Hank and Garth have a lot of grist for the mill to mull over. Lots of pieces are beginning to fit into a very large puzzle. Emmy's arrival has a very calming effect on Hank, as the story rolls on nicely.
Ralf
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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thanks for the awesome stars and the great review. You have followed the story and caught up at a fast pace. Thank you!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
I'm glad the agents are becoming aware of the issues of Cynthia, Michael and gold on the property. It was also great to meet Emmy, and to see her interacting with Hank.
My suggestions:
"That's quite a burden, Darryl has been carrying around."
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"That's quite a burden Darryl has been carrying around."
"Sorry, I skipped out on you,
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"Sorry I skipped out on you,
In your summary, I don't think this sentence should be between the ones about Mary, Faith and their family:
"Cynthia and Michael are searching for gold on Liz's property."
I would like to suggest that you place it before, or afterwards.
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I missed your promotions on the previous two chapters, and I didn't want to miss this one, too, so I decided to review this one first, and then go back and review the others if I have time (which I hope to do). Wow, you're fast!
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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I'm glad the agents are becoming aware of the issues of Cynthia, Michael and gold on the property. It was also great to meet Emmy, and to see her interacting with Hank.
My suggestions:
"That's quite a burden, Darryl has been carrying around."
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"That's quite a burden Darryl has been carrying around."
"Sorry, I skipped out on you,
-->
"Sorry I skipped out on you,
In your summary, I don't think this sentence should be between the ones about Mary, Faith and their family:
"Cynthia and Michael are searching for gold on Liz's property."
I would like to suggest that you place it before, or afterwards.
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I missed your promotions on the previous two chapters, and I didn't want to miss this one, too, so I decided to review this one first, and then go back and review the others if I have time (which I hope to do). Wow, you're fast!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Oh don't miss the $$$$. It's what keeps us going on this site and I always hope to provide a big enough thank you to my readers. I always appreciate the time taken to read and want to thank everyone.
Smiles, Carol
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You're very welcome, my friend, and I always appreciate your generous promotions. Yes, we have to keep the FS engine running! But if I have a chance, I'll go back to the missed chapters. You're a very good writer!
Blessings and love, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from ShirleyT1
You do such an excellent job in displaying with your well-written words, the growing relationship between these male characters. Their trust and concern is evident. And I like the relationship between Hank and Emmy. Another great chapter.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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You do such an excellent job in displaying with your well-written words, the growing relationship between these male characters. Their trust and concern is evident. And I like the relationship between Hank and Emmy. Another great chapter.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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It appears I am falling further and further behind, please forgive me. I appreciate the kindness of your review and am thrilled that you continue to enjoy it. Sending my thanks and a smile, Carol
Comment from AJ McCall
Wow. I sure missed a lot of whatever happened in the previosus chapters. But I loved this post, mainly because of Hank and his wife, lol. This detective story sure has lots of turns and twists, and I imagine it like a crime tv show. Also, I know I haven't reviewed much of your stuff lately but ... HIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII! :) :) ;)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Wow. I sure missed a lot of whatever happened in the previosus chapters. But I loved this post, mainly because of Hank and his wife, lol. This detective story sure has lots of turns and twists, and I imagine it like a crime tv show. Also, I know I haven't reviewed much of your stuff lately but ... HIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII! :) :) ;)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I am happy to see that you stopped by and enjoyed this chapter. Lives get busy and we miss seeing each other at times. I appreciate it when you can read and review, but I love it more when you enjoy what I have written.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Aww, you're very welcome, Carol!
Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad that Darryl let Hank and Garth know what Cynthia knows. Now how will they keep that woman and her nephew off the property? And when will then know about Miguel's ties to Caldwell? Ah, but I guess we have to give time for the lovebirds to be happy to be together.
Suggestions:
the Cranston's lawyers told him (Cranstons')
"My thoughts wonder (I wonder)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I'm glad that Darryl let Hank and Garth know what Cynthia knows. Now how will they keep that woman and her nephew off the property? And when will then know about Miguel's ties to Caldwell? Ah, but I guess we have to give time for the lovebirds to be happy to be together.
Suggestions:
the Cranston's lawyers told him (Cranstons')
"My thoughts wonder (I wonder)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I am working on that at the moment!!! Yes and the lovebirds need to enjoy some time together before we jump back into the depth of things. Then you'll be yelling at me to stop. LOL
suggestions fixed. Thanks!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
I'm glad that Emmy has arrived and will add more "women's intuition" to the events. The story continues to be intriguing and compelling. Perhaps they will start to be on guard about Cynthia now, and at least some key people now know about the gold, and will suspect that some people do want the land enough to commit murder. Well written as always.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I'm glad that Emmy has arrived and will add more "women's intuition" to the events. The story continues to be intriguing and compelling. Perhaps they will start to be on guard about Cynthia now, and at least some key people now know about the gold, and will suspect that some people do want the land enough to commit murder. Well written as always.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I hope we can start to see what's happening and change the course of a few things as we proceed. Though I do fear evil will still play its hand. I just can't seem to find a world without disaster lurking. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Another well-written chapter. Glad to see a husband and wife still very much in love with each other. That's unusual these days. Good dialogue between Darryl, Hank, and Garth to explain lots of details for us. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Another well-written chapter. Glad to see a husband and wife still very much in love with each other. That's unusual these days. Good dialogue between Darryl, Hank, and Garth to explain lots of details for us. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I hope to have cleared up a few things for the reader and add a bit of love as well. We need it because I think evil still lurks nearby. I love Hank and Emmy together.
Smiles, Carol
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Yes, the details in the dialogue helped. Looking forward to the next segment. Have a blessed weekend.
Comment from Bonnie Seach
This chapter 27 maintains a high standard of writing.
The continuity and good structuring continues.
The story flows evenly and smoothly.
Characters are easily identified and dialogue is well spaced.
It is descriptive, well formatted and fast moving. The account of Hank and Emmy meeting again is memorable and compelling. Best wishes for every success to completion.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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This chapter 27 maintains a high standard of writing.
The continuity and good structuring continues.
The story flows evenly and smoothly.
Characters are easily identified and dialogue is well spaced.
It is descriptive, well formatted and fast moving. The account of Hank and Emmy meeting again is memorable and compelling. Best wishes for every success to completion.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for your kind words and review of my story. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
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Awesome! Have a great day!
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Well done. Thank you for your friendly response 🤗🌹