Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 40"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
19 total reviews
Comment from Leann DS
Great dialogue and all the way through, excellent imagery. Keep it up!
One typo:
"I wasn't aware we had guests." Liz stood in the doorway, staring at the unkempt woman talking to Cassidy. She wore a soft pink blouse and a pair of blue jeans with cowboy boots. Liz's blonde hair was swept away from her face, twisted in a knot on the top of her head. A pair of silver hoops dangled from her ear lobs. She was a vision except for the stern look on her face.
lobs should be Lobes
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Great dialogue and all the way through, excellent imagery. Keep it up!
One typo:
"I wasn't aware we had guests." Liz stood in the doorway, staring at the unkempt woman talking to Cassidy. She wore a soft pink blouse and a pair of blue jeans with cowboy boots. Liz's blonde hair was swept away from her face, twisted in a knot on the top of her head. A pair of silver hoops dangled from her ear lobs. She was a vision except for the stern look on her face.
lobs should be Lobes
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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You are catching up, girlfriend.
I fixed the "e" and all is well. I finally just finished catching up myself on the hundred or so reviews. I'm not complaining but I hate to fall that far behind.
Where's my ice cream? LOL
Love ya, Carol
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Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Poor Mary didn't take the news well at all, but what could be expected? It was very disorienting to learn of this immense betrayal and that this man, who she loved all her life, even in his death, now lived as a man of badly tainted character.
Errors and suggestions:
"He came to the hospital after the prison stabbing.
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"He came to the hospital after the prison stabbing."
A pair of silver hoops dangled from her ear lobs.
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A pair of silver hoops dangled from her ear lobes.
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With Mary confusing Liz for Faith, one would almost think they were identical twins. But they must have been fraternal twins, if they had different hair colors -- unless Liz was dyeing her hair.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Poor Mary didn't take the news well at all, but what could be expected? It was very disorienting to learn of this immense betrayal and that this man, who she loved all her life, even in his death, now lived as a man of badly tainted character.
Errors and suggestions:
"He came to the hospital after the prison stabbing.
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"He came to the hospital after the prison stabbing."
A pair of silver hoops dangled from her ear lobs.
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A pair of silver hoops dangled from her ear lobes.
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With Mary confusing Liz for Faith, one would almost think they were identical twins. But they must have been fraternal twins, if they had different hair colors -- unless Liz was dyeing her hair.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Sorry for the cut and paste but I am now currently 158 responses behind. I want to make the changes, thank everyone and start fresh. Wishing you a great day.
Please forgive me for being so far behind on answering reviews, fixing suggestions, and thanking everyone for their kindness. Good thing a birthday only comes once a year. I posted to my family that I was cooking and for the first time in years, my house was over flowing for two days after two days of cooking. Now in three days, Matthew starts filming again and I must cook for them. This woman is tired. Thank you for all your support and kindness.
Smiles, Carol
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One day, I opened up FanStory and I had about 18 replies... turned out, they were mostly from you. Ditto, ditto, ditto... it's all good. Bless your heart!
Comment from karenina
Oh crap! I can not drop a five here when only a six will do! The problem with reading this in a few days is I don't have nearly enough sixes....and justifiably they should all go to you!
This chapter is everything I prayed it would be and more!
I cried.
To hear Jon is alive? Every fairy tale she told herself is shattered. Death was final. This is torture!
Annie! We need Annie! And (can I handle any more?)-- The twins!
All the crime stuff is on hold for me. This is yet another Carolism! Nobody layers faith, love and family over crime like you!
Six MILLION stars!
(Remember I said that cu Have may be out!)
Bravo!
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Oh crap! I can not drop a five here when only a six will do! The problem with reading this in a few days is I don't have nearly enough sixes....and justifiably they should all go to you!
This chapter is everything I prayed it would be and more!
I cried.
To hear Jon is alive? Every fairy tale she told herself is shattered. Death was final. This is torture!
Annie! We need Annie! And (can I handle any more?)-- The twins!
All the crime stuff is on hold for me. This is yet another Carolism! Nobody layers faith, love and family over crime like you!
Six MILLION stars!
(Remember I said that cu Have may be out!)
Bravo!
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Just exactly the reaction I prayed for...thank you so so much! Yes, the crime is great but the emotions twisted and wrapped around family and their faith and love is the best! I am so happy you loved this one!
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If it makes me cry I KNOW you're doing everything right!
Karenina
Comment from ShirleyT1
It's so strange yet so true that we believe what we want to believe about a person. Poor Mary - her dream of Jon shattered - what heartbreak. You have written another intense chapter, and as always I eagerly anticipate the next.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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It's so strange yet so true that we believe what we want to believe about a person. Poor Mary - her dream of Jon shattered - what heartbreak. You have written another intense chapter, and as always I eagerly anticipate the next.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Sorry for the cut and paste but I am now currently 158 responses behind. I want to make the changes, thank everyone and start fresh. Wishing you a great day.
Please forgive me for being so far behind on answering reviews, fixing suggestions, and thanking everyone for their kindness. Good thing a birthday only comes once a year. I posted to my family that I was cooking and for the first time in years, my house was over flowing for two days after two days of cooking. Now in three days, Matthew starts filming again and I must cook for them. This woman is tired. Thank you for all your support and kindness.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Patty Palmer
I'm waiting to see what happens next. I get so caught up in your story and the plot keeps getting deeper and deeper! You have all these twists and turns in it.
God bless!!
xxoo
Patty
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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I'm waiting to see what happens next. I get so caught up in your story and the plot keeps getting deeper and deeper! You have all these twists and turns in it.
God bless!!
xxoo
Patty
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Sorry for the cut and paste but I am now currently 158 responses behind. I want to make the changes, thank everyone and start fresh. Wishing you a great day.
Please forgive me for being so far behind on answering reviews, fixing suggestions, and thanking everyone for their kindness. Good thing a birthday only comes once a year. I posted to my family that I was cooking and for the first time in years, my house was over flowing for two days after two days of cooking. Now in three days, Matthew starts filming again and I must cook for them. This woman is tired. Thank you for all your support and kindness.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lancellot
Ah, love is blind and young love is blind and deaf. A very emotional chapter and a roller coasters ride from Mary and Cassidy. Now, we are all thinking, is Faith and Liz sisters, twins separated at birth or something else going on as the threads come together.
Good stuff.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Ah, love is blind and young love is blind and deaf. A very emotional chapter and a roller coasters ride from Mary and Cassidy. Now, we are all thinking, is Faith and Liz sisters, twins separated at birth or something else going on as the threads come together.
Good stuff.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much. My apologies for being so late in responding. It must be "old age" settling in or all the company the last few days. But I do appreciate your time, review and thoughts. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
OK, the story about the twins is unfolding slowly but steadily. As the mother, I am sure Mary would have a gut feeling about Faith. How does Hank feel about this? Hope he wouldn't make things complicated! umm! let's see! Good going!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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OK, the story about the twins is unfolding slowly but steadily. As the mother, I am sure Mary would have a gut feeling about Faith. How does Hank feel about this? Hope he wouldn't make things complicated! umm! let's see! Good going!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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thanks for reading and following the story. Appreciate it very much. Mary will be torn in shreds as she sees her long lost child.
smiles, Carol
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Seeing is believing! Now that Mary has seen Liz, she is stunned by the resemblance to her daughter Faith. So now the truth is right before her eyes. Will Mary guess the truth or will Hank be the one the tell her?
It appears that Mary's prayers are being answered, one by one.
Ralf
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Seeing is believing! Now that Mary has seen Liz, she is stunned by the resemblance to her daughter Faith. So now the truth is right before her eyes. Will Mary guess the truth or will Hank be the one the tell her?
It appears that Mary's prayers are being answered, one by one.
Ralf
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Mary has a very good heart and has shared it caring for so many when she did not have to do it. I pray that now she will be blessed with some good. though Liz might not be as acceptable to the idea.
Thanks so much, Ralf. Your review and stars are very kind.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Even though I knew that Liz was the other twin, your writing still gave me goosebumps. It is all coming out. The truth. The pain of many years. Such good writing. Thank you!
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Even though I knew that Liz was the other twin, your writing still gave me goosebumps. It is all coming out. The truth. The pain of many years. Such good writing. Thank you!
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Great! Goosebumps I like. Thank you, Wendy.....
I fear the road isn't going to be smooth sailing yet and we still have to track down Annie and save her.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Hooray - Mary met her other daughter. Now they will have to let them know, right? It probably wasn't the timing that Hank was hoping for but after that avalanche of Jon's bad history that Cassidy dumped on her, this can only be good! But they really should get off that patio. Who knows if Cynthia is snooping!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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Hooray - Mary met her other daughter. Now they will have to let them know, right? It probably wasn't the timing that Hank was hoping for but after that avalanche of Jon's bad history that Cassidy dumped on her, this can only be good! But they really should get off that patio. Who knows if Cynthia is snooping!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2021
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I think Tango is around the corner watching...At least that's his job!! Thanks for watching out for that sneaky Cynthia though. she's not to be trusted. Smiles, Carol