Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 49"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
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Comment from karenina
Oh good Lord! So Annie IS at the church with the others after all? Mason may have made a grave mistake telling Jon Annie was collateral damage.... Imagine! Jon has a chance to redeem himself. That was SINthia in the. blanket I assume? Hmmm. Okay....I don't want anyone to burn to death...but singed hair and flaming nerves of fear? She deserves it! Let's read the next chapter and see!
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Oh good Lord! So Annie IS at the church with the others after all? Mason may have made a grave mistake telling Jon Annie was collateral damage.... Imagine! Jon has a chance to redeem himself. That was SINthia in the. blanket I assume? Hmmm. Okay....I don't want anyone to burn to death...but singed hair and flaming nerves of fear? She deserves it! Let's read the next chapter and see!
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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I couldn't burn anyone to death either. A few wanted me to write more about the heroics of saving everyone from the fire, but I don't know if that lends anymore to the story.
Smiles, CArol
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I'm with you. Hitchcock was a master of leaving a lot of the "graphic" stuff to the imagination and it was ever so much more vivid in my own mind!
I think, like Goldilocks said...your choice was "Just right!"
Karenina
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
I'm happy that Mary is softening her stance concerning Jon; it's taking her some time to adjust. But Jon may die soon, and not by his own hand.
Mason is even more heartless than I thought, and Miguel is a murderous thug. Annie isn't just a hostage; she's in mortal danger, along with all of those poor migrants.
I didn't find any errors, yay!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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I'm happy that Mary is softening her stance concerning Jon; it's taking her some time to adjust. But Jon may die soon, and not by his own hand.
Mason is even more heartless than I thought, and Miguel is a murderous thug. Annie isn't just a hostage; she's in mortal danger, along with all of those poor migrants.
I didn't find any errors, yay!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Yes, it is all about to come to a head...some will live and others will not. Guess we just wait and see.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Patty Palmer
I'm scared to death for Annie. I don't know why she has anything to do with what's going on. She was just out with her dog when she got kidnapped, I hope that Jon has enough guts to at least try to save Annie! Great job!'
xxoo
Patty
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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I'm scared to death for Annie. I don't know why she has anything to do with what's going on. She was just out with her dog when she got kidnapped, I hope that Jon has enough guts to at least try to save Annie! Great job!'
xxoo
Patty
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Mason thinks if Liz believes the ranch is cursed she will sell it and go back to the city. He doesn't care that she's a child...it's just a means to his end desire.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
The action continues in this chapter. The bad boys Miguel and Mason are upto their dirty tricks. Mary and Faith are rediscovering each other. Where is Jon? What happened to him.? So many questions. Plot getting thicker.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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The action continues in this chapter. The bad boys Miguel and Mason are upto their dirty tricks. Mary and Faith are rediscovering each other. Where is Jon? What happened to him.? So many questions. Plot getting thicker.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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I hope Miguel and Mason meet their match pretty soon and they get what they have coming to them.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
I thought Jon had a gun hidden. Why isn't he using it? I guess he feels he's responsible for enough death? I guess more has to happen to change Jon to show he has become a different person.
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"Let loose of me." This sounded odd to me. Wouldn't "let go of me" be more natural? Miguel wouldn't say "loose" would he?
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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I thought Jon had a gun hidden. Why isn't he using it? I guess he feels he's responsible for enough death? I guess more has to happen to change Jon to show he has become a different person.
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"Let loose of me." This sounded odd to me. Wouldn't "let go of me" be more natural? Miguel wouldn't say "loose" would he?
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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He does have a gun hidden but as you discovered he didn't use it until the next chapter....trying to save Annie.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lancellot
Is it wrong that I wanted Jon to die? He has a gun but is still too weak and too pathetic to use it. Like that foolish woman wrapped up. They are beyond redemption. Good work writing them that way.
notes:
"You said babies. Were you just upset?"
- she said, baby.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Is it wrong that I wanted Jon to die? He has a gun but is still too weak and too pathetic to use it. Like that foolish woman wrapped up. They are beyond redemption. Good work writing them that way.
notes:
"You said babies. Were you just upset?"
- she said, baby.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Faith was referring to the original conversation with Jon when he showed up with Cynthia....Mary slipped and said:
?I don?t want to hear your lies. I?m not the foolish fifteen-year-old girl you left behind. I lived on the streets until Mrs. Bartlett took me into her home. I gave birth, and the nuns took my babies from me when they were two days old. I struggled to survive??
Thanks for checking on that though because I wasn't sure after you mentioned it.
As for Jon...the jury's still out!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
So much happens in this chapter! I hope the agents following Miguel arrive in time to prevent disaster. Mason and Miguel are so evil! Great conversation between Mary and Faith. Looking forward to the next segment. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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So much happens in this chapter! I hope the agents following Miguel arrive in time to prevent disaster. Mason and Miguel are so evil! Great conversation between Mary and Faith. Looking forward to the next segment. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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My favorite parts of the story are the emotional connections even though the story is about other things. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Chilling conclusion to this devastating chapter--the enormity of the pending mass murder is beyond bearing. I hope against hope they will be spared next chapter. Luckily, I'm a day in arrears so I know you've already posted it ... I'm off.
Mary stared out the window, [SUGG OMIT thinking and] reliving all the events in her life that had led to this moment.
She scolded herself for the [SUGG OMIT resentment and] hatred she'd felt this morning
[SUGG OMIT In his mind,] he envisioned men, women and children
Seconds later, a brick from the flower bed crashed through the glass door, [shattering glass piece=>SUGG SPEWING SHARDS] and splintered wood across the room.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Chilling conclusion to this devastating chapter--the enormity of the pending mass murder is beyond bearing. I hope against hope they will be spared next chapter. Luckily, I'm a day in arrears so I know you've already posted it ... I'm off.
Mary stared out the window, [SUGG OMIT thinking and] reliving all the events in her life that had led to this moment.
She scolded herself for the [SUGG OMIT resentment and] hatred she'd felt this morning
[SUGG OMIT In his mind,] he envisioned men, women and children
Seconds later, a brick from the flower bed crashed through the glass door, [shattering glass piece=>SUGG SPEWING SHARDS] and splintered wood across the room.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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As par for the course, I am far behind on getting corrections done and thanking everyone for their help and reviews. Please know that I always appreciate you.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
Miguel is a horrid, cruel unprincipled man, much like the devilish boss he works for, they care only for money, and nothing for people. But I suspect you have justice in mind for these rampantly desperate men. But they seem headed for destruction, determined to take as many as they can with them. It seems like Faith wants to know her father. Beautifully written Carol. How's Matthew? Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Miguel is a horrid, cruel unprincipled man, much like the devilish boss he works for, they care only for money, and nothing for people. But I suspect you have justice in mind for these rampantly desperate men. But they seem headed for destruction, determined to take as many as they can with them. It seems like Faith wants to know her father. Beautifully written Carol. How's Matthew? Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Thanks for asking about Matthew. He's holding it together but some are attacking him as if he could do anything about the actress staying in California instead of coming back. He's not that kind of guy! I am praying it works out for him. Smiles, Carol
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I?m sure with a caring God and a mum like you how can he miss?
Comment from Judy Lawless
Oh, Carol, I sure hope someone arrives in time to stop this! Surely they must or the story will be over, right? lol Your imagination never ceases to amaze me. You are becoming a master of crime stories. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Oh, Carol, I sure hope someone arrives in time to stop this! Surely they must or the story will be over, right? lol Your imagination never ceases to amaze me. You are becoming a master of crime stories. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the kind compliment. Made my day!
Now you and I know I couldn't let those people die in that basement...no way! And we know that Annie is alive even though Mason wanted her killed... what's up with that? LOL
Smiles, Carol