Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 31"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
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Comment from karenina
Could you cram any more action in here with a shoe horn? I'm at he edge of my seat here! The drugs...at last discovered! Allie is either a wicked good detective or...wait, I'm starting to question everybody's motives now!
Not sure who started the fire...but my thoughts have drifted back to those trucks going in and out of the church. What's Father Jon up to these days???? I need to stop! I want to dig in and catch up because I'm SO involved in your story but alas, I have an appointment I can't miss! Who exactly started this fire!? I know...be patient... (smile)
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Could you cram any more action in here with a shoe horn? I'm at he edge of my seat here! The drugs...at last discovered! Allie is either a wicked good detective or...wait, I'm starting to question everybody's motives now!
Not sure who started the fire...but my thoughts have drifted back to those trucks going in and out of the church. What's Father Jon up to these days???? I need to stop! I want to dig in and catch up because I'm SO involved in your story but alas, I have an appointment I can't miss! Who exactly started this fire!? I know...be patient... (smile)
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Allie is a investigative journalist...did I make it too easy that she discovered the drugs? Let me know if you think that should have been different. Did you figure out that Cynthia started the fire ...to scare Liz...not knowing that Mason has a scheme going with the drugs. She accidentally messed up that process and Garth and hank are on the hunt.
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No, if it had been anyone but Allie I'd say it was a quick "solve"--but her background totally preps her to be aleg up from the rest re: drugs. Yup...SINthia is an arsonist as well as a pain in the.....
Kareina
Comment from robyn corum
Carol,
Well, crap. A whole new level of bad. And what are the chances that Allie will get to tell the good guys about those drugs asap AND that they'll still be there when she does? UGH. You're driving me crazy. How may wrenches can you throw in ONE story??????
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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Carol,
Well, crap. A whole new level of bad. And what are the chances that Allie will get to tell the good guys about those drugs asap AND that they'll still be there when she does? UGH. You're driving me crazy. How may wrenches can you throw in ONE story??????
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Oh my...just turned to the next page and you are still reading away...Awesome my sweet girl. Yes, discovering the drugs is one more big clue. Smiles, Carol
Comment from ShirleyT1
Chapter 31is a great chapter. It's good to see some things that were hidden now surfacing. Your character's reactions through your words and dialogue is excellent. Another great read!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Chapter 31is a great chapter. It's good to see some things that were hidden now surfacing. Your character's reactions through your words and dialogue is excellent. Another great read!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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So sorry... I answered a whole page of reviews, hit save, and they vanished with the crash of my computer. Just know that I appreciate your review and enjoyment of the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
It seems that poor, determined Allie will need medical attention, pronto. She certainly made an incredible discovery! But why would someone torch the building, knowing that it contained a costly cache of drugs? Was its discovery imminent? Or was another party involved?
Errors and suggestions:
and it splashed on multiple wine barrels too.
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and it splashed on multiple wine barrels too."
Assured she was alone, she tried to pry the bottom of the barrel,
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Assured she was alone, she tried to pry open the bottom of the barrel,
You've got enough on your hands at the moment.
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You've got enough on your hands at the moment."
but pure determination kept her feet moving one in front of the other until she reached the courtyard.
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but pure determination kept her feet moving, one in front of the other, until she reached the courtyard.
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Allie has a good nose for sniffing out trouble. I hope it doesn't cause her any more harm.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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It seems that poor, determined Allie will need medical attention, pronto. She certainly made an incredible discovery! But why would someone torch the building, knowing that it contained a costly cache of drugs? Was its discovery imminent? Or was another party involved?
Errors and suggestions:
and it splashed on multiple wine barrels too.
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and it splashed on multiple wine barrels too."
Assured she was alone, she tried to pry the bottom of the barrel,
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Assured she was alone, she tried to pry open the bottom of the barrel,
You've got enough on your hands at the moment.
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You've got enough on your hands at the moment."
but pure determination kept her feet moving one in front of the other until she reached the courtyard.
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but pure determination kept her feet moving, one in front of the other, until she reached the courtyard.
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Allie has a good nose for sniffing out trouble. I hope it doesn't cause her any more harm.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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It was just a few stitches ripped and allowed fresh bleeding, but she is good.
My internet is till being stupid so I am being quick about answering so i can get caught up.
Smiles, Carol
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Thanks for your thoughtful reply. I'm sure it's hard to stay on top of all the correspondence, when you're writing chapters in such rapid-fire succession! And then you've got a finicky a/k/a "stupid" lol computer to contend with.
Love and prayers, Mary Kay xoxo
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Yes, since you're posting the chapters at such a fast clip, expediency is important. I hope your internet recovers soon. Love and prayers, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from Patty Palmer
Another great chapter I think. I'm really liking these characters. You portray their personalities very well. You are so good at this! I look forward to each new chapter!
xxoo Patty
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Another great chapter I think. I'm really liking these characters. You portray their personalities very well. You are so good at this! I look forward to each new chapter!
xxoo Patty
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Thank you for the review and for continuing to follow. I greatly appreciate it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, the plot thickens and more criminal activity. The questions abound, who knew what, who is involved. Is Allie really out because of her wound or was there something in the water she drank. Who if anyone was watching her.
Good stuff.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Hmm, the plot thickens and more criminal activity. The questions abound, who knew what, who is involved. Is Allie really out because of her wound or was there something in the water she drank. Who if anyone was watching her.
Good stuff.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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i am so glad I was able to thank you for the six stars through messaging earlier because I would hate to have you think I didn't appreciate you and them. You are awesome and I am grateful.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
So Allie has discovered drugs in one of the seared wine barrels, is it Miguel that's smuggling and hiding drugs in the barrel, or is it something to do with Cynthia, certainly Mason Caldwell is, did they start the fire to destroy the evidence? All these questions will be answered by the talented author. Beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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So Allie has discovered drugs in one of the seared wine barrels, is it Miguel that's smuggling and hiding drugs in the barrel, or is it something to do with Cynthia, certainly Mason Caldwell is, did they start the fire to destroy the evidence? All these questions will be answered by the talented author. Beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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I need my internet to co-operate. I can write on Word but when I get on Fanstory or goggle it keeps kicking me off. So much for country living and storms...I am so far behind!
thanks for the review and always for your kind words. I am blessed indeed!
Smiles, Carol
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Well done, you?re a trooper Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think Mason was keeping everyone distracted while he sent Miguel of another of his goons into cause the fire. Now, I don't think Daryl is a baddie, too obvious because he has a prison record, anyway, Jack was his friend, he wouldn't do anything against his widow. Now we need someone to rush out and help Allie before she loses too much blood and enables her to tell Hank and Garth what she has discovered. That was probably what was hidden in the church. Jon wouldn't have had any say in what was being stacked there. Moving on! Loved this part again, well done, Carol! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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I think Mason was keeping everyone distracted while he sent Miguel of another of his goons into cause the fire. Now, I don't think Daryl is a baddie, too obvious because he has a prison record, anyway, Jack was his friend, he wouldn't do anything against his widow. Now we need someone to rush out and help Allie before she loses too much blood and enables her to tell Hank and Garth what she has discovered. That was probably what was hidden in the church. Jon wouldn't have had any say in what was being stacked there. Moving on! Loved this part again, well done, Carol! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Hmm... there's a lot happening behind that sealed door in the church. Something is going to happen and I hope soon.
I need my internet to co-operate. I can write on Word but when I get on Fanstory or goggle it keeps kicking me off. So much for country living and storms...I am so far behind!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's hard to ever know who is for you or against you for sure. But in this story it seems that everyone has a stake in the vineyard for either drugs, wine, or gold. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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It's hard to ever know who is for you or against you for sure. But in this story it seems that everyone has a stake in the vineyard for either drugs, wine, or gold. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Popular place it seems! Maybe I could set up a cafe and sell dinner/ wine tour tickets. The headliner could read: Enjoy the food and watch the crazy fools next door... well, maybe I need a better line than that!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Allie discovered the drugs, but now is unconscious. Will a bad person find her before Hank or Garth? I am really worried right now. This is very good writing. Thank you for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Allie discovered the drugs, but now is unconscious. Will a bad person find her before Hank or Garth? I am really worried right now. This is very good writing. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Her knife wound has opened with all the work she was doing... she's bleeding and in pain. Now what?
thanks for the kind review...Will try to show you what happens next soon.
smiles, Carol