Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 105 "Seize Faith"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
Sometimes life can really hurt- I quite agree JLR and that is a great opening line for your Acrostic Decima poem about habing faith that He will always hear you. Nicely done, cheers
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Sometimes life can really hurt- I quite agree JLR and that is a great opening line for your Acrostic Decima poem about habing faith that He will always hear you. Nicely done, cheers
Comment Written 13-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Pearl, I delight in your affirmation! Peace of Christ be with you 🙏🙏
Comment from Christina D. Hissong
I liked this poem and the great faith that must be behind it. I agree with the message trying to be conveyed. I read the author's short biography and hope he has a wonderful second retirement. I'm retired, too, and have discovered Fan Story and am enjoying the sense of community.
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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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I liked this poem and the great faith that must be behind it. I agree with the message trying to be conveyed. I read the author's short biography and hope he has a wonderful second retirement. I'm retired, too, and have discovered Fan Story and am enjoying the sense of community.
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Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Thank you Christina - welcome to FS
Comment from Sanku
Seize Faith ,A very significant title and the poen is a well constructed acrostic.Every line leans towards the final line .have faith in Him.That could be a solution...
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Seize Faith ,A very significant title and the poen is a well constructed acrostic.Every line leans towards the final line .have faith in Him.That could be a solution...
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Thank you for reviewing my poem.
Comment from June Sargent
You have met the club challenge beautifully with this poem. It wasn't an easy format for me. But I did try. Your words of faith are wise and timeless. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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You have met the club challenge beautifully with this poem. It wasn't an easy format for me. But I did try. Your words of faith are wise and timeless. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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June thank you for this kind validation. 🎶🎶👍
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello JLR!
Commanding words in a poetic form that is new to me. A powerful message.
Two thoughts to consider:'
1. First line = seven syllables
2. Icky events that bruise =
"Icky" is not a powerful word. Suggestions:
a. I'll-timed
b. I'll-thought
But I would also suggest to remove "that" and replace with "can" to arrive at 8 syllables:
I'll-thought events can also bruise
Hoping I have helped and not offended.
Best wishes!
Diane
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Hello JLR!
Commanding words in a poetic form that is new to me. A powerful message.
Two thoughts to consider:'
1. First line = seven syllables
2. Icky events that bruise =
"Icky" is not a powerful word. Suggestions:
a. I'll-timed
b. I'll-thought
But I would also suggest to remove "that" and replace with "can" to arrive at 8 syllables:
I'll-thought events can also bruise
Hoping I have helped and not offended.
Best wishes!
Diane
Comment Written 08-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Hi Diane --- using www.howmanysyllables.com/syllable_counter/
I disagree that the first line is seven syllables.
I did use your wonderful suggestion and went with Ill-timed events.
Never offended and always grateful, thank you! 🙏🙏
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Good Morning!
So pleased to know I didn?t offend, but could you help an old English teacher out?
Some/times/life/can/ real/ly/hurt... = 7.
What are my old eyes missing? 🙃
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Hah!
I did my homework!
You are definitely correct that some sites divide really into re/al/ly!
Wow!
I never knew!
Must be a northern Michigan "thing" to pronounce it with two syllables!
Thank you, and have a "re/al/ly wonderful Sunday! :)
diane
Comment from Janice Canerdy
A rhyming acrostic written in a specific style/form--quite an accomplishment! The spiritual message the poem conveys is powerful. No matter what pain and slights we suffer from those around us, the Lord can grant peace if we ask, believing.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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A rhyming acrostic written in a specific style/form--quite an accomplishment! The spiritual message the poem conveys is powerful. No matter what pain and slights we suffer from those around us, the Lord can grant peace if we ask, believing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Janice - thank you as always!
Comment from RGstar
Not familiar with the form, yet, I hardly ever think about the structure when reading a poem, and how well you pen this.
Short, strong lines that project, almost stabbing, defying the reader to look away.
Bravo.
Have a great Sunday.
My best.
RGstar
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Not familiar with the form, yet, I hardly ever think about the structure when reading a poem, and how well you pen this.
Short, strong lines that project, almost stabbing, defying the reader to look away.
Bravo.
Have a great Sunday.
My best.
RGstar
Comment Written 08-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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RSstar, as always I value you kind inpit, Be well! 🙏🙏🎶🎶🎶
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' Seize Faith ' , is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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' Seize Faith ' , is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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As always, Duchess, I appreciate your validation, I trust you Sunday has been filled with Peace and Joy!
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JLR, you're very welcome,
Bless you, the Duchess.
May Peace and Joy be yours
Comment from visionary1234
A good acrostic, though a little strained at times - eg using the word 'transfuse' sort of leaves us hanging? transfuse what to where??? Or was that your intention? And Abba??? May I ask you to explain what that means??? (Apart from the musical group of course! :):):)
Sharyn
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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A good acrostic, though a little strained at times - eg using the word 'transfuse' sort of leaves us hanging? transfuse what to where??? Or was that your intention? And Abba??? May I ask you to explain what that means??? (Apart from the musical group of course! :):):)
Sharyn
Comment Written 08-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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ABBA means Father thanks
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Thx!!!
Comment from royowen
Sometimes life isn't exactly a barrel of laughs, and the natural thing to do is ride it out, but I suspect, when one is tackling a new form, the thoughts are much more stressful than a form that one is comfortable, but you're a good writer, and this was fine, well done Jim, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Sometimes life isn't exactly a barrel of laughs, and the natural thing to do is ride it out, but I suspect, when one is tackling a new form, the thoughts are much more stressful than a form that one is comfortable, but you're a good writer, and this was fine, well done Jim, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Roy thank you - the forced syllablic count does challenge this free verser, buy alas, that is the reason for the club, it practice, hopeyour Sunday has been awesome!
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It?s been great Jim.